Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 52 "Soldier response to Dear John."A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Teri7
This is a very sad dear John letter. It almost made me cry. you used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. Great artwork..Hugs, Teri
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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This is a very sad dear John letter. It almost made me cry. you used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. Great artwork..Hugs, Teri
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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thank you for this
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great job
Comment from kintesiegel
Yikes, you really have a powerful pen. I was thinking you should write a novel. You sure have the passion and the subject matter. Hope you are doing okay.
bev
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Yikes, you really have a powerful pen. I was thinking you should write a novel. You sure have the passion and the subject matter. Hope you are doing okay.
bev
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thank you for this
Comment from visionary1234
Unfortunately not such an uncommon occurance, either in those times or these, dw, hmm? "just our body's" (bodies) ... but you capture the feeling, and the era, well :)S
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Unfortunately not such an uncommon occurance, either in those times or these, dw, hmm? "just our body's" (bodies) ... but you capture the feeling, and the era, well :)S
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
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thank you
Comment from gypsycaravan
This is so very sad and happens more than we would like to know. The letter is written beautifully with a wonderful photograph to accompany. Thanks for posting.
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This is so very sad and happens more than we would like to know. The letter is written beautifully with a wonderful photograph to accompany. Thanks for posting.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
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thank you
Comment from kiwijenny
What a sad letter....saddest thing...........to know ...it would be a dead man.....let them know I died a broken man.......oh this is the saddest poem
Well written,,,,,,.,..........................
God bless
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What a sad letter....saddest thing...........to know ...it would be a dead man.....let them know I died a broken man.......oh this is the saddest poem
Well written,,,,,,.,..........................
God bless
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
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thank you
Comment from Oatmeal
deepwater,
Your thoughts are well described. Parts made me chuckle and parts were sad...so bittersweet. The theme is strong. Your feelings are expressed well. Your arrangement looks very nice. The flow is smooth.
There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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deepwater,
Your thoughts are well described. Parts made me chuckle and parts were sad...so bittersweet. The theme is strong. Your feelings are expressed well. Your arrangement looks very nice. The flow is smooth.
There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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thank you
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dw,
You are welcome.
Otmeal
Comment from risktaker
Very vivid picture of heart break. The photo is excellent and relevant. I can feel the hurt, the emotion of the memories and the sadness at knowing the relationship is over. I sense the death of a dream and the death of a relationship. Message well expressed.Thanks
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Very vivid picture of heart break. The photo is excellent and relevant. I can feel the hurt, the emotion of the memories and the sadness at knowing the relationship is over. I sense the death of a dream and the death of a relationship. Message well expressed.Thanks
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
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thank you
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OK
Comment from acerisestory
This is a lovely free verse poem, Gary. I very much like that the soldier is writing to his wife and recapping their first meeting and all that happened to them thereafter. I like the repetition of "I remember." Your words flow well. Nice use of internal rhyme. A sad ending.
There are a few spags that you might want to correct: 6th line: bodies; 9th line: new lives; 11th line: brings
Well done, Gary! Thank you for sharing. Alana
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This is a lovely free verse poem, Gary. I very much like that the soldier is writing to his wife and recapping their first meeting and all that happened to them thereafter. I like the repetition of "I remember." Your words flow well. Nice use of internal rhyme. A sad ending.
There are a few spags that you might want to correct: 6th line: bodies; 9th line: new lives; 11th line: brings
Well done, Gary! Thank you for sharing. Alana
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
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thank you
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You are welcome, Gary. Alana
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, deepwater, you did an excellent job portraying the love and hope the soldier felt, but when he was fighting for freedom, his wife found comfort in the arms of another so he lost his zest to come back home. I enjoyed reading it
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this is an excellent write, deepwater, you did an excellent job portraying the love and hope the soldier felt, but when he was fighting for freedom, his wife found comfort in the arms of another so he lost his zest to come back home. I enjoyed reading it
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
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thank you
Comment from c_lucas
The "Dear John Letter," is the cruelest thing a love one can receive in combat. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
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The "Dear John Letter," is the cruelest thing a love one can receive in combat. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
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thank you
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You're welcome, Gary. Charlie.
