Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Moonshine"A collection of my children's poems
80 total reviews
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
As nonsense goes, this is a well done nonsense poem. It has a logical rhyme scheme, with real rhymes and a pleasant lilting rhythm and flow. I appreciate that it does not depend on bathroom or tawdry sex for humor. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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As nonsense goes, this is a well done nonsense poem. It has a logical rhyme scheme, with real rhymes and a pleasant lilting rhythm and flow. I appreciate that it does not depend on bathroom or tawdry sex for humor. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 23-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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Thanks, Jeanie - I appreciate the kind words.
Steve
Comment from Cry the Vile Rebel
That's an amazing diversity you have populating your moon! I was afraid for the moment that the grizzly's solution would be some natural selection along the lines of "dessert" : ) This was the perfect Momday morning poem.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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That's an amazing diversity you have populating your moon! I was afraid for the moment that the grizzly's solution would be some natural selection along the lines of "dessert" : ) This was the perfect Momday morning poem.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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.... but maybe it would be Fat who ate all the others!
Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from emjaihammond
There was a lot of good rhyme in this one. With six lines in each stanza, you have done well bringing this very strong imaginative story to us. I thought it showed a lot of great thought and imagination. Kids would love this.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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There was a lot of good rhyme in this one. With six lines in each stanza, you have done well bringing this very strong imaginative story to us. I thought it showed a lot of great thought and imagination. Kids would love this.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Cookie333
Well done, a fun little trip to the moon while this reader remained on earth. I wish you well in t he contest my friend,
thank you
karen
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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Well done, a fun little trip to the moon while this reader remained on earth. I wish you well in t he contest my friend,
thank you
karen
Comment Written 23-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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Thanks, Karen.
Steve
Comment from AnnieDawn
My golly! I am still laughing! I am obliged to give you six stars on that one and applaud you on how well you carried the characters throughout your poem. I have weeded through your punctuation and cannot find an error anywhere. Great job and good luck. I absolutely loved it and put it in a class with 'Alice in Wonderland". Wow.
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My golly! I am still laughing! I am obliged to give you six stars on that one and applaud you on how well you carried the characters throughout your poem. I have weeded through your punctuation and cannot find an error anywhere. Great job and good luck. I absolutely loved it and put it in a class with 'Alice in Wonderland". Wow.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for the enthusiastic review and the six stars - you will be pleased to know that I won the contest with this one.
Steve
Comment from barkingdog
It sounds like they all had a delightful time as 'they tangoed till twilight 'neath tropical trees.'(excellent alliteration.)
Wonderful rhyming and perfect iambic meter.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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It sounds like they all had a delightful time as 'they tangoed till twilight 'neath tropical trees.'(excellent alliteration.)
Wonderful rhyming and perfect iambic meter.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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Thanks, bd!
Steve
Comment from country ranch writer
The poem says it all I HAVE NOTHING TO SAY EXCEPT IT IS A TONGUE TWISTER TO KEEP IT ALL STRAIGHT I THINK IT IS TIME WE ALL HIT THE HAY TOMORROW IS ANOTHER DAY
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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The poem says it all I HAVE NOTHING TO SAY EXCEPT IT IS A TONGUE TWISTER TO KEEP IT ALL STRAIGHT I THINK IT IS TIME WE ALL HIT THE HAY TOMORROW IS ANOTHER DAY
Comment Written 23-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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Thank you.
Steve
Comment from pickthorn
tHESE CHARACTERS THAT LIVED ON THE MOON seem harmless enough. You have indeed written a funny nonsense poem. Well written, I might add. Good luck in the contest, you have a strong entry.
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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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tHESE CHARACTERS THAT LIVED ON THE MOON seem harmless enough. You have indeed written a funny nonsense poem. Well written, I might add. Good luck in the contest, you have a strong entry.
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Comment Written 23-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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Thank you.
Comment from mfowler
I was going to enter but with such a great poem like this in the contest I'll leave it till another day. Your wit is just crazy good. Your verses flow like bull's milk (my idea of silly nonsense). And, I love the deft reference to 'The Owl and the Pussycat'....one of the best in this genre.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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I was going to enter but with such a great poem like this in the contest I'll leave it till another day. Your wit is just crazy good. Your verses flow like bull's milk (my idea of silly nonsense). And, I love the deft reference to 'The Owl and the Pussycat'....one of the best in this genre.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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Two reviews and two poets scared out of the contest..... I knew I should have waited to post this nearer the deadline.
Thanks for the kind words and the six shiny stars to go with my moonshine.
Comment from tfawcus
Delightful! I see you're a fan of Edward Lear as well! I grew up on an unrestricted diet of Jumblies and the Quangle-Wangle. I love the last two lines 'paired up in threes and they tangoed till twilight...' The metre you have chosen suits your poem most admirably! Good luck with the competition! I had a passing fancy to throw my hat in the ring too, but I am now overawed by at least one other protagonist!
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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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Delightful! I see you're a fan of Edward Lear as well! I grew up on an unrestricted diet of Jumblies and the Quangle-Wangle. I love the last two lines 'paired up in threes and they tangoed till twilight...' The metre you have chosen suits your poem most admirably! Good luck with the competition! I had a passing fancy to throw my hat in the ring too, but I am now overawed by at least one other protagonist!
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Comment Written 23-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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Aww, I dunno - you and Geoff could just pen another flamin' aussie sonnet!
Thanks for stopping by.