'Tis the Season
Ah! Sometimes you just gotta laugh. . .79 total reviews
Comment from DinosaurBess
At least you were able to laugh about it all in the end. I wouldn't have been able to do that! You described your incident -- and your emotions you had during the incident -- thoroughly and in great detail. There were a few long sentences that were a bit hard to follow and one or two extra commas, but other than that, your story was quite a smooth and enjoyable one.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2007
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At least you were able to laugh about it all in the end. I wouldn't have been able to do that! You described your incident -- and your emotions you had during the incident -- thoroughly and in great detail. There were a few long sentences that were a bit hard to follow and one or two extra commas, but other than that, your story was quite a smooth and enjoyable one.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2007
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2007
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Thank you...dk-t
Comment from GINTARAS KAVARSKAS
What I didn't like was that you listed reasons. It looked somewhat technical I am sorry to say. But overall performance of your writing was quite good. For example, I liked your linkage and style of writing. Though the saint Christmas was long ago, I am happy to have read about it. Write something interesting about spring or summer now, is it fine? I wish you all the very best next time! I will see if you write something new. GINTARAS KAVARSKAS
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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2007
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What I didn't like was that you listed reasons. It looked somewhat technical I am sorry to say. But overall performance of your writing was quite good. For example, I liked your linkage and style of writing. Though the saint Christmas was long ago, I am happy to have read about it. Write something interesting about spring or summer now, is it fine? I wish you all the very best next time! I will see if you write something new. GINTARAS KAVARSKAS
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Comment Written 15-Apr-2007
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2007
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Hello! Thank you for stopping by. . .not to defend, but, the reasons are listed as part of the humor. . . in spite of what was happening, I was thinking of the poor grammar usage the young salesclerk uttered. . . And as far as spring offerings. . . well, they are in my portfolio. . . very recent. . . Again, stories - time and place - are timeless. . . diane
Comment from Polly_Pisces
LOL...Wonderful, I love the way you composed yourself, I get this way at Wal-Mart..man they keep that store way too warm, I guess I should be grateful, because I am in such a hurry to get out of there, I spend less, but I am pretty much on the verge of "total bitch"(don't take that personal..hehe) by the time I make it to the check out...I've even mentioned how hot it is, and the checkers always tell me that they can't control the temp. in the store because it's done from some main Wal-Mart headquarters at a different location...I always laugh because my mind sees this headquarters as the "Mother Ship"...but I will not go into why, because this would involve me having to explain my "crazy" theory of how I think Wal-Mart; through subliminal messages they send their shoppers, are controlling our minds...hehe...well done, I enjoyed reading...Polly
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2007
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LOL...Wonderful, I love the way you composed yourself, I get this way at Wal-Mart..man they keep that store way too warm, I guess I should be grateful, because I am in such a hurry to get out of there, I spend less, but I am pretty much on the verge of "total bitch"(don't take that personal..hehe) by the time I make it to the check out...I've even mentioned how hot it is, and the checkers always tell me that they can't control the temp. in the store because it's done from some main Wal-Mart headquarters at a different location...I always laugh because my mind sees this headquarters as the "Mother Ship"...but I will not go into why, because this would involve me having to explain my "crazy" theory of how I think Wal-Mart; through subliminal messages they send their shoppers, are controlling our minds...hehe...well done, I enjoyed reading...Polly
Comment Written 15-Apr-2007
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2007
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Hello again, Polly! So glad you enjoyed it... not really one of my best offerings, but I so wanted to get it down on paper for friends who had requested!! diane
Comment from davidray
A very enjoyable read. Congratulations on a well-written piece of work. It reminded me of one of the things that drives me bonkers about the Christmas season.....shopping! I always enjoy your writing, though.
Davidray
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2007
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A very enjoyable read. Congratulations on a well-written piece of work. It reminded me of one of the things that drives me bonkers about the Christmas season.....shopping! I always enjoy your writing, though.
