Short Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Mistaken Identity"A book of a mixture of stories
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Comment from bayoupoet
Carol, this is great! I loved the story from start to finish. It is amazing that you come up with so many wonderful stories I am in awe most of the time, Carol.
sandra
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Carol, this is great! I loved the story from start to finish. It is amazing that you come up with so many wonderful stories I am in awe most of the time, Carol.
sandra
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Sandra,
You are more than kind...Thanks for the great review. Smiles, Carol
Comment from JeffreyStone
You are one busy lady, and turning out good stuff. I like your style. The story is fast paced with good dialogue and good descriptions of motions--not overly explained as some writers tend to do (including me). One technicality if I may: I note the use of the long dash where I believe colons are more appropriate, to wit: the computer screen read-- and the same just prior to the text of the email. Would you comment for my benefit. I really enjoyed the read. Best Regards, Jeffrey
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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You are one busy lady, and turning out good stuff. I like your style. The story is fast paced with good dialogue and good descriptions of motions--not overly explained as some writers tend to do (including me). One technicality if I may: I note the use of the long dash where I believe colons are more appropriate, to wit: the computer screen read-- and the same just prior to the text of the email. Would you comment for my benefit. I really enjoyed the read. Best Regards, Jeffrey
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Jeffrey
You are correct! I whipped this little story out at midnight last night and I was so tired after a long day that I didn't proof it well enough. Thanks for bringing it to my attention. Glad you enjoyed..These are much more difficult to write for me as well...Smiles, Carol
Comment from anabelle
Great job with this prompt. I like the idea of trying to save Susan, and ending up with the date. Great case of mistaken identity.
Best of luck in the contest.
Regards, anabelle
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Great job with this prompt. I like the idea of trying to save Susan, and ending up with the date. Great case of mistaken identity.
Best of luck in the contest.
Regards, anabelle
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Anabelle,
Honesty is the best policy and Mandy won the "topdog" because of it...Though I think Susan was probably only doing a little daydreaming and never intended to send the message...Smiles, Carol
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
So much for Susan's superior attitude.
It is always difficult to compete with someone who is beautiful, sophisticated, as self assured as Susan.
It did occur to me, "How did Jack know that the email was from Susan? In a purely business relationship, surely he would not be aware of her personal pen name.
Apart from that a cute story.
Juliette.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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So much for Susan's superior attitude.
It is always difficult to compete with someone who is beautiful, sophisticated, as self assured as Susan.
It did occur to me, "How did Jack know that the email was from Susan? In a purely business relationship, surely he would not be aware of her personal pen name.
Apart from that a cute story.
Juliette.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Juliette
Actually, he didn't know it was from Susan...He "assumed" since Mandy said she sent it...she wrote it! Not the case! Thanks for the kind review. Smiles, Carol
Comment from L.lora
Oh this is perfect. Happy little
accidents, things that are meant
to be but just needed a push. You
are getting so good at these little
snap shots. I really like this, what
a great job. no nits for me to niggle,
LOL and no spags. Lora
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Oh this is perfect. Happy little
accidents, things that are meant
to be but just needed a push. You
are getting so good at these little
snap shots. I really like this, what
a great job. no nits for me to niggle,
LOL and no spags. Lora
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Lora,
Thanks so much for the wonderful and generous review as always. I appreciate all the best wishes. Carol
Comment from adewpearl
That is so funny - the shy, honest girl benefits from her brazen co-worker's letter - maybe she'll learn to speak up more in the future after what this letter does for her. LOL
Being forward evidently has its pluses. :-) What a cute story with a great happy ending. Brooke
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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That is so funny - the shy, honest girl benefits from her brazen co-worker's letter - maybe she'll learn to speak up more in the future after what this letter does for her. LOL
Being forward evidently has its pluses. :-) What a cute story with a great happy ending. Brooke
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Brooke...
Thanks so much...I was always the shy one until later years. But I think even Susan was just daydreaming and Mandy thought she was just finishing another of Susan's jobs...Thanks for the kind review. Have a great day! Smiles, Carol
Comment from TheBritsWife
Hi Carol, Your plots are always so creative! This story had me drawn in start to finish. You continually amaze me with your endless ideas. This one really took me back to my days in the office and all the different personalities you find there. I was pleased that everything worked out so well for Mandy. I thoroughly enjoyed this wonderful piece of fiction! - Karen ;-)
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Hi Carol, Your plots are always so creative! This story had me drawn in start to finish. You continually amaze me with your endless ideas. This one really took me back to my days in the office and all the different personalities you find there. I was pleased that everything worked out so well for Mandy. I thoroughly enjoyed this wonderful piece of fiction! - Karen ;-)
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Karen...
Yeah...I remember all the personality clashes. The Queen bees and the workers...Awesome review from an awesome friend! Thank you...Smiles, Carol
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You are most welcome. It's always a pleasure to read your wonderful work! ;-)
Comment from dmjones
Hi Carol, an interesting story. I like the fact Mandy ends up with Jack. Even though it was short Susan's character came across as conceited. As usual written very well.
I do have one comment, because the story was written from Mandy's POV I think this sentence changes to Susan the last part anyways. Entirely up to you but maybe you could make "Maybe the new guy... as a thought of Mandy.
"Of course." She smiled. Maybe the new guy would be working late too.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Hi Carol, an interesting story. I like the fact Mandy ends up with Jack. Even though it was short Susan's character came across as conceited. As usual written very well.
I do have one comment, because the story was written from Mandy's POV I think this sentence changes to Susan the last part anyways. Entirely up to you but maybe you could make "Maybe the new guy... as a thought of Mandy.
"Of course." She smiled. Maybe the new guy would be working late too.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Donna
You are probably very right since I wrote and posted this after a long day (at midnight). I'll take another look when I'm sure my eyes are open. Thanks...Carol
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is interesting. The courage of Mandy in owning up and taking responsibility rather than implicate her friend is very fascinating. I like the ending. kudos
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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This is interesting. The courage of Mandy in owning up and taking responsibility rather than implicate her friend is very fascinating. I like the ending. kudos
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Perp
Mandy was a very honest and proper person...Though saying I sent it lead her boss to believe I wrote it...thus the mistaken identity...Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
Another one I've read before. Do they help our rating to release them again or do you just do it because there are new people to read it. I can't much better than all time best and an a contest winner.
This is funny. Mandy who could only rate at date with the mailroom boy but due to the missent letter she gets to go out with the boss. Only one thing sort of bothers me. Unless the letter was addressed to the boss, just hitting send should not have sent it to his desk and the return should have showed that it came from Susan's desk. That aside, if the boss believe the letter is from Mandy, he will be expecting some serious action from her. LOL
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Another one I've read before. Do they help our rating to release them again or do you just do it because there are new people to read it. I can't much better than all time best and an a contest winner.
This is funny. Mandy who could only rate at date with the mailroom boy but due to the missent letter she gets to go out with the boss. Only one thing sort of bothers me. Unless the letter was addressed to the boss, just hitting send should not have sent it to his desk and the return should have showed that it came from Susan's desk. That aside, if the boss believe the letter is from Mandy, he will be expecting some serious action from her. LOL
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Beth,
I was sort of indicating that Susan was daydreaming about Jack as well and never meant to send the message to anyone...Mandy just thought she was doing a favor...Accidents happen! Smiles, Carol