The Plan
A married woman settles the score.80 total reviews
Comment from fictionwriter
Oh yes, but being that wife will cause all sorts of problems if she want to get out. Seems like a great beginning to me. Well done.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Oh yes, but being that wife will cause all sorts of problems if she want to get out. Seems like a great beginning to me. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Thanks so much, fictionwriter...and congratulations on being nominated on your book of the month...I will have to go by the booth...Bob
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Thank you so much. I'd love to have you check out all the great posts. Hugs, Joy
Comment from suneagle
Excellent work with this, Bob. I hope you do develop it further and provide us with another intriguing book from your fine pen. Damn! let's update that: another intriguing book from your well-used keyboard.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Excellent work with this, Bob. I hope you do develop it further and provide us with another intriguing book from your fine pen. Damn! let's update that: another intriguing book from your well-used keyboard.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Hi, Les. I am elated that you consider this a good piece of writing...Onward and upward...i have to finish the other one first...LOL...Bob
Comment from tati
Your well worded lines flow so nicely, Bob, with amazing imagery. My favorite paragraph:
She never thought of herself as a shallow or materialistic woman, but the possibility dawned on her. Blair was quite the unrepentant sinner, yet, for seven years, Renee had put up with it. She'd spent little time trying to change him, but allowed herself to be intimidated by his caustic tongue and appeased by presents. Ignoring what he did became easier than arguing about it.
Wish you luck in the voting booth, Bob. Warmest wishes,
tati, April 29, 2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Your well worded lines flow so nicely, Bob, with amazing imagery. My favorite paragraph:
She never thought of herself as a shallow or materialistic woman, but the possibility dawned on her. Blair was quite the unrepentant sinner, yet, for seven years, Renee had put up with it. She'd spent little time trying to change him, but allowed herself to be intimidated by his caustic tongue and appeased by presents. Ignoring what he did became easier than arguing about it.
Wish you luck in the voting booth, Bob. Warmest wishes,
tati, April 29, 2010
Comment Written 28-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Tati...I really appreciate your vote of confidence....Bob
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You're welcome, Bob.
tati
Comment from wholechild
Bob, Your writing draws me in and makes me want to read more. I get a real feel for the characters and have to say that I have no sympathy for Renee and her situation. I really like how you show her relationship with God and take us through her thought process as it relates to her "guilt". "And while He probably did not intend for her to have torrid reckless sex with the first she met, Renee hoped He would understand." She is all about what is best for her. I hope you write more. I'd like to see what she chooses to do next!
Shannon
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Bob, Your writing draws me in and makes me want to read more. I get a real feel for the characters and have to say that I have no sympathy for Renee and her situation. I really like how you show her relationship with God and take us through her thought process as it relates to her "guilt". "And while He probably did not intend for her to have torrid reckless sex with the first she met, Renee hoped He would understand." She is all about what is best for her. I hope you write more. I'd like to see what she chooses to do next!
Shannon
Comment Written 28-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Shannon...I will be doing that as soon as I finish this other one I am currently working on "Falling Up The STairs" Thanks again, Bob
Comment from Alaskastory
'The Plan' has a real start for a novel. The character of Renee and Blair are so clearly drawn. What Renee and God think of the affair with Craig makes the reader want to know more. You've got a great beginning.
Good luck with getting through chapters! Marie
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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'The Plan' has a real start for a novel. The character of Renee and Blair are so clearly drawn. What Renee and God think of the affair with Craig makes the reader want to know more. You've got a great beginning.
Good luck with getting through chapters! Marie
Comment Written 28-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Marie...I appreciate your wonderful review...Bob
Comment from Rama Rao
This idea looks good. A pompous and insufferable congressman with a wife who tolerated him for seven-long years will make good subjects for a novel.
Wish you good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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This idea looks good. A pompous and insufferable congressman with a wife who tolerated him for seven-long years will make good subjects for a novel.
Wish you good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Ramarao. Much appreciated...Bob
Comment from Vladilynn
Hi there Bob!
This is a very capturing sypnosis, you keep me sitting here and reading it up to the end. LOL
Well, at least she woke up and do something, he can commit adultery, why not she can't. Specially with a yummy hunk, don't need thinking, just go. Lmao.
Very well written!!
Btw~ I liked your story idea. Our muse is really annoying sometimes, it won't stop running around in our brain, till you do something to satisfied them. :D
Love much
Lynn:0)
Goood luck!
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Hi there Bob!
This is a very capturing sypnosis, you keep me sitting here and reading it up to the end. LOL
Well, at least she woke up and do something, he can commit adultery, why not she can't. Specially with a yummy hunk, don't need thinking, just go. Lmao.
Very well written!!
Btw~ I liked your story idea. Our muse is really annoying sometimes, it won't stop running around in our brain, till you do something to satisfied them. :D
Love much
Lynn:0)
Goood luck!
Comment Written 28-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Thank you so much, Lynn...Bob
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You're welcome!!!:P
Comment from SamanthaD.
ooo- very tantlizing! Can't wait to read more! I hope you ARE planning to write more! :-) One idea just popped into my head- you may think it's rubbish- but for whatever it's worth, I thought it would be fun if instead of writing,"a divine force had brought Craig into her life..." you could write, "a driving force..." Sort of a play on Craig being a limo driver. Just a thought... I really enjoyed this! Samantha
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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ooo- very tantlizing! Can't wait to read more! I hope you ARE planning to write more! :-) One idea just popped into my head- you may think it's rubbish- but for whatever it's worth, I thought it would be fun if instead of writing,"a divine force had brought Craig into her life..." you could write, "a driving force..." Sort of a play on Craig being a limo driver. Just a thought... I really enjoyed this! Samantha
Comment Written 28-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Thanks, Samantha...and I like your idea....LOL...clever....Bob
Comment from gene_ink
You have paid attention to the mechanics of your writing and therefore, I could find only one gremlin. It is a good chapter, Bob, however,it would be nice to know what the contest was.
Gene
- the ellipses is only used within quotations.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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You have paid attention to the mechanics of your writing and therefore, I could find only one gremlin. It is a good chapter, Bob, however,it would be nice to know what the contest was.
Gene
- the ellipses is only used within quotations.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Hey, Gene. Thanks for the nice review. I don't always explain th econtest...I figure if somebody wants to know they'll do as I do....click on the blue letters at the top and get a full rundown. LOL...I know on the elipses...I was just using "poetic or whatever liscense, however I have corrected it...Thanks again, gene...Bob
Comment from Max Edon
I thought that this was a great story! I liked the sublety of it. You left a lot to the reader's imagination. The creepiness of just kept building and building.
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I thought that this was a great story! I liked the sublety of it. You left a lot to the reader's imagination. The creepiness of just kept building and building.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Thanks so much, Max. Is that short for Maxine? Anyway, you do realize it's just one chapter...right? Thanks again...Bob
