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5/7/5 (Leaves in Fright)

Leaves float back to tree, so frightened.

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Comment from Silent1rose
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'twas Halloween eve

dead leaves jumped back onto trees

so raw was their fright

If the leaves are frightened I should jump with them LOL great 5-7-5 poem. Can't wait fo halloween! ~ Rose

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
    Thank you so much.
Comment from 9999pool
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Halloween is a period of uncertainty - to believe or not to believe in all the gory and horrible movies of Hollywood come alive. if the motion picture was to rewind the falling motion of the leaves from the trees, we can see clearly how the leaves get attached back to the tree.
But life cannot go in reverse neither can time.
When the uncanny happens, we tend to think that against the natural order of nature and things, such phenomena must a a manifestation of something or a force unknown to us.
We cleverly assumed that something more sinister and significant is happening especially on Halloween - where the fakes can imitate the real to make the dead look alive or vice versa.
Great write and well expressed.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :)) :))

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
    Ahhhhhhhh, did you overthink this just a bit? And, do you analyze everything to death? Halloween and all its strange happenings are simply a fun time. . .please let it be so. Thanks for reading.
reply by 9999pool on 23-Oct-2013
    Death? Not at all. The word 'death' was never mentioned here - not even once. How did you get that idea dearest? Smiles.
    You commented 'Halloween and all its strange happenings' are the 'uncanny things...such phenomena must a a manifestation of something or a force unknown to us. ' I mentioned here.
    But I must say DEATH is a celebration of LIFE! What say you?
    Cheerio, huggies and lots, lots of life an love to you and your family on Halloween!!
    Have a fantastic and wonderfully great and lively week ahead. Full of life!
    Cheers, Ritchie. :))
Comment from GBTEXT
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Here is 5-7-5 offering allegorical elegance with its 'dead leaves',that it personifies with 'jumped', to heights and 'fright', so raw.It's so smooth and Halloween in quality.

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
    Thank you for reading.
Comment from mystery poet
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This has a mighty impact.

Leaves shed from off mother tree and
are hurled into the skyscape where
they sighted monsters moving eerily
on the ground ...

With all their might they catch wind
and fling themselves onto mother's waiting
limbs...

Mother cries out, 'It's only a play'.
Now, get out there and blow away'.

This made me laugh...It's very creative.
Thanks for the humor I found in it.





 Comment Written 23-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
    Leaves in Fright was intended to be fun and carry the spirit of autumn and Halloween. Glad you liked it.
reply by mystery poet on 23-Oct-2013
    It was a very fun read...and in such
    few well chosen words. LOL:}Joyce
Comment from steevie
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All I can think of is that leaves are fearful of being trampled by hundreds and thousands of tiny feet shuffling along the streets in order to gather their treats

steve

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
    It is a fun poem intended to carry the spirit of autumn and Halloween. What the leaves are afraid of is left to your imagination. Thanks for reading.
Comment from Righteous Riter
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'twas Halloween eve
dead leaves jumped back onto the trees
so raw was their fright
Good complimentary photo. The syllable count is correct. Good use of the long "E" sound with eve/trees. Good short and simple message. Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
    Thank you.
Comment from jmdg1954
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'twas Halloween eve
dead leaves jumped back onto trees
so raw was their fright

Mischief night fright? This is well done and thought out. An opposite haiku with leaves rather then falling colorfully down are going back home, frightened.
I enjoyed this one... John

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
    Thanks for reading and the six shiney stars.
Comment from CR Delport
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That's some serious scared leaves. Wonder what scared them that bad :) This is well written and gave me a smile. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
    It is up to your imagination of what the leaves were afraid. Intended for fun of the autumn/Halloween season. Thanks for reading.
Comment from mfowler
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Haiku is often a natural image. You've cleverly brought the Halloween theme into this and maintained an autumn imagery that is both emotive and original.

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
    Thank you. This poem was intended to have fun with autumn/Halloween. Of what the leaves were so afraid is left up to your imagination.
Comment from misscookie
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You capture my attention from the start.
I could vision the leave going back on the branches it would scare the heck out of me.
Wow.
It always amaze me how a writer can use so few words
Yet send out a strong message as you did with your poem.

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
    Thank you so much. Some writers always tell me "it should be longer". . .they just don't get it.
reply by misscookie on 24-Oct-2013
    You're very welcome,have a blessed day.
    Until next time.
    I get that also so times. I just smile and keep on doing my thing. LOL
    Have a blessed day.