Beach Front Property
Not all that it is cracked up to be...50 total reviews
Comment from Boogienights
This is very sad. The reference to voices and pretend make me think of my sons schizophrenia. Why do people have to suffer so? Not they realize it most of the time...lost in their own worlds. This poem really touched me.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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This is very sad. The reference to voices and pretend make me think of my sons schizophrenia. Why do people have to suffer so? Not they realize it most of the time...lost in their own worlds. This poem really touched me.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from Miss Sherry
Very powerful poetry. You paint a picture of Mary that is very real. These poor souls find their pretend life much better than reality. Not so hard to understand at all. Not all of us come from a cookie cutter labeled "normal", and you have written this in words for us.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Very powerful poetry. You paint a picture of Mary that is very real. These poor souls find their pretend life much better than reality. Not so hard to understand at all. Not all of us come from a cookie cutter labeled "normal", and you have written this in words for us.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This well-written, descriptive poem provides a moving look at a day in the life of
a homeless person--pushing one or more shopping carts that contain EVERYTHING
he/she owns! And, yes, many of them do have mental issues. Typo "proabably"
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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This well-written, descriptive poem provides a moving look at a day in the life of
a homeless person--pushing one or more shopping carts that contain EVERYTHING
he/she owns! And, yes, many of them do have mental issues. Typo "proabably"
Comment Written 04-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from susand3022
Hello Author, What a sad story you have penned here... with a moment of happiness in it. A focus on a part of our population that isn't in my area, though I do live on the ocean. I guess I live on the wrong part of the coast.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hello Author, What a sad story you have penned here... with a moment of happiness in it. A focus on a part of our population that isn't in my area, though I do live on the ocean. I guess I live on the wrong part of the coast.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written story in a poem you have penned. I love the title and where you said not all that is is cracked up to be. You used a very good picture to go with your words. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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This is a very well written story in a poem you have penned. I love the title and where you said not all that is is cracked up to be. You used a very good picture to go with your words. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 04-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Such a precious write (with a unique style that really works so well for your topic!!) about Mary...a homeless person that apparently resides in a beach-front town. You've got some great rhymes to describe not only her physical appearance and 'stuff she treasures' but also her general psychological thought processes... a wonderful offering for the contest! Mary's Story! ;);) Thank you for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Such a precious write (with a unique style that really works so well for your topic!!) about Mary...a homeless person that apparently resides in a beach-front town. You've got some great rhymes to describe not only her physical appearance and 'stuff she treasures' but also her general psychological thought processes... a wonderful offering for the contest! Mary's Story! ;);) Thank you for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
Comment Written 04-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from Mad jester
Thanks for writing, I enjoyed reading your post. The part about her cart being surrounded by 2 others was a little confusing, was someone stealing her stuff? You did portray her as a little challenged so I understand that part, I get that maybe its all in her head. Then you state, she remembers her life is trashed. (In and out of mental state's?)
So she is not challenged? I dun no it just was a little confusing. But then again maybe that's what you wanted me to think. If so disregard my post. And remember I am no pro and that's just my opinion, take it with a grain of salt. Thank you
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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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Thanks for writing, I enjoyed reading your post. The part about her cart being surrounded by 2 others was a little confusing, was someone stealing her stuff? You did portray her as a little challenged so I understand that part, I get that maybe its all in her head. Then you state, she remembers her life is trashed. (In and out of mental state's?)
So she is not challenged? I dun no it just was a little confusing. But then again maybe that's what you wanted me to think. If so disregard my post. And remember I am no pro and that's just my opinion, take it with a grain of salt. Thank you
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Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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Hey this is a true story and she did own 3 carts. thanks diana
Comment from RodG
This prose poem is both poignant and disquieting. It evokes sympathy for Mary while also commenting on the sad plight of people like her who live with all their belongings in a cart. We hope she's lucid not just periodically. An interesting format chosen with breaks that make the reader really focus on Mary.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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This prose poem is both poignant and disquieting. It evokes sympathy for Mary while also commenting on the sad plight of people like her who live with all their belongings in a cart. We hope she's lucid not just periodically. An interesting format chosen with breaks that make the reader really focus on Mary.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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Thanks Rod... this is true and it is something that always haunts me... yours, diana
Comment from kiwijenny
Oh my poor Mary...all her stuff is her security...so child like ...security blankets carried everywhere...only hers is rolled . It's in her shopping carts
Well penned...more prose than poem...more poem than prose. I've got it ...this is a proem
Or a poese...no definitely proem
God bless
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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Oh my poor Mary...all her stuff is her security...so child like ...security blankets carried everywhere...only hers is rolled . It's in her shopping carts
Well penned...more prose than poem...more poem than prose. I've got it ...this is a proem
Or a poese...no definitely proem
God bless
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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I know she was a sweet spirit I could tell and she was dealt a terrible hand...
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Mystery Author,
Awwww... The poor dear.
This is very well written and an exceptional contest entry. You point up the shameful disgrace of our many mentally ill, homeless folks.
Nothing for me to suggest improoving upon.
Jan
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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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Hi Mystery Author,
Awwww... The poor dear.
This is very well written and an exceptional contest entry. You point up the shameful disgrace of our many mentally ill, homeless folks.
Nothing for me to suggest improoving upon.
Jan
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Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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she was a sweet spirit I could tell and she was dealt a terrible hand...
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Yes, that's often the case. I worked with a similar population for some years. It's really shameful that there is nowhere for them to be housed, appropriately medicated, fed, and cared for. All because it costs too much, but the excuse was their "rights" (to be dumped out onto the streets!). Sickening.
