Poems By AnnieDawn
Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "What Is My Love?"My book of poems and stories
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Comment from denhagan
This is a nice poem, written in the free verse style, with the author opining about what is her love. Has a nice picture to accompany the poem.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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This is a nice poem, written in the free verse style, with the author opining about what is her love. Has a nice picture to accompany the poem.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013
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Thanks so much for taking the time to review my poem. I really appreciate it.
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You're welcome Annie,
Dennis
Comment from Gungalo
He is a song without words creating
joy.
What is he?
He is my love.
So nice the way you speak of your love. Sigh it's a new and modern world but yet you can tell of his beauty.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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He is a song without words creating
joy.
What is he?
He is my love.
So nice the way you speak of your love. Sigh it's a new and modern world but yet you can tell of his beauty.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your very nice review.
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Smile.
Comment from Tessa Kay
Liked your poem very much. Any person described like that has to be very lucky.
It conjured up a rounded-out picture of a loved person with all facets, the soft as well as the strong.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Liked your poem very much. Any person described like that has to be very lucky.
It conjured up a rounded-out picture of a loved person with all facets, the soft as well as the strong.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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I thank you so much for your nice review.
Comment from songbyrd
what beautiful words of the love you long to have in your heart. A song without words creating joy? That's some some lines..very original.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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what beautiful words of the love you long to have in your heart. A song without words creating joy? That's some some lines..very original.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate the time you put in to review it.
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was a beautiful poem. I liked the way you compared him to the elements and the raging storm that could become a gentle breeze. It was wonderful imagery. Nice flow and the style suited the poem. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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This was a beautiful poem. I liked the way you compared him to the elements and the raging storm that could become a gentle breeze. It was wonderful imagery. Nice flow and the style suited the poem. Nicely done.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Thank you so very much for your review. It was written for the love of my life.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Annie, I really liked this - the various comparisons, both similes and metaphors add up to a powerful description of the one you love. I particularly liked the contrast between storm and gentle breeze.
One point of advice - you capitalise line beginnings sometimes, but not others - this is a little confusing e.g. in the first stanza which reads as all one sentence, you capitalise the final word, 'Suppressed.'
Steve
PS Welcome to FanStory
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Annie, I really liked this - the various comparisons, both similes and metaphors add up to a powerful description of the one you love. I particularly liked the contrast between storm and gentle breeze.
One point of advice - you capitalise line beginnings sometimes, but not others - this is a little confusing e.g. in the first stanza which reads as all one sentence, you capitalise the final word, 'Suppressed.'
Steve
PS Welcome to FanStory
Comment Written 17-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Thanks for your review Steve. I will correct the line beginnings. I appreciate your input.
Comment from linkz
I like this free verse poem. It gives the impression of someone hunting for the closest description of the love felt for another, that touches so many beautiful things, like the sparrow, the sea the power of nature. It's what we do when we fall in love, but nothing quite describes it..you have conveyed that very well.
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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2013
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I like this free verse poem. It gives the impression of someone hunting for the closest description of the love felt for another, that touches so many beautiful things, like the sparrow, the sea the power of nature. It's what we do when we fall in love, but nothing quite describes it..you have conveyed that very well.
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Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2013
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I thank you for your critique of my free verse poem. It is my first and did not know if it would be received at all. I do appreciate your time and comments.
Comment from Isabella Thorne
What a beautiful dedication to your love. THe poem flows easily and has no SPAG's that I am aware of. Well done, i hope it was recieved well.
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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2013
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What a beautiful dedication to your love. THe poem flows easily and has no SPAG's that I am aware of. Well done, i hope it was recieved well.
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Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your comments and now I will have to look up SPAG as I have no idea what i did not do so maybe I can know how not to do it in the future. Thanks.
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