Davidray
Comment Written 15-Apr-2007
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2007
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Hello Dadidray. . . such kind thoughts. . . just a funny story - at my expense!! diane
Comment from Sandisan
A good story. I thoroughly enjoyed this tale. I could say, been there, done that. For some reason, I set those darn things off...even when they make sure they swipe whatever I'm buying...it goes off. This happens to me in a CVS store all the time. They are used to me now. It was embrassing at the airport -my underwire bra caused their sensors to go off, you would of thought this 63 year old grandma was Attila the Hun! So I could really relate to your story.....Sandi
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2007
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A good story. I thoroughly enjoyed this tale. I could say, been there, done that. For some reason, I set those darn things off...even when they make sure they swipe whatever I'm buying...it goes off. This happens to me in a CVS store all the time. They are used to me now. It was embrassing at the airport -my underwire bra caused their sensors to go off, you would of thought this 63 year old grandma was Attila the Hun! So I could really relate to your story.....Sandi
Comment Written 15-Apr-2007
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2007
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Hello Sandi! so pleased you enjoyed. . . what an experience!!! diane
Comment from Dave M
KT,
This is a really good story. I did find one nit, nearly at the end.
A laugh for all the Chrismases past and all the Christmases to come.
The first "Christmases" is misspelled.
Dave M
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2007
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KT,
This is a really good story. I did find one nit, nearly at the end.
A laugh for all the Chrismases past and all the Christmases to come.
The first "Christmases" is misspelled.
Dave M
Comment Written 14-Apr-2007
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2007
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Oh goodness! Thank you for bringing that to my attention! good grief! And thank you for stopping by. . . diane
Comment from Marjorie D.
I loved it! With your great skill, you've presented your story in a way that's vivid, charming and humorous all at the same time. It's a wonderful story and you're a talented writer.
Notes:
...shopping is a year(-)long affair.
...in a well-known Michigan(-)based retail department store...
Good job!
Marjorie
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2007
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I loved it! With your great skill, you've presented your story in a way that's vivid, charming and humorous all at the same time. It's a wonderful story and you're a talented writer.
Notes:
...shopping is a year(-)long affair.
...in a well-known Michigan(-)based retail department store...
Good job!
Marjorie
Comment Written 14-Apr-2007
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2007
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So glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for your kind review! diane
Comment from Guy Anthony De Marco
Well done, your descriptive work was exceptional. It's difficult to get a reader to sympathize with a character (even if it's a real person), but you did a fine job. The ending in particular was a surprise and a true "feel-good" moment. Merry Christmas!
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2007
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Well done, your descriptive work was exceptional. It's difficult to get a reader to sympathize with a character (even if it's a real person), but you did a fine job. The ending in particular was a surprise and a true "feel-good" moment. Merry Christmas!
Comment Written 14-Apr-2007
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2007
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Much appreciation, Guy! I never go to that store without worrying what is going to happen as I exit!! Thank you for your kind review. . . diane
Comment from mslink1
I experienced the same thing, leaving a store more than once, and all they said was...sometimes this happens !!! Well not to me, "I wanted to say, lol."
You stayed focused on your goal for the story and that held my attention. It could use a little tightening here and there(such as: Keys "now" in hand, purse "now is redundant..Words like that are scattered through the story). Know that I think your story is well written, it just could use a little fine tuning...hope that makes sense. I have this problem with my own writing:) Enjoyed the read, and I too, enjoy Christmas. Mary
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2007
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I experienced the same thing, leaving a store more than once, and all they said was...sometimes this happens !!! Well not to me, "I wanted to say, lol."
You stayed focused on your goal for the story and that held my attention. It could use a little tightening here and there(such as: Keys "now" in hand, purse "now is redundant..Words like that are scattered through the story). Know that I think your story is well written, it just could use a little fine tuning...hope that makes sense. I have this problem with my own writing:) Enjoyed the read, and I too, enjoy Christmas. Mary
Comment Written 14-Apr-2007
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2007
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Thank you so much for your kind review! diane
Comment from Penpal
This is an embarrassing moment. Jeesh! You did handle it with dignity though.
I enjoyed your piece on Christmas shopping er... it held my interest and was amusing with a cute twist. Well done.
Sally Saucer
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2007
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This is an embarrassing moment. Jeesh! You did handle it with dignity though.
I enjoyed your piece on Christmas shopping er... it held my interest and was amusing with a cute twist. Well done.
Sally Saucer
Comment Written 13-Apr-2007
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2007
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Hi Sally! Just needed to record this one for my family! Thank you! diane
