FAMILY TIES.
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Comment from dragonpoet
Nice poetic description of family fun on a holiday night. Food and music seems a part of every holiday no matter whether the holiday is religious of secular.
I thing that 'Every feeding' should be changed to "All the food'.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
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Nice poetic description of family fun on a holiday night. Food and music seems a part of every holiday no matter whether the holiday is religious of secular.
I thing that 'Every feeding' should be changed to "All the food'.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 03-Oct-2018
Comment from Rubylou
Hello,
This sounds like a wonderful happy time of celebration for family and friends.
I can sense the excitement through your words and bouncy flow from line to line of description.
I was not familiar with this festival but it certainly interesting.
Rubylou
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Hello,
This sounds like a wonderful happy time of celebration for family and friends.
I can sense the excitement through your words and bouncy flow from line to line of description.
I was not familiar with this festival but it certainly interesting.
Rubylou
Comment Written 03-Oct-2018
Comment from c_lucas
Congratulations on your win. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
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Congratulations on your win. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2018
Comment from TPAC
I found this write filled with many charming aspects of interests, a very strong line structuring in a smooth given flow. Good read in my opinion of this particular write.
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I found this write filled with many charming aspects of interests, a very strong line structuring in a smooth given flow. Good read in my opinion of this particular write.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2018
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hi Rhonnie, this sounds like so much fun, and I enjoyed learning about the festival of lights, or Diwali. You made it sound wonderful and your rhyming is great, unforced and makes for a very smooth flow. I have no suggestions for improvement. The picture is perfect for the poem, too. I also enjoyed the author notes and I am sure I would love to go to this festival after reading your poem.
Thanks for sharing it Rhonnie, and enjoy the rest of your day/night, blessings, Ana.
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Hi Rhonnie, this sounds like so much fun, and I enjoyed learning about the festival of lights, or Diwali. You made it sound wonderful and your rhyming is great, unforced and makes for a very smooth flow. I have no suggestions for improvement. The picture is perfect for the poem, too. I also enjoyed the author notes and I am sure I would love to go to this festival after reading your poem.
Thanks for sharing it Rhonnie, and enjoy the rest of your day/night, blessings, Ana.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2018
Comment from jenintorre
What a wonderful up,ifting poem you have written. The imagery is fantastic, it really felt as though I was there. I love the rhyme and rhythm and colourful artwork that you have chosen. Delightful. Best wkshes. Jen.
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What a wonderful up,ifting poem you have written. The imagery is fantastic, it really felt as though I was there. I love the rhyme and rhythm and colourful artwork that you have chosen. Delightful. Best wkshes. Jen.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2018
Comment from Anntonette
This is like a Carpe diem poem reminding me of Herrick's poem "Corinnas going a-maying" The meaning behind it, is that we must live in the moment and live to the fullest. Life is too short to be laying around. Thank you for this poem, I totally relate to it!
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This is like a Carpe diem poem reminding me of Herrick's poem "Corinnas going a-maying" The meaning behind it, is that we must live in the moment and live to the fullest. Life is too short to be laying around. Thank you for this poem, I totally relate to it!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2018
Comment from ciliverde
Oh thank you for the invitation, I'll be right over! This sounds delightful, and I enjoyed your description of the Indian festival of lights. Thank you for sharing this wonderful custom with us :))
Carol
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Oh thank you for the invitation, I'll be right over! This sounds delightful, and I enjoyed your description of the Indian festival of lights. Thank you for sharing this wonderful custom with us :))
Carol
Comment Written 02-Oct-2018
Comment from Janilou
What a delightful celebration this must be. I enjoyed reading your piece here and learning about this festival. A festival of lights. How wonderful.
I didn't see any errors and I have no suggestions for improvement. Thank you for educating us on the tradition of Diwali.
All the best,
Jan
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What a delightful celebration this must be. I enjoyed reading your piece here and learning about this festival. A festival of lights. How wonderful.
I didn't see any errors and I have no suggestions for improvement. Thank you for educating us on the tradition of Diwali.
All the best,
Jan
Comment Written 02-Oct-2018
Comment from robyn corum
Rhonnie,
I am totally unfamiliar with Diwali, but your post sounds like you've done much more than just look up a few research articles on the topic. Either you are an exceptionally talented author or you have had some personal experience with some of these Diwali events and moments you're describing.
Your poem really brings these concepts to life. Poetic additions and 'tricks' like alliteration, consonance and assonance, internal rhyme and more.
The genuineness of your joy while sharing info about this holiday AND in your invitation shines through every word, so it's clear to me why you wear the winner's ribbon. *smile*. Congrats!
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Rhonnie,
I am totally unfamiliar with Diwali, but your post sounds like you've done much more than just look up a few research articles on the topic. Either you are an exceptionally talented author or you have had some personal experience with some of these Diwali events and moments you're describing.
Your poem really brings these concepts to life. Poetic additions and 'tricks' like alliteration, consonance and assonance, internal rhyme and more.
The genuineness of your joy while sharing info about this holiday AND in your invitation shines through every word, so it's clear to me why you wear the winner's ribbon. *smile*. Congrats!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2018