Writings From the Heart
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Comment from Mastery
Good rhyming poetry, GW. A bit of philosophy never hurts...and this is well stated. I wish you luck with it and thanks for sharing...Bob
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Good rhyming poetry, GW. A bit of philosophy never hurts...and this is well stated. I wish you luck with it and thanks for sharing...Bob
Comment Written 06-May-2010
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thank you Bob for reading
Comment from spellbound
Beautiful.
I feel the power of your words of encouragement.
So truthful for so many.
This sentence is so profound: So always remember the place that you start
I wonder how many would remember the place they started instead of going to the place they stopped.
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Beautiful.
I feel the power of your words of encouragement.
So truthful for so many.
This sentence is so profound: So always remember the place that you start
I wonder how many would remember the place they started instead of going to the place they stopped.
Comment Written 06-May-2010
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thank you spell for reading
Comment from Oatmeal
deepwater,
Very nicely written work. The theme was well chosen. The poem is perfectly arranged. It had very good formatting. Smooth flowing. Understandable. Wonderful job!
I only spotted two small errors, nothing to get too upset about-
Sadness is(,) the wish that you never achieve
**delete this comma
Alone in the darkness(,) with dreams of reprieve
**delete this comma
Everything else was clean. Comprehensible and very nicely written.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
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deepwater,
Very nicely written work. The theme was well chosen. The poem is perfectly arranged. It had very good formatting. Smooth flowing. Understandable. Wonderful job!
I only spotted two small errors, nothing to get too upset about-
Sadness is(,) the wish that you never achieve
**delete this comma
Alone in the darkness(,) with dreams of reprieve
**delete this comma
Everything else was clean. Comprehensible and very nicely written.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 06-May-2010
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thank you oatmeal for your open comments
Comment from missy98writer
deepwater,
thought provoking poem you've have penned. Great writing and the rhyme worked. I especially liked:
So remove your defenses, go reach for the sky
Go forward with gusto show life what you are
The phoenix that rise's, now claim your new start
Reach out for the hands that will pull you up high
Thanks for sharing your poem. Although some art work would have enhance your poem. I'm awarding you five stars for your piece titled simply as 'Life.'
Melissa.
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deepwater,
thought provoking poem you've have penned. Great writing and the rhyme worked. I especially liked:
So remove your defenses, go reach for the sky
Go forward with gusto show life what you are
The phoenix that rise's, now claim your new start
Reach out for the hands that will pull you up high
Thanks for sharing your poem. Although some art work would have enhance your poem. I'm awarding you five stars for your piece titled simply as 'Life.'
Melissa.
Comment Written 06-May-2010
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thank you missy for your comments and you have a great day Gary
Comment from koyoga
This poem does sum up life in all its complexities.
I love the way you formatted this and the flow to it.
I also really like how you've said we are too lazy ~
but criticize others when they try. So true!
Great work!
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This poem does sum up life in all its complexities.
I love the way you formatted this and the flow to it.
I also really like how you've said we are too lazy ~
but criticize others when they try. So true!
Great work!
Comment Written 06-May-2010
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thank you for reading this Koyoga have a great day Gary
Comment from Aletheia
This is a very deep and meaningful poem. The message I get is that we all have the power from within us to soar above and obtain all of our goals. If only we do not let negativity or jealousy block our thinking, then the possibilities are endless. Well written! B
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This is a very deep and meaningful poem. The message I get is that we all have the power from within us to soar above and obtain all of our goals. If only we do not let negativity or jealousy block our thinking, then the possibilities are endless. Well written! B
Comment Written 06-May-2010
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Thank you begonia
Comment from Sharkey
Beautiful poem with a lot of depth and meaning. This flows very very well and has a really good rhyme scheme, I really liked this one.
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Beautiful poem with a lot of depth and meaning. This flows very very well and has a really good rhyme scheme, I really liked this one.
Comment Written 06-May-2010
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thank you Sharkey
Comment from RobertoK
Another fine effort by you. Your poetry is refreshingly simple and straight from the earth. But it packs a good punch with plenty of interesting imagery. By the way, I've wanted to say this from the time I started reviewing your fine work - I love your green tractor. Ride it Deepwater. Best wishes, RobertoK.
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Another fine effort by you. Your poetry is refreshingly simple and straight from the earth. But it packs a good punch with plenty of interesting imagery. By the way, I've wanted to say this from the time I started reviewing your fine work - I love your green tractor. Ride it Deepwater. Best wishes, RobertoK.
Comment Written 06-May-2010
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thank you Rob i have a red one to,..smiling
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Hi - again, I love the content
of your poem, and the words flow
really well, but... I'm left confused
by the odd line, and altho I've pointed
it out, hoping you might enlighten me,
you don't.
This line - Sadness is, the wish that you never achieve ???
Otherise, an enjoyable read.
Margaret
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Hi - again, I love the content
of your poem, and the words flow
really well, but... I'm left confused
by the odd line, and altho I've pointed
it out, hoping you might enlighten me,
you don't.
This line - Sadness is, the wish that you never achieve ???
Otherise, an enjoyable read.
Margaret
Comment Written 06-May-2010
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Sadness is,.... the wish that you never achieve hope this helps Margaret it was the wish
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Thank you for explaining. M
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again thank you for reading
Comment from rmdelta
deepwater,
this was a strong writing, my friend. Excellent descriptives throughout led to an easy flow. Not being that great at understanding how poetry works, I wonder if you should leave the apostrophe out of 'rise's'? Your call on that.
Great work.
Reggie
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deepwater,
this was a strong writing, my friend. Excellent descriptives throughout led to an easy flow. Not being that great at understanding how poetry works, I wonder if you should leave the apostrophe out of 'rise's'? Your call on that.
Great work.
Reggie
Comment Written 06-May-2010
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thank you Reggie its my first year to whats poetry ?? smiling
Gary
