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Writings From the Heart

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A book of Poetry & Writing

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Comment from dragonpoet
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This is a sad but true commentary on the daily life of war as I would guess having never fought, luckily.

It has strong images and emotion. It shows how lonely and hopeless war is and how lucky those who return are.

I think there should be a comma after young in line 5.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2014


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Comment from kiwisteveh
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As the centenary of this war is upon us our thoughts turn more and more to the tragic events of those terrible years. Your poem brings some of those times to life. What a waste of a generation of young men.

Steve

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Comment from scd41
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Your nice poem served to remind readers of the destruction and loss of human lives caused by The First World war. Even after nearly hundred years, man has not learnt any lessons. Wars have been waged and are still raging with more ferocity. Those who lay down their lives in wars may get some honour posthumously but they are, after all, someone's brothers, fathers or husbands whose personal loses remain indeterminate.Liked the poem.

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Comment from BOWLED300
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Awesome poem Oh how we take for granted our freedom in this great country of ours and the many men and women who have given their lives for their country. My father was in Vietnam and grandfather was in WWII. We must never forget where we came from thanks for sharing John M

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2014


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Comment from visionary1234
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What a lovely tribute to Pam, dw. She was a special presence who deeply touched so many of us! The First World War is an event that still touches me, as my grandfathers were both involved and had many stories to tell. My only useful critique here would be a grammatical point:
"Tomorrow will bring the same as today with less of my brothers beside",
- the correct English useage would not be 'less of' it would be 'fewer than' (which applies to numbers) - jiggers up your rhythm of course, but it sticks out as a grammatical point.
:)Sharyn

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2014


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Comment from DR DIP
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Another deepwater classic. Beautiful flow always have a habit of trying to read every poem in rhyming beat..oh weell the downfalls of being a rhymer! lol

You have beautiful word combinations Deepy welll done

thanks for sharing

dip

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Comment from rjuselius
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this is a beautiful piece of poetic art and a good social commentary on the ills of war! war is so futile and people so frail. they shouldn't be forced to kill.
thank you for sharing!

rebekka x

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Comment from ujbhurtah
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The picture and the poem perfectly match together. During the war we are united as one nation, like brothers in arms. Very good job and inspirational poem about unity in war. It should especially be dedicated to all soldiers from USA who go to fight in difficult countries such as Iran, Afghanistan, Syria, etc. a beautiful homage for American troops!

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Comment from Christine B.
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I'd be a fool to chime in about the torment faced by those in combat without first stating that it is all absolutely obvious. Wars, wars, wars; even the echo of them, sounding in fields soaked in bloodshed, is baffling. The potential that leaves our world when people are killed as a result of shallow instruction. Yours is a fine, respectful write.

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Comment from Bicpen
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Excellent ...

... a fitting tribute with much poise and reflection with a good hook and counter conclusion drawing on the emotions and deelivering with a pack and punch Pam would have liked ... as far as corrections none needed and quite outstanding and sweet in its sentiment and the picture suits the mood and relevance.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2014


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    Thank you Bicpen