Comment from brentman99

Good

I wanted to give five stars because I love the picture and the essence of the poem, but I think that some of the errors need to be corrected.

I have a suggestion - 'Neath moonlit gloom, (feel) death's sting.

Correction - When evil has but run its course (it's is a contraction of it is, not possessive)

If you are going to capitalize Heaven, you should do the same for Hell and Earth. If I'm wrong on any of these points, let me know.

But other than that, I liked the poem. Thanks for sharing, Brent.



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 Comment Written 31-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2013

And thanks for reading and reviewing it, Brent. Most appreciated.

Comment from pipersfancy

Excellent

I, for one, love the sound effects! Adds to the creepy atmosphere... Hmm... wedding a corpse... interesting notes you've given. Long time girlfriend, holding true to a promise of marriage even after death... not quite sure which side of the crypt I'm on for this...

Happy Halloween!
PF

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2013

Ha ha, me either, PF. But, like I said, sometimes truth is really stranger than fiction. It is kind of romantic, in a creepy, necrophilia sort of way, LOL...

Thanks for reading and reviewing it for me!

Comment from allborn66

Excellent

This is a delightfully creepy poem. The word choice is strong. The rhyme enhances the piece. You communicate the theme well.
Personal opinion - you can't marry a dead person because they can not consent to the union in this world before witnesses.
Barbara

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2013

Yeah, that's exactly what I thought when I read that story. Of course, they were betrothed before her death, so I suppose she'd already given her consent to be married. After all, she couldn't say NO now, lol...

Thanks for the great review, Barbara.

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

A quite chilling story you tell Dean. One might even say a little perverse. Halloween brings out all sorts of weird stories doesn't it? Yours are the best though. So morose that the flesh lies rotten in the bottom of the casket. OOOOOOOOh just to say it gives me the chills.

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2013

Thanks, Gungalo, I really appreciate that!

I heard "Thriller", by Michael Jackson last night on a radio station, and shortly thereafter, I caught the story of the guy marrying the corpse bride a few minutes later, almost as soon as "Thriller" had finished playing. I thought, Self...you just gotta' write a poem centered around that excellent Vincent Price narrative in that song. So...I did!

Thanks again, my friend!

reply by Gungalo on 31-Oct-2013

Ahhhhhsome Dean.

Comment from baustian64

Excellent

Well, your notes was very interesting but how many people would do this? It can be taken several ways. Lots of people would think it creepy, and like you said some will call it something else. I would not call it romantic. I guess I don't have a name for it.

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 Comment Written 31-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2013

Hah, that makes two of us, baustian64. I couldn't imagine doing such a thing. I do think it's sort of romantic, I agree.

Thanks for the read and review!