The Air That I Breathe
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Comment from Jaye Bennett
I really like this poem. Having been around plant, in and out, all my life, I would have difficulty living without them. I would have liked to have given it a higher rating, but there are some things that need to be worked on. The picture is of a fern. A fir is an evergreen tree. I don't know which is the topic plant. In the third stanza, I would suggest a comma after "bad news," too. In the eighth stanza, I think what you want to say is "I plead that you stay awhile." I like "lacy green brings me smiles." I love the very last, when the plant shows it heard your pleadings by birthing a shoot. Best wishes. You can really get the point across. Good job on that.
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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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I really like this poem. Having been around plant, in and out, all my life, I would have difficulty living without them. I would have liked to have given it a higher rating, but there are some things that need to be worked on. The picture is of a fern. A fir is an evergreen tree. I don't know which is the topic plant. In the third stanza, I would suggest a comma after "bad news," too. In the eighth stanza, I think what you want to say is "I plead that you stay awhile." I like "lacy green brings me smiles." I love the very last, when the plant shows it heard your pleadings by birthing a shoot. Best wishes. You can really get the point across. Good job on that.
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Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Thanks for the tips... sometimes I wonder where my head is... although punctuation isn't a strong point with me... thanks again. yours, diana
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If you ever want to try the lock and key deal, I could maybe be of help on punctuation.
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I would truly appreciate that... thanks so much.
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I'm in as Jaye Bennett.
Comment from Teresa Alford
Your poem is relatable to me. I am undertaking the planting of various plants and shrubs but know not what I am doing. I cross my fingers and hope for the best. I do talk to them and give them love. Your poem is cleverly written, Great job.
One thing I noticed: I plea that -your- (remove r) stay awhile Best to you! TA ";~)
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Your poem is relatable to me. I am undertaking the planting of various plants and shrubs but know not what I am doing. I cross my fingers and hope for the best. I do talk to them and give them love. Your poem is cleverly written, Great job.
One thing I noticed: I plea that -your- (remove r) stay awhile Best to you! TA ";~)
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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thanks so much sweetie... yours, diana
Comment from djeckert
This was an interesting read. It reminds me of a cute movie I just watched called "destination wedding" , where Wynona Ryder tried exhaling her breath on her dying plant, exclaiming "come on photosynthesis" It was a cute and different romantic comedy, i'd recommend. A heads up on a typo: "I plea that 'your' stay awhile. "
It was a pleasure to read, and good luck with contest, and God Bless.
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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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This was an interesting read. It reminds me of a cute movie I just watched called "destination wedding" , where Wynona Ryder tried exhaling her breath on her dying plant, exclaiming "come on photosynthesis" It was a cute and different romantic comedy, i'd recommend. A heads up on a typo: "I plea that 'your' stay awhile. "
It was a pleasure to read, and good luck with contest, and God Bless.
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Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Thank you so, so much for reviewing and I will check out destination wedding... sounds like fun and can't go wrong with Wynona
