Comment from lancellot

Excellent

First, It is good to read your work. I have like how you add just a bit of humor into your horror. Well done.



like someone attempting to speak after being water-boarded.

- what does this actually sound like? Love it.

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2015

Well, Lance, for anyone who's ever seen a movie where someone's been put to water boarding, they sound garbled, gasping for breath, almost as if they're strangling, struggling for air. You see, I know what it sounds like although I've never been privy to actually witness someone going through it (unfortunately, heh-heh.). Perhaps my poor haunted friend has also seen such films? Given that it's a 100 word story, economization is key as it pertains to wording.
Thanks for the review.
~Dean

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Exceptional

Hi, Dean

_ Well, okay, you've been missing in action for awhile, so you come back with all guns blazing! (*.*)
_ WoW! Great job, my friend.
_ I hope you have not been in the hospital again, and all is okay otherwise.
_ I think about you often---hope all is well, buckeye.
_ Fantastic sound effects!

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2015

Comment from JanetRussek

Excellent

This made the hair on the back of my neck stand up, friend. Again, I found myself reading after dark. Damn it!
Warm Regards,
Janet

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2015

Comment from mrsmajor

Exceptional

Hi Dean,

You scared me!...I went all through the house making sure all the facets were tightly closed...I don't want to hear anything like that in the middle of the might...Strangely I have been getting a lot of hang up calls, not even breathing...I hope to heck Nina, or anyone else, for that matter, wants to visit me tonight when I take my shower...and I'm tired of the hang up calls maybe Nina has a friend...that calling and scaring me...Oh well!

As usual, Dean, you have used your wonderful way of putting pen to paper, to frightened us...And personally I love it!

Thanks so much for sharing this with us...

I'm so glad you're back, and I Pray you will find all the joy that life can bring...

Big Hugs,

Victoria
xo ox xo

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2015

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Dean;
-excellent aesthetics for your writing with the dripping of the faucet and the telephone ringing. It only adds to the horror of the poem.
-I can say welcome back you have been missed.
-I can see the horrendous because the fact that she finds out is being a renter that the person who lived there was also drown in the bathtub right before she is going to take a bath.
-In the contest and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2015

Comment from Acquired Taste

Exceptional

Too bad the Committee doesn't prefer quality vs quantity.....as well as not taking the time to see a deletion had been made. Yeah, Que sera, sera

The drip is enough to push me over the edge - you know something is coming. When the phone rings, well, that's simply icing. It reminds me of the film, What Lies Beneath with Harrison Ford.

You have a great talent for putting horror into it's most basic element. The mind is far more formidable anticipating your words than 10 pages of blood and guts. Excellent Spooky. AT=/

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2015

Comment from Spitfire

Exceptional

Good to hear your voice again! Amazing how you can shrink wrap a story and get all the essentials in: setting, characterization, tone, mood. Each line pulls the reader ever deeper into the story. What talent!

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2015

Comment from Pantygynt

Exceptional

Having got me out of my seat to investigate stange sounds of bells and drips, I scrolled down - you bastard! It is a great shame you missed the boat as far as the competition was concerned. First class as usual.

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2015

Comment from evilynne

Excellent

Too bad you couldn't enter the contest. I did review it after I figured out I didn't need to answer my phone and my tap wasn't dripping. Other than that, I enjoyed your tiny tale very much. Evi

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2015

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Ha ha ha this was horror and cliche all in one..
But I liked it ...and it's perhaps why I like showers.
Though there is the stab the shower curtain with a bloodied knife thing..
And was she speaking French ? Ou est mes messages?
Que j'adore le francais
God bless

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2015