Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Riding to forget,"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Deejharrington
I loved the honestly and truth of this story told in verse. Things have changed very little over the years in the life on a working ranch. It's a tough way to live. Some women and men just can't handle it. I liked the way you showed he still had his friends and hot coffee waiting for him.
dj
reply by the author on 28-May-2010
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I loved the honestly and truth of this story told in verse. Things have changed very little over the years in the life on a working ranch. It's a tough way to live. Some women and men just can't handle it. I liked the way you showed he still had his friends and hot coffee waiting for him.
dj
Comment Written 28-May-2010
reply by the author on 28-May-2010
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Thanks for reading dj
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you're welcome
deb
Comment from jwlee211
Excellent poem. You develop the tone of the Cowboy very well. Such a rare and great breed. So true that some do not or will never accept their way of life. Great work
reply by the author on 28-May-2010
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Excellent poem. You develop the tone of the Cowboy very well. Such a rare and great breed. So true that some do not or will never accept their way of life. Great work
Comment Written 28-May-2010
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thank you for reading jwlee
Comment from rmdelta
deepwater,
an excellent writing, my friend. Great descriptives you've chosen allow us such vivid imagery we see what you're saying. Great job.
REggie
reply by the author on 28-May-2010
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deepwater,
an excellent writing, my friend. Great descriptives you've chosen allow us such vivid imagery we see what you're saying. Great job.
REggie
Comment Written 28-May-2010
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thank you REggie
Comment from Realist101
And what a silly woman she was. I have dreamed of a cowboy stealing me away so I could ride and be free out where the wind blows the cobwebs out of my head!! HA. This is a wonderful piece...reminds me of a song by Kenny Rogers...cannot remember that title, but the gal left a husband with children...nice work Gary!! Susan
reply by the author on 28-May-2010
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And what a silly woman she was. I have dreamed of a cowboy stealing me away so I could ride and be free out where the wind blows the cobwebs out of my head!! HA. This is a wonderful piece...reminds me of a song by Kenny Rogers...cannot remember that title, but the gal left a husband with children...nice work Gary!! Susan
Comment Written 28-May-2010
reply by the author on 28-May-2010
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thank you Susan for reading fine time to leave me luseal by K
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YES! THANK YOU...could not remember it...now it comes back...I loved that sad song, and love your work too...S.
Comment from bethmarie
This is a very good poem, with great rhythm and description. I would just suggest that using the words above, rides issues lowlands feeds don't need an
apostrophe - s and just correct "the cowboy is a simply
man" to "the cowboy is a simple man". Just minor things but they might detract from full appreciation of this very good poem
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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This is a very good poem, with great rhythm and description. I would just suggest that using the words above, rides issues lowlands feeds don't need an
apostrophe - s and just correct "the cowboy is a simply
man" to "the cowboy is a simple man". Just minor things but they might detract from full appreciation of this very good poem
Comment Written 10-May-2010
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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changed thank you for the comments and help
Comment from yellowrosebud
I love this poem about a brokenhearted cowboy.I often wish I had a horse to ride off my fustrations and pain.I think that would be perfect therapy.I don't know why love is so fleeing,but if you are blessed to find the right one its forever.Well Expressed my cowboy poet!"Rosebud"
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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I love this poem about a brokenhearted cowboy.I often wish I had a horse to ride off my fustrations and pain.I think that would be perfect therapy.I don't know why love is so fleeing,but if you are blessed to find the right one its forever.Well Expressed my cowboy poet!"Rosebud"
Comment Written 10-May-2010
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thank you rosebud for reading, your old cowboy friend
Comment from harleyangelbrat
This is really good. It is sad, but sweet. It's obvious that you are a hard working man. You are truly blessed with a talent for words, as well. I really enjoyed reading this very much. Excellent read, God bless you!
reply by the author on 03-May-2010
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This is really good. It is sad, but sweet. It's obvious that you are a hard working man. You are truly blessed with a talent for words, as well. I really enjoyed reading this very much. Excellent read, God bless you!
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 03-May-2010
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thank you
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You are very welcome. Have a blessed week. Marilyn
Comment from Donna Thompson
I sense an aabbcc scheme however phone and storm don't rhyme
Also simply should be simple.
I really got a great grasp on the life of the cowboy and you did an excellent job. Great job
reply by the author on 03-May-2010
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I sense an aabbcc scheme however phone and storm don't rhyme
Also simply should be simple.
I really got a great grasp on the life of the cowboy and you did an excellent job. Great job
Comment Written 02-May-2010
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thank you
Comment from Ann Smith
I can hear the voice of the cowby and it is sad that some women never learn to like that kind of life style. However, there are others that would jump at the chance to be the wife of a cowboy. The imagery, rhythm, and rhyme of the poem is good. The poem reads to me more like couplets, and sometimes it is good to divide them as such. It slows the poem down and allows the reader time to soak up each thought. You don't need an apostrophe on rides, fences, and lowlands. Just blame the computer. ann
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I can hear the voice of the cowby and it is sad that some women never learn to like that kind of life style. However, there are others that would jump at the chance to be the wife of a cowboy. The imagery, rhythm, and rhyme of the poem is good. The poem reads to me more like couplets, and sometimes it is good to divide them as such. It slows the poem down and allows the reader time to soak up each thought. You don't need an apostrophe on rides, fences, and lowlands. Just blame the computer. ann
Comment Written 02-May-2010
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thanks for reading ann
Comment from Sharkey
Beautiful. This is a sad story with a lot of emotion and truth behind it. This flows well and the rhythm and rhyme works, good job.
reply by the author on 03-May-2010
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Beautiful. This is a sad story with a lot of emotion and truth behind it. This flows well and the rhythm and rhyme works, good job.
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 03-May-2010
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thank you
