Ode to the Soul
Let's subdue our false ego to feel our soul60 total reviews
Comment from Petriesan
good luck int he contest
this line, I like in isolation: Being God's image you are surely divine
the line after it made me stop.
well written generally
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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good luck int he contest
this line, I like in isolation: Being God's image you are surely divine
the line after it made me stop.
well written generally
Comment Written 02-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for such a wonderful review, lovely words and Good Wishes!
~RP.
Comment from fdgsr
A little wobbly, but still on track. I love the theme. Rhyme, rhythm, and poetic skill are last for me, though first in poetry. The message got through to me where it has found a place in my heart. It is save there as long as the heart beats.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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A little wobbly, but still on track. I love the theme. Rhyme, rhythm, and poetic skill are last for me, though first in poetry. The message got through to me where it has found a place in my heart. It is save there as long as the heart beats.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for your nice review and lovely words!
~RP.
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
We would be nothing without our soul and I've never thought about my soul until now. Not sure if that's good or bad but you did a great job with this
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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We would be nothing without our soul and I've never thought about my soul until now. Not sure if that's good or bad but you did a great job with this
Comment Written 02-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for such a nice review and lovely words!
~RP.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi RPSaxena,
The 'soul' is also known as the breath of life, perhaps the 'spirit of God' within us, some hold that the soul is what connects all living creatures, a view I can be comfortable with.
I enjoyed reading your thought provoking poem. Well done.
Patrick
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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Hi RPSaxena,
The 'soul' is also known as the breath of life, perhaps the 'spirit of God' within us, some hold that the soul is what connects all living creatures, a view I can be comfortable with.
I enjoyed reading your thought provoking poem. Well done.
Patrick
Comment Written 02-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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Hello Patrick,
Thank you very much for such a wonderful review and lovely words!
~RP.
Comment from GWHARGIS
I have never read the quote in your author's notes. But it was quite beautiful. I like the thought of the soul being in God's image. the rhythm in this was paced to give us time to reflect on each line. I like the strong ending. Nice imagery and flow. Well done.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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I have never read the quote in your author's notes. But it was quite beautiful. I like the thought of the soul being in God's image. the rhythm in this was paced to give us time to reflect on each line. I like the strong ending. Nice imagery and flow. Well done.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for such a wonderful review and lovely words !
~RP.
Comment from Lulube
First off I appreciate your notes. Words for thought. I hold my soul high within myself. This poem speaks of your opinions, attitudes and appreciation for your soul with great imagery. I don't know if my soul is God but I do fill my soul with goodness so that I'm on the right track.
lulube
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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First off I appreciate your notes. Words for thought. I hold my soul high within myself. This poem speaks of your opinions, attitudes and appreciation for your soul with great imagery. I don't know if my soul is God but I do fill my soul with goodness so that I'm on the right track.
lulube
Comment Written 02-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for such a wonderful review and lovely words!
~RP.
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welcome\
lulube
Comment from Chap Man
Would only challenge one word in all this, "brisk" in the last line of the fourth stanza. Seems as a limp word here where you are talking about "torches." The rest I see as excellent and the picture and color choice was fine.
Chap Man
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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Would only challenge one word in all this, "brisk" in the last line of the fourth stanza. Seems as a limp word here where you are talking about "torches." The rest I see as excellent and the picture and color choice was fine.
Chap Man
Comment Written 02-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for such a nice review and lovely words!
~RP.
Comment from Erik McGinley
This is a lovely poem all by itself but that caption image really puts it into context with its extremely powerful imagery.
You had me immediately thingking of chakra energy and the glowing body.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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This is a lovely poem all by itself but that caption image really puts it into context with its extremely powerful imagery.
You had me immediately thingking of chakra energy and the glowing body.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for such a wonderful review and lovely words!
~RP.
Comment from jadapenn
Hi RPSaxena, I have long believed that God is in us. This is our soul. Loved your poem that told a good story of how to let go of ego so we can dwell within our soul. Well penned. luv jada
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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Hi RPSaxena, I have long believed that God is in us. This is our soul. Loved your poem that told a good story of how to let go of ego so we can dwell within our soul. Well penned. luv jada
Comment Written 02-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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Hello Jada,
Thank you very much for such a wonderful review and lovely words !
~RP.
Comment from JB Lynn
"Let's subdue our false ego to feel our soul"
-I really like the image/concept this presents.
In your stanza referencing Lincoln, Gandhi, and Mandela you use the word "great" twice. I would suggest trying to use a different word in the second instance. I love the phrase "Mandeal the great" so leave that alone, but I think there's a better word out there for later in this stanza.
I LOVE odes. Thank you so much for sharing.
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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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"Let's subdue our false ego to feel our soul"
-I really like the image/concept this presents.
In your stanza referencing Lincoln, Gandhi, and Mandela you use the word "great" twice. I would suggest trying to use a different word in the second instance. I love the phrase "Mandeal the great" so leave that alone, but I think there's a better word out there for later in this stanza.
I LOVE odes. Thank you so much for sharing.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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Hello Friend,
Thank you very much for such a wonderful review and lovely words !
~RP.
