Comment from InHisownwrite

Excellent

These wartime depictions come straight from your heart..
And I bet almost take you right back there....
That's what it feels like to read them... I almost feel like I'm right in that place.... Great imagery..
Love it! Bryan

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2010

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010

thank you for the review and reading Bryan GW

Comment from jwlee211

Excellent

I really like this poem. It speaks well to the bravery of the soldiers who faced death and danger and still kept moving up the hill. Great read.

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2010

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010

thank you Jwlee

Comment from Kingsland

Good

six thousand soldiers we march through the night>comma between soldiers and we
shells bursting in red glair>glare
Praying to god that I'm going to make it up there> god needs to be God
Firing ahead as I run so afraid,>comma between ahead and as
buddy beside me saying you're be ok > you'll not you're, as you're is you are, and you'll is you will

The poem tells a good tale but needs some corrections. I enjoyed this poetic tale and will look forward to reading more of your poetic pieces... John

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 Comment Written 03-Jun-2010

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010

thanks john for the change/comments

Comment from zoocq

Excellent

Beautifully composed and what a tremendous story you tell. How wonderful that these men will finally be acknowledged and given a 'home.'

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 Comment Written 03-Jun-2010

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010

thank you Zoocq