To a son of God
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Babylon The Whore!"Metre ... Freeverse & Quatrain
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Comment from tinlight
This holds dark power: ritual passing through her hands; consuming minds. How easily we are fooled!
her reins are loose: Hell is enlarged for you, not yet her. This line lured me to the brink of the abyss.
Babylon still shines with the lurid light of pride preceding a fall. Beware!
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2012
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This holds dark power: ritual passing through her hands; consuming minds. How easily we are fooled!
her reins are loose: Hell is enlarged for you, not yet her. This line lured me to the brink of the abyss.
Babylon still shines with the lurid light of pride preceding a fall. Beware!
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2012
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You got it...!
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
I will confess my friend I do not understand this poem fully my ignorance I suppose but I can tell you it is very well written it seems to have a strong feel to the work regards Jill
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2012
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I will confess my friend I do not understand this poem fully my ignorance I suppose but I can tell you it is very well written it seems to have a strong feel to the work regards Jill
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2012
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Thanks jill, much appreciated.
Comment from smudge
This poem is free verse. It uses repetition to its full extent to the sacrifice of rhyme. It is a condemnation of evil in the city of Babylon in the personification of a whore.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2012
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This poem is free verse. It uses repetition to its full extent to the sacrifice of rhyme. It is a condemnation of evil in the city of Babylon in the personification of a whore.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2012
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Not quite free verse check the notes...
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
A good write and the colours speak volumes within the poem. I enjoyed reading your poem and the presentation was good. The art work was chosen well and bled with the poem. Needs no change to it. Mary
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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A good write and the colours speak volumes within the poem. I enjoyed reading your poem and the presentation was good. The art work was chosen well and bled with the poem. Needs no change to it. Mary
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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much appreciated...
Comment from visionary1234
Well I'm giving it a '5' because I can see your passion - but frankly, I'd LOVE some more author notes because it's really hard to follow the piece if you're not into biblical history (I've forgotten a LOT of mine!)
Bal(Baal?) toucheth thy soul whore.
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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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Well I'm giving it a '5' because I can see your passion - but frankly, I'd LOVE some more author notes because it's really hard to follow the piece if you're not into biblical history (I've forgotten a LOT of mine!)
Bal(Baal?) toucheth thy soul whore.
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Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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Well that is part of the progression fro, Bal=Baal=Ballim: all the same power of Babylon but in different generations.
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then PLEASE give us some good author notes! that way, you'll have a much broader, more appreciative audience, I can assure you, my dear! It would be a huge help!
Comment from Laurie Clayton
This is a poem that certainly
captures the reader and holds
them.
I find that there is a strength to your imagery
which is reflected and strengthend
further, by the use of repetition.
Thank you for sharing,
Laurie
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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This is a poem that certainly
captures the reader and holds
them.
I find that there is a strength to your imagery
which is reflected and strengthend
further, by the use of repetition.
Thank you for sharing,
Laurie
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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Well, I guess it worked then, glad you could enjoy.
Comment from OLA THOMAS
What a wonderful replay or replica of the woe proclaimed on Babylon in the Bible. The idea of chastising a supposed wayward in this image of the Babylon is awesome. The intended repetitions drive home the message effectively.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2012
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What a wonderful replay or replica of the woe proclaimed on Babylon in the Bible. The idea of chastising a supposed wayward in this image of the Babylon is awesome. The intended repetitions drive home the message effectively.
ola thomas
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2012
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Thanks ola, much appreciate.
Comment from dhee khaye
I love your poem, specially because it is meant for spiritual cause. I enjoyed reading your work. It so nice and clear. God Bless.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2012
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I love your poem, specially because it is meant for spiritual cause. I enjoyed reading your work. It so nice and clear. God Bless.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2012
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Thanks, God Bless...
Comment from J. D. Means
Intriguing poem, with a hint of biblical and satanic clashes. Works well with the picture. Good Artwork and very deep poem. But isn't that what poems are supposed to do? Stir the emotion and invoke a sense of, in this case, unease.
Working on the emotions of good verses evil, it plays well on opening that gate, better left closed.
Good play. Woe to Babylon.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2012
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Intriguing poem, with a hint of biblical and satanic clashes. Works well with the picture. Good Artwork and very deep poem. But isn't that what poems are supposed to do? Stir the emotion and invoke a sense of, in this case, unease.
Working on the emotions of good verses evil, it plays well on opening that gate, better left closed.
Good play. Woe to Babylon.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2012
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Well, thats what I write about mainly, Heaven and Hell.
Comment from rosmarton
Wow! This pulled me into my knowledge of scriptural reference and it touched me deeply.
I was not totally sure concerning the spelling of reigns/reins it allows for double meaning depending on the reference you are alluding to.
The repetition is good for that is the constant pattern through the scriptures and indeed progressive into modern times. Pride cometh before the fall and it is covering this Babylonian world in sin.
Thank you for stirring my soul.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2012
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Wow! This pulled me into my knowledge of scriptural reference and it touched me deeply.
I was not totally sure concerning the spelling of reigns/reins it allows for double meaning depending on the reference you are alluding to.
The repetition is good for that is the constant pattern through the scriptures and indeed progressive into modern times. Pride cometh before the fall and it is covering this Babylonian world in sin.
Thank you for stirring my soul.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2012
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Slight adjustment made hope you agree:reins/ inward parts or heart.
