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Chasing the Elusive Dream

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A southern couple's journey in the 60's,70's & 80'

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Comment from butterflykiss
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I've been in your shoes, it wasn't as funny as reading this. You nail men and children, we seem to take the blame no matter what happened, or who was right or wrong. Your story made me laugh, I enjoyed it very much.
Butterflykiss

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
    Thank you for reading and commenting.
    Beth
reply by butterflykiss on 17-Mar-2009
    You're welcome Beth, I enjoyed your story.
    Butterflykiss
Comment from eliz100
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This is the second piece I have read of yours and this one was enjoyable as well. It is well written. I do not see any room for improvement.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
    Thank you for the review, I'm so glad your found it enjoyable to read.
    Beth
Comment from WRITER1
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Men can be such pains I realize just how you must have felt. I hate to be late, but my husbands family is the opposite. I had to retrain him. Good job!

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
    Thank for reading and comment. I appreciate the review.
    Beth
Comment from ladybird
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An interesting little cameo of life, and well written. The writing is clear and concise, the humorous touches bring a smile to the lips. And the take on men's views of women working is very true, at least in earlier days. An enjoyable read, well done.

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 Comment Written 17-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
    Ladybird, Thanks for your review and I appreciate your comments.
    Beth
reply by ladybird on 17-Mar-2009
    You're welcome.
Comment from Lokman
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as the innocent of victim of woman who--awkward

new prospective on what--perspective

husband, while not originator of this --missing word

If I child had a problem--a instead I

fuming, and taping the horn--tapping

Hello, this was a fun and interestingstory to read. You did an excellent job with the cultural background. I do think it might help to show more of your feelings previous to the accident so we can feel the buildup. All in all very good with some easily correctable errors.

Lokman

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 Comment Written 17-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
    Thank for finding some things I need to correct.
    Beth