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Aghast

A (slightly modified) Octogram poem

102 total reviews 
Comment from John Parkin
Exceptional
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I loved your Oct gram poem and the pulsating picture depicting the swamp gas and greenish glow. The rhyming scheme was great and the two verses were separate but continued on to a final ending of winning over another unsuspecting soul. Great work.

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 07-Jun-2016
    Thanks for reading AGHAST, John, and for the awesome comments and exceptional stellar rating.
    I appreciate your time, as well as your thoughtful support.
    More than any of that, I'm just damn glad you enjoyed it.
    ~Dean :}
reply by John Parkin on 07-Jun-2016
    You are welcome.
reply by John Parkin on 08-Jun-2016
    You are welcome.
Comment from Henry Carlyle
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Great job! Excellent rhyming, intricate but didn't seem forced; likewise with the metre, I thought you wove it together in a creative way which preserved the flow, but was still coherent (I presume this would be difficult with so many short lines).

Great staccato feel, and I enjoyed the story you told. Don't have anything specific to comment on, I think you set out to do exactly this, and it worked beautifully.

HC

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 07-Jun-2016
    Thanks very much for the R&R, Henry.
    I sincerely appreciate your time.
    ~Dean
Comment from Mastery
Exceptional
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Boy she turned out to be a pig. a scry one at that. I am aghast. LOL..Good writ as usual, my friend. The setting is the whole thing. Roaming around in the swamp at night, someone deserves her.


 Comment Written 05-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 07-Jun-2016
    Thanks for reading AGHAST, Bob, and for the awesome comments and exceptional stellar rating.
    I appreciate your time, as well as your thoughtful support.
    More than any of that, I'm just damn glad you enjoyed it.
    ~Dean :}
Comment from Winslow
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Dear Dean,

You stare aghast since you'll not last. She makes you squirm and leaves you cold. This greenish creature is something to behold.

Warm regards,

Winslow

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
    Hahaha, thank you, Winslow.
    I appreciate the R&R.
    ~Dean
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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Another great octogram, Dean,there has been so many, and all very different subjects. I've been trying to get the meter right with my writings, and I see yours is a perfect flow. Great read, and great artwork, as always,
cheers,
valda.

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
    Thank for reading, Pearl.
    Cheers...
    ~Dean
Comment from flylikeaneagle
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Dean: I asked my computer (she's a ten), what a bile bog is and she got scared
and disappeared. The green gue and slime allures your friend for end times.
No school for him, just her. Great spooky tunes and photos. You nailed the beat
and the B repeat!!! Ok, I'm flying! flylikeaneagle

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
    Hahaha...
    Thanks for the R&R, Nancy.
    ~Dean
Comment from create4christ
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Interesting! Very nice rhymes and rhythm. I'm really starting to like the octogram poetry form. Very good description. I like the way you illustrated it too. And, I liked how you read it. Awesome, Dean.

Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
    As always, thank you for the R&R, create4christ.
    ~Dean
Comment from GWHARGIS
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Quite a setting. The bog threatens us with images of snakes and creepy crawlies . Add in a spectre and you turn it into the thing nightmares are made of. Great imagery and unique style. Great job. Gretchen

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
    Thank you for the R&R, Gretchen.
    ~Dean
Comment from L.lora
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Oh so ghoulish and quite
well done. Your poetic
language is some of the
best, it pulls your reader
through to the end without
releasing its hold. Kudos,
no nits or spags. Lora

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
    Thanks for reading, Lora.
    ~Dean
Comment from Ric Myworld
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Thanks for another of your fine poems with word descriptions so vivid and a graphics presentation that takes all the verses to another level. Great job. :-)

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
    Thanks, Ric.
    ~Dean