Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

What a dark scary picture Dean. You are very good with alliteration and you imagery is much better than I want of such a dark poem. LOL The rhyme and meter is just fine my friend. Well done. :<) Nancy

 Comment Written 22-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015

So sorry for the cut 'n' paste,
but yet I must, and in my haste,
I'll simply thank you for your time
in reading yet another rhyme.

Thank you!

~Dean ;)

Comment from jim lawler

Excellent

A very nice entry and I enjoyed reading it. You spin a dark, dreary yarn and it has a smoothe flow, good luck with it; it is a contender. Jim

 Comment Written 22-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015

So sorry for the cut 'n' paste,
but yet I must, and in my haste,
I'll simply thank you for your time
in reading yet another rhyme.

Thank you!

~Dean ;)

Comment from leigholiver

Excellent

Very good poem, well worded. I was little confused by what the poems about...person or bird? I know art is all about making your own choices, so I'm not really asking you to explain your piece to me. well done

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 Comment Written 22-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015

So sorry for the cut 'n' paste,
but yet I must, and in my haste,
I'll simply thank you for your time
in reading yet another rhyme.

Thank you!

~Dean ;)

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi Dean.

Another great poem. I have read and re-read this several times in short succession. The proliferated alliteration is really good and the rhymes are superb.

This would have been great in the 'Madness' contest, I feel, if permitted.

Restrained presentation for this one, but still as effective as ever.

Strong wording and superb painted imagery.

Good one
G

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 Comment Written 22-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2015

So sorry for the cut 'n' paste,
but yet I must, and in my haste,
I'll simply thank you for your time
in reading yet another rhyme.

Thank you!

~Dean ;)