Haiku (golden eagle soars)
Haiku Contest67 total reviews
Comment from LIJ Red
There was a home video of an eagle scooping up a toddler, but it turned out to be a fake. Where's the clue to the season? Not my concern, just the judges'. Excellent post, in my unschooled opinion.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
There was a home video of an eagle scooping up a toddler, but it turned out to be a fake. Where's the clue to the season? Not my concern, just the judges'. Excellent post, in my unschooled opinion.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Susanjohn
AWESOME! great picture too! These birds are amazing!! Nice job with this poem of yours and good luck with the contest! enjoyed reading!
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
AWESOME! great picture too! These birds are amazing!! Nice job with this poem of yours and good luck with the contest! enjoyed reading!
Comment Written 09-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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Thank you very much for the great review, and your good wishes. All best
Comment from ESchmitz
Lamb? A bit ambitious, no? Either golden eagles in Scotland are massive or their lambs are tiny... Anyway, the form seems correct though I don't particularly like haiku poetry. Ending was a twist since I wouldn't expect a lamb to become bird food while living. ( maybe an albatross)
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
Lamb? A bit ambitious, no? Either golden eagles in Scotland are massive or their lambs are tiny... Anyway, the form seems correct though I don't particularly like haiku poetry. Ending was a twist since I wouldn't expect a lamb to become bird food while living. ( maybe an albatross)
Comment Written 09-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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Thank you so for reading. Well that is what they do in Scotland and the sheep farmers are quite upset, and they are a threat to the Golden Eagle. I didn't make it up.All the best.
Comment from paperwait
This poem creates a vivid picture of what happened. We occasionally see eagles around our home (we live in the suburbs), and they are stalking the rabbits and squirrels. They are so beautiful. If one has been seen carrying a lamb, then a small child might also be in danger.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
This poem creates a vivid picture of what happened. We occasionally see eagles around our home (we live in the suburbs), and they are stalking the rabbits and squirrels. They are so beautiful. If one has been seen carrying a lamb, then a small child might also be in danger.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much for the great review and thoughts. Yes, it's a real problem. All best.
Comment from AnnaLinda
Poet,
Your haiku entry has fantastic imagery
and a clear continuing thought with
lines one and two and an entertaining
satori, but not for the lamb.
Fantastic entry here,
Linda
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
Poet,
Your haiku entry has fantastic imagery
and a clear continuing thought with
lines one and two and an entertaining
satori, but not for the lamb.
Fantastic entry here,
Linda
Comment Written 09-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much. I am so pleased that you liked it. All the best.
Comment from enitsalemap
I can see the majestic wingspread soaring over the craggy hills of Scotland with a tiny lamb in its beak. This is powerful imagery in so few syllables. Well done and the look in the eye of the bird in the photo looks like he's picked up a lamb or two in his day!
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
I can see the majestic wingspread soaring over the craggy hills of Scotland with a tiny lamb in its beak. This is powerful imagery in so few syllables. Well done and the look in the eye of the bird in the photo looks like he's picked up a lamb or two in his day!
Comment Written 09-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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Thanks a lot for the great review. So glad you liked it. All best.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Lamb? I'd say anything small enough for an eagle to grasp and pluck off of the turf would be in considerable trouble. But, hey, you can't blame the eagle. Lamb chops are pretty darn tasty.
You chosen a 5/7/4 for your haiku, perfectly withing the limitations of 17 syllables, or less, of the haiku poetic form.
You've utilized concrete imagery, no punctuation, and while I'm not sure what the specific seasonal reference is, it could be a number of seasons, so your kigo is prevalent. It's written in present tense, and features a decent satori.
All in all, a fine entry.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016
Lamb? I'd say anything small enough for an eagle to grasp and pluck off of the turf would be in considerable trouble. But, hey, you can't blame the eagle. Lamb chops are pretty darn tasty.
You chosen a 5/7/4 for your haiku, perfectly withing the limitations of 17 syllables, or less, of the haiku poetic form.
You've utilized concrete imagery, no punctuation, and while I'm not sure what the specific seasonal reference is, it could be a number of seasons, so your kigo is prevalent. It's written in present tense, and features a decent satori.
All in all, a fine entry.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016
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Thanks a lot Dean for this great review and good wishes. Couldn't agree with you more, Lamb chops are delicious. Love your signature by the way. All best:)))
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You are more than welcome.
~Dean :}
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last
lines put the poem all together. The reader found the artwork exceptional and complimented this poem well. Thank you for the author's notes.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
Excellent Poem! The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last
lines put the poem all together. The reader found the artwork exceptional and complimented this poem well. Thank you for the author's notes.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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Thank you very much and I'm glad that you liked it. All best
Comment from Leineco
Excellent opening descriptive
golden eagle soars
sweeping the ground with sharp eye
(taut and fraught with tension)
with compelling concluding imagery
lamb in trouble
(cause and effect clearly established)
Nicely done :-)
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
Excellent opening descriptive
golden eagle soars
sweeping the ground with sharp eye
(taut and fraught with tension)
with compelling concluding imagery
lamb in trouble
(cause and effect clearly established)
Nicely done :-)
Comment Written 09-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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Than you so much. I am pleased that you liked it. All best.
Comment from mermaids
Your vivid use of words describes the life of the eagle as he devours his dinner. A clear scene of the eagle swooping down is created. Excellent haiku form that makes nature come alive.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
Your vivid use of words describes the life of the eagle as he devours his dinner. A clear scene of the eagle swooping down is created. Excellent haiku form that makes nature come alive.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much for the great review. I am glad that you liked it. All best.