The Promise
God's gift of the partaking of the chalice48 total reviews
Comment from Janetsue
This is a lovely Etheree with a message of great importance because the entire world needs the Lord. The darkness, so evident in this present life, will not last forever.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2019
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This is a lovely Etheree with a message of great importance because the entire world needs the Lord. The darkness, so evident in this present life, will not last forever.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2019
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Thank you
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Your poem is festive with the chalice in the picture, it's meant to drink wine from. A very Christian symbol. It reminds me of Thanksgiving; Have a great Halloween. Do you get lots of trick or treaters in your area?
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2019
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Your poem is festive with the chalice in the picture, it's meant to drink wine from. A very Christian symbol. It reminds me of Thanksgiving; Have a great Halloween. Do you get lots of trick or treaters in your area?
Comment Written 24-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2019
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Comment from Astrid Denardi
This work was so eloquently arranged. The syllables in each line flow so well and the message behind the words is beautiful. I also really love the addition of the artwork and think the vibe of the poem and the vibe from the artwork fit together so perfectly.
Really enjoyed meditating on this.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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This work was so eloquently arranged. The syllables in each line flow so well and the message behind the words is beautiful. I also really love the addition of the artwork and think the vibe of the poem and the vibe from the artwork fit together so perfectly.
Really enjoyed meditating on this.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from loveofearth
I like your commitment to the rules of the Etheree format and the chosen religiosity conveyed. I would not use Holy twice in the poem. I do like the use of humanity and honest and holy for its h sounds.
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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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I like your commitment to the rules of the Etheree format and the chosen religiosity conveyed. I would not use Holy twice in the poem. I do like the use of humanity and honest and holy for its h sounds.
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Comment Written 24-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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I agree, righteous works better!
Comment from kahpot
A wonderful Etheree poem, and an excellent subject and artwork, I have read a few of this form and the work is centred below the pictures I was wondering if yours may look better this way?, a great poem, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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A wonderful Etheree poem, and an excellent subject and artwork, I have read a few of this form and the work is centred below the pictures I was wondering if yours may look better this way?, a great poem, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 24-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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Kaphot, your input is quite correct, I did center it thank you..
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My pleasure-it looks great and reads with a better flow
Comment from Raul1
I think that this poem has a very good chance of winning the contest! It should be the contest winner. Excellent poem! Very good vocabulary. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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I think that this poem has a very good chance of winning the contest! It should be the contest winner. Excellent poem! Very good vocabulary. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 24-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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Raul thank you.
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You're welcome
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork.
-Your note is appreciated.
-The topic and syllable
count are good.
-The poem flows well
with effective imagery.
-You have a positive message
about people turning their
attention to "more spiritual" and
"honest, selfless" activities.
-Our world and humanity does need healing.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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-Nice artwork.
-Your note is appreciated.
-The topic and syllable
count are good.
-The poem flows well
with effective imagery.
-You have a positive message
about people turning their
attention to "more spiritual" and
"honest, selfless" activities.
-Our world and humanity does need healing.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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Pam thank you
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You are welcome.
Comment from LisaMay
Your poem spoke to me clearly. It is well expressed as a comment on your desire (that echoes mine) for humanity to return to more faith-based and spiritual activities. "Be Still My Soul" is my favourite hymn.
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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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Your poem spoke to me clearly. It is well expressed as a comment on your desire (that echoes mine) for humanity to return to more faith-based and spiritual activities. "Be Still My Soul" is my favourite hymn.
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Comment Written 24-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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LisaMay thank you, I sing Bass in a choir and also, find this among my favs.
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That must be very enjoyable, singing songs of praise in a group.
