I Meant to Sail the Oceans
contemplative quatrains134 total reviews
Comment from TheBritsWife
Hi Brooke, I loved your theme of "if only" in this fabulous poem. Your descriptions of all the places left untraveled are wonderful! The imagery is amazing. The theme really makes you stop and think. You are truly the Queen of Quatrains! Your words flow, sweep, and soar just like the oceans, dunes, and mountains you depict so beautifully. - Karen ;-)
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Hi Brooke, I loved your theme of "if only" in this fabulous poem. Your descriptions of all the places left untraveled are wonderful! The imagery is amazing. The theme really makes you stop and think. You are truly the Queen of Quatrains! Your words flow, sweep, and soar just like the oceans, dunes, and mountains you depict so beautifully. - Karen ;-)
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Karen. I am honored by your lovely comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Donovan
Reminds me of The Owl and Pussycat in a Pea Green Boat. That is a good remembrance. I think that is strange because your poem has nothing to do with that topic, but what the heck.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Reminds me of The Owl and Pussycat in a Pea Green Boat. That is a good remembrance. I think that is strange because your poem has nothing to do with that topic, but what the heck.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Donovan, if it makes you recollect that delightful poem, who cares if it makes sense for it to? LOL thank you, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Alexander E Poet
I thought the zone was a wonderful piece of work, I thought it was passionate and heartfelt. And I think the wish to do such things is deeply desirable. I like the imagery, which complemented the poetry extremely well. Well done no errors of mistakes Alexander
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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I thought the zone was a wonderful piece of work, I thought it was passionate and heartfelt. And I think the wish to do such things is deeply desirable. I like the imagery, which complemented the poetry extremely well. Well done no errors of mistakes Alexander
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Alexander, for your kind review. Brooke
Comment from Just2Write
So many of us can relate to this quatrain about missed adventure. I feel so blessed that I have sailed upon the seas (well, a bit in the Straights of Georgia) and havee been escorted along by a pod of dolphins as they played in the surf created by the bow. I have seen vistas such as the Grand Canyon, and the Rocky Mountains. Just need to get that camel ride under my belt. This is an exhilarating and worderful poem. Such a joy to read. Loved the painting of the sail-boat - It reminds me so much of Canada's pride and joy, The Bluenose. Cheers, Rose.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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So many of us can relate to this quatrain about missed adventure. I feel so blessed that I have sailed upon the seas (well, a bit in the Straights of Georgia) and havee been escorted along by a pod of dolphins as they played in the surf created by the bow. I have seen vistas such as the Grand Canyon, and the Rocky Mountains. Just need to get that camel ride under my belt. This is an exhilarating and worderful poem. Such a joy to read. Loved the painting of the sail-boat - It reminds me so much of Canada's pride and joy, The Bluenose. Cheers, Rose.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Rose. Good luck on the camel ride! :-) brooke
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You hearad about the straw that broke the camel's back?? I'm sure that he would rather have a load of straw than me sitting up there.
Comment from Showboat
HA! A poem whose 'form' I recognize. This was an excellent poem, Brooke, and one I'd imagine will get a huge variety of responses, depending on the age of the reader.
When I first started reading, my head was bobbing along, y'know, like ya do with stuff that has that cadence. Then, all of a sudden, I got real sad because I knew where we were going.
To one who is a 'senior' citizen, this poem brings back all the lost opportunities and the things that 'mighta' or 'shoulda' been done and for whatever reason, weren't.
Deep sigh. I can only offer a virtual six, m'dear. This was excellent.
Gayle
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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HA! A poem whose 'form' I recognize. This was an excellent poem, Brooke, and one I'd imagine will get a huge variety of responses, depending on the age of the reader.
When I first started reading, my head was bobbing along, y'know, like ya do with stuff that has that cadence. Then, all of a sudden, I got real sad because I knew where we were going.
To one who is a 'senior' citizen, this poem brings back all the lost opportunities and the things that 'mighta' or 'shoulda' been done and for whatever reason, weren't.
Deep sigh. I can only offer a virtual six, m'dear. This was excellent.
Gayle
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Gayle - I think by the time we reach a certain age, most of us have gathered a few regrets for times we took the safer course. I'm so glad you found that meaning here. Brooke :-)
Comment from Annmuma
Seems as if every piece I choose to read this morning is wistful and a tad sad. However, in yours, I found solace because I've never "missed a day of departure" or "failed to use my ticket." I've been blessed beyond my wildest dreams. Thanks for the reminder. ann
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Seems as if every piece I choose to read this morning is wistful and a tad sad. However, in yours, I found solace because I've never "missed a day of departure" or "failed to use my ticket." I've been blessed beyond my wildest dreams. Thanks for the reminder. ann
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Thanks, Ann, for your kind review of my wistful poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Deejharrington
The best of luck in the contest. I guess all of us have regrets of things we never dared or had to the chance to do. Given the chance, we probably won't have given up the life we have for these romantic sounding adventures anyway.
deb
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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The best of luck in the contest. I guess all of us have regrets of things we never dared or had to the chance to do. Given the chance, we probably won't have given up the life we have for these romantic sounding adventures anyway.
deb
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Deb. You're right, often the life we choose with children, jobs, community, are less glamorous but still the ones we would ultimately choose. Brooke
Comment from bkrighter
Brooke, this is a very well-written poem, but it is so sad, made sadder by the fact that there are some summits I had aspired to reach but allowed fear of heights and other things to dissuade me.
Steve
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Brooke, this is a very well-written poem, but it is so sad, made sadder by the fact that there are some summits I had aspired to reach but allowed fear of heights and other things to dissuade me.
Steve
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Steve - we all have our reasons for having failed to take opportunities - I'm not sure I've even known anyone totally without regrets. Brooke
Comment from tati
In my opinion, this is a very well written poem with a very thoughtful message, Brooke. I love the repetition /I meant to .../ in the first three quatrains - there are regrets for missing good chances -, while the fourth quatrain reveals disappointments for losing life's achievement. Is that right, Brooke?
While reading your poem, I always count its syllables. This one 7, 6, 7, 6, and the words flow so nicely. Thank you for sharing this poem with great reflections, great choice of metaphors and great rhythm. Wish you the best of luck in the competition. Warm wishes,
tati, March 18, 2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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In my opinion, this is a very well written poem with a very thoughtful message, Brooke. I love the repetition /I meant to .../ in the first three quatrains - there are regrets for missing good chances -, while the fourth quatrain reveals disappointments for losing life's achievement. Is that right, Brooke?
While reading your poem, I always count its syllables. This one 7, 6, 7, 6, and the words flow so nicely. Thank you for sharing this poem with great reflections, great choice of metaphors and great rhythm. Wish you the best of luck in the competition. Warm wishes,
tati, March 18, 2010
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Tati - I appreciate your attentive review of the message and composition of this poem :-) Your interpretation is spot on, the speaker is disappointed in not having taken opportunities. Brooke
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So glad I interpreted your poem correctly, Brooke. Regards,
tati
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Good Thursday morning Brooke. Oh, the many people who live with regrets of what they meant to do, yet some times we wait too long and then it's too late. Loved the journey, Loyd
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Good Thursday morning Brooke. Oh, the many people who live with regrets of what they meant to do, yet some times we wait too long and then it's too late. Loved the journey, Loyd
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Loyd, and good morning :-) I appreciate your thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
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You are welcome, Loyd