Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Battle Cry"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from knowledge
More tears I cry as I read your works. I am to the point now that I can tell it is your work before I see your name, just by reading the title. I hope that you read these important spots of history to your children and grandchildren.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowledge
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010
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More tears I cry as I read your works. I am to the point now that I can tell it is your work before I see your name, just by reading the title. I hope that you read these important spots of history to your children and grandchildren.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowledge
Comment Written 03-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010
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thank you for your most welcome comments Knowledge all my writing is going into a book for the kids and grandkids thank you so much for the 6 stars my friend Gary
Comment from kintesiegel
this poem does give the feel of being there on the lines and being scared to death. this is a well done attempt to capture the horror of war. don't know what this implies but doesn't show though:
"with pain
slow is the battle as I drift away"
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010
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this poem does give the feel of being there on the lines and being scared to death. this is a well done attempt to capture the horror of war. don't know what this implies but doesn't show though:
"with pain
slow is the battle as I drift away"
Comment Written 03-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010
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thank you for your welcome comments kintesiegel
Comment from fictionwriter
That has got to be the most scared and the most horrific feeling to fade away on the battlefield, not knowing if you'll wake up or not. Great job.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010
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That has got to be the most scared and the most horrific feeling to fade away on the battlefield, not knowing if you'll wake up or not. Great job.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010
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thank you for your welcome comments fictionwriter
Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
Your wonderful poem is quite an 'eye-opener'. I had no idea of all these soldiers in a mass grave! You certainly keep us up on our history- and to unknown facts! Always love your informative poems. Keep writing! Betty
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010
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Your wonderful poem is quite an 'eye-opener'. I had no idea of all these soldiers in a mass grave! You certainly keep us up on our history- and to unknown facts! Always love your informative poems. Keep writing! Betty
Comment Written 03-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010
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thank you Betty for your welcome comments Gary
Comment from Black-Saphire
Very good. this piece drew me in right from the start. my favorite lines were:
Charge for the tree line, friends falling away
Digging a mud hole, will this be my grave
You had very good format, but just a tip would be: do not capitalize any of the starting letters, not only does it look better but it puts less focus on that and more focus on the emotions in this. You may also want to change "ok" to "okay." Nice job; keep it up :)
-Jade
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010
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Very good. this piece drew me in right from the start. my favorite lines were:
Charge for the tree line, friends falling away
Digging a mud hole, will this be my grave
You had very good format, but just a tip would be: do not capitalize any of the starting letters, not only does it look better but it puts less focus on that and more focus on the emotions in this. You may also want to change "ok" to "okay." Nice job; keep it up :)
-Jade
Comment Written 03-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010
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thank you Jade for your welcome review and comments Gary
Comment from janian
I can see the image in my mind though I'll never know exactly what it reaaly felt like.But this poem puts my imagination into motion.I get a vivid picture of the agony of the soldiers' charge up that hill and the fear that soldier was feeling. It matches the art work very well . Why did it take so long to get those soldiers' bones recovered?
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010
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I can see the image in my mind though I'll never know exactly what it reaaly felt like.But this poem puts my imagination into motion.I get a vivid picture of the agony of the soldiers' charge up that hill and the fear that soldier was feeling. It matches the art work very well . Why did it take so long to get those soldiers' bones recovered?
Comment Written 03-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010
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thank you so much for your welcome review Jan Gary
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Not a problem. keep up the good work.,janian
Comment from Joan E.
I read with rapt interest about the WWI charge. You captured its movement and devastation with the cadence and rhymes in your poem. Thank you for writing the tribute and adding the dramatic and touching photograph.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010
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I read with rapt interest about the WWI charge. You captured its movement and devastation with the cadence and rhymes in your poem. Thank you for writing the tribute and adding the dramatic and touching photograph.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010
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thank you for your review Joan
Comment from jacket
Your poem was very heart felt, as I remember stories a friend of ours told of serving under Patton. I enjoyed reading your poem; it brought back memories of that friend that passed away last year. I noticed one thing. I have asked someone else this question and they did not know the answer. I have been having a problem with some of the punctuation in things that I post. They are fine on my computer, but when I release them to the sight, some of the punctuation changes. The apostrophe keeps changing to a question mark. I know we all have typos at times, but I double checked these on my papers. I noticed you have a question mark in your notes (soldiers). Is the same thing happening to you?
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010
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Your poem was very heart felt, as I remember stories a friend of ours told of serving under Patton. I enjoyed reading your poem; it brought back memories of that friend that passed away last year. I noticed one thing. I have asked someone else this question and they did not know the answer. I have been having a problem with some of the punctuation in things that I post. They are fine on my computer, but when I release them to the sight, some of the punctuation changes. The apostrophe keeps changing to a question mark. I know we all have typos at times, but I double checked these on my papers. I noticed you have a question mark in your notes (soldiers). Is the same thing happening to you?
Comment Written 03-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010
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it is Jacket but thank you for your review myfriend
Comment from despiser
Deepwater
graphic and grim. I thought you depicted the ww1 scene unique to the period and different from ww2. One spag in "you're be ok"
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010
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Deepwater
graphic and grim. I thought you depicted the ww1 scene unique to the period and different from ww2. One spag in "you're be ok"
Comment Written 03-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010
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thanks despiser for the review and comment Gary
Comment from BeautifulLie
Was it meant to be "you'll be ok"? A good read, a good insight to war. The picture matches it perfectly. It would be nice if we didn't have to fight wars *sigh* Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010
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Was it meant to be "you'll be ok"? A good read, a good insight to war. The picture matches it perfectly. It would be nice if we didn't have to fight wars *sigh* Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010
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welcome Beaut and thanks for reading (you'll be ok) = we get to live one more day, one day at a time
