Ode to Child's Pose
Discovering Yoga95 total reviews
Comment from Amicus
I enjoyed reading this lovely image filled poem, amada. That you were restricted to a list of required words never entered my mind until I read your notes as each was so well integrated into the vision presented here. Your smooth flowing, smart, metaphorical poem made for most enjoyable reading. Good stuff.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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I enjoyed reading this lovely image filled poem, amada. That you were restricted to a list of required words never entered my mind until I read your notes as each was so well integrated into the vision presented here. Your smooth flowing, smart, metaphorical poem made for most enjoyable reading. Good stuff.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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That's the best review, that the required words were integrated in the vision. I worked a lot on it. It's so good to be recognized.
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That's the best review, that the required words were integrated in the vision. I worked a lot on it. It's so good to be recognized.
Comment from Dustman6180
I enjoyed the free verse form that you used for this contest entry. I've never done Yoga, but you've seemed to describe this particular pose quite well. Good luck.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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I enjoyed the free verse form that you used for this contest entry. I've never done Yoga, but you've seemed to describe this particular pose quite well. Good luck.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you for reading my work and for the good wishes.
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is very beautiful, my friend. I like the image of the earth coming up to embrace one who is in a particular posture. It is a poem that shows clear, moving images. kudos
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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This is very beautiful, my friend. I like the image of the earth coming up to embrace one who is in a particular posture. It is a poem that shows clear, moving images. kudos
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you Perp for reviewing this work.
Comment from Dall
Someone told me about Yoga a long time ago and I started stretching and bending my body.. It was going well until I had an accident and hurt my back.. I liked this, it breathes of spirit, body and mind in tune with our earth.. well done!
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Someone told me about Yoga a long time ago and I started stretching and bending my body.. It was going well until I had an accident and hurt my back.. I liked this, it breathes of spirit, body and mind in tune with our earth.. well done!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you Dali. Wish you a perfect return to health.
Comment from Nicki_Mist
You did a beautiful job of writing a poem with those words. Good luck in the contest. Your detail, flow and rhythm were awesome. The imagery was right on. Great poem.
Nicole
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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You did a beautiful job of writing a poem with those words. Good luck in the contest. Your detail, flow and rhythm were awesome. The imagery was right on. Great poem.
Nicole
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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thank you Nicole for this great review to my work.
Comment from rama devi
Outstanding free verse ode! I love it. This captures the feelings of yoga with fresh and original imagery (fresh healed vase---perfect!)
And fine phrasing. Flows well and graciously with good use of dramatic pause.
Well presented and makes a strong impression!
Great word choices--like twinge, anchor, vessel,plenitude, etc.
Pray with my body---great line.
Bravo.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Outstanding free verse ode! I love it. This captures the feelings of yoga with fresh and original imagery (fresh healed vase---perfect!)
And fine phrasing. Flows well and graciously with good use of dramatic pause.
Well presented and makes a strong impression!
Great word choices--like twinge, anchor, vessel,plenitude, etc.
Pray with my body---great line.
Bravo.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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I'm thrilled you like it. I worked a lot on this one trying to send out the feeling of this pose through those words that called to you. Thank you!
Comment from chaswriter
amada - I became relaxed just reading your poem. It's quite descriptive and yet it imbues an inner peace. Well written. I certainly enjoyed it.
Charlie
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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amada - I became relaxed just reading your poem. It's quite descriptive and yet it imbues an inner peace. Well written. I certainly enjoyed it.
Charlie
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Charlie, this is the best compliment! Becaming relaxed just by reading this work on relaxing!
Comment from PatriciaLiteHickman
I love this! especially "pray with my body." good presentation and choice of artwork too. Meets the contest requirements and best wishes in the voting booth1
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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I love this! especially "pray with my body." good presentation and choice of artwork too. Meets the contest requirements and best wishes in the voting booth1
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you for the review and for the best wishes!
Comment from AnnaLinda
amada,
Your free verse poem using those specific words,
is superb! I like the various descriptive words
that you have chosen to convey the process of
healing that transpires as you practice yoga.
These lines stood out to me:
"Inner twinge
of emotion
as I quietly anchor
with the center
of my vessel."
This is a very excellent entry for that contest!
I really enjoyed reading it.
Linda
(You may want to take out the question
marks in your author notes:)
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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amada,
Your free verse poem using those specific words,
is superb! I like the various descriptive words
that you have chosen to convey the process of
healing that transpires as you practice yoga.
These lines stood out to me:
"Inner twinge
of emotion
as I quietly anchor
with the center
of my vessel."
This is a very excellent entry for that contest!
I really enjoyed reading it.
Linda
(You may want to take out the question
marks in your author notes:)
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Hi Sweet Linda. Thank you for the very positive review and for enjoying the read. (I took out those nasty question marks).
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You are welcome! Yes, they appear when
we copy and paste from some sites. I have
had it happen to me:)
You are welcome,
Linda
Comment from Poetic Friend
Okay, Amada. I am first to admit that I do not anything about yoga, but I learned from your well-written poem.
The flow of your words are relaxing as the yoga.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Okay, Amada. I am first to admit that I do not anything about yoga, but I learned from your well-written poem.
The flow of your words are relaxing as the yoga.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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That's the best compliment! Even not knowing yoga you were relaxed by my words about yoga. Just what I have hoping for. Thank you!