Hot Dogs, French Fries, Lemonade!
An ode to a hot dog stand.130 total reviews
Comment from arnie47
Excellent visual and imagery. Reading actually made me hungry especially the mention of lemon chiffone cake, love lemon cake and cookies. I also liked the mention of the stars and how they triggered your childhood memories. Very good job.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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Excellent visual and imagery. Reading actually made me hungry especially the mention of lemon chiffone cake, love lemon cake and cookies. I also liked the mention of the stars and how they triggered your childhood memories. Very good job.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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Thank you, arnie47, for your kind review. This poem just won the contest. I am glad it made you hungry. Thanks for your support and encouragement.
Comment from Linda Kay
You did a great job of capturing your memories of your favorite old eatery. I liked the details in the presentation such as the "melting" font effect. Color in the text - red hot dogs, red tour buses, "yeller girl" also added to imagery created by your words.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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You did a great job of capturing your memories of your favorite old eatery. I liked the details in the presentation such as the "melting" font effect. Color in the text - red hot dogs, red tour buses, "yeller girl" also added to imagery created by your words.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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Thank you, thank you, thank you for your review, Linda Kay. I just won this Ode Poetry contest with the poem you have just reviewed. Reviewers and now voters agree that they "liked the details in the presentation such as the 'melting' font effect." Thanks again for your support.
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Yay, congratulations ☺️
Comment from TOMORAL
What lovely memories this relates to one who is envious of such a place to dine. I found myself relishing (no pun intended) the hot dogs and my mouth started to water. Great writing, here, poet, and how well you describe.
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What lovely memories this relates to one who is envious of such a place to dine. I found myself relishing (no pun intended) the hot dogs and my mouth started to water. Great writing, here, poet, and how well you describe.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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Thank you, TOMORAL, for your generous, six star review. I am glad my poem made your mouth water. Relish the memories, indeed.
Comment from inside echo
You have definitely written an original "Ode" poem. I would have never thought about writing one about a hot dog stand, yet you made it work, and work well. I am sorry your mum couldn't have been with you. It sounds like you had a good day though. Your poem if well written, and your authors notes are very informative. you may want to fix this line....
"I wrote this ode to my favorite hot dog stand while I sat on a red stood on the Hollywood Walk of Fame"
I think you mean stool instead of stood.
Great contest entry. Good luck in the contest.
tgc
echo
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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You have definitely written an original "Ode" poem. I would have never thought about writing one about a hot dog stand, yet you made it work, and work well. I am sorry your mum couldn't have been with you. It sounds like you had a good day though. Your poem if well written, and your authors notes are very informative. you may want to fix this line....
"I wrote this ode to my favorite hot dog stand while I sat on a red stood on the Hollywood Walk of Fame"
I think you mean stool instead of stood.
Great contest entry. Good luck in the contest.
tgc
echo
Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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Thank you, inside echo, for your kind review and and for wishing me good luck in the contest. I am glad you enjoyed my original poem. I will make the correction. Thanks.
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You are most welcome. Good luck.
tgc
echo
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I just won the contest! : ) My first poetry contest. Thanks for your support.
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CONGRATS... A well deserved win. Well done.
Comment from pattipac
Your well penned memoir of Skooby's hot dog stand ,written in the form of a poem,takes me back to my teen years. Like how your memories included your Mom-Yeller Gal's lemon treats. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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Your well penned memoir of Skooby's hot dog stand ,written in the form of a poem,takes me back to my teen years. Like how your memories included your Mom-Yeller Gal's lemon treats. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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Thank you, pattipac, for your kind review and contest well-wishes. I am glad my well-penned poem took you back to your teen years.
Comment from TAB_that's me
Ah, what fun and wonderful memories turned into a great ode poem. Good use of metaphors and similes. Good enjambment. I wish you well in the contest.
Teresa
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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Ah, what fun and wonderful memories turned into a great ode poem. Good use of metaphors and similes. Good enjambment. I wish you well in the contest.
Teresa
Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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Thank you, Teresa, for your kind review and contest well wishes. I am glad you acknowledged my good use of metaphors, similes, and enjambment.
Comment from EricBrady
Beautiful description of wonderful memories. For some reason I'm craving hot dogs and fries. And, of course, Mama's meringue pie. Mouth watering, stomach growling it's time to go find a snack. I loved the trip down memory lane and such a great story behind it all.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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Beautiful description of wonderful memories. For some reason I'm craving hot dogs and fries. And, of course, Mama's meringue pie. Mouth watering, stomach growling it's time to go find a snack. I loved the trip down memory lane and such a great story behind it all.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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Thank you, EricBrad, for your delicious review. I am glad my poem gave you a trip down memory lane.
Comment from Judgement Dave
An interesting mix of ode to a fast food stand and memories, that also serves as a useful travel tip if I ever make it to LA!
Particularly like the last verse.
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers
JD
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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An interesting mix of ode to a fast food stand and memories, that also serves as a useful travel tip if I ever make it to LA!
Particularly like the last verse.
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers
JD
Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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Thank you, JD, for your delicious review. I am glad my poem gave you a trip down memory lane.
Comment from kiwijenny
This is a great ode...
I'm just saying that something that makes memories is perfect to ode-ify
Me I wrote ode to the commode...lol years ago
Well penned
God bless
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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This is a great ode...
I'm just saying that something that makes memories is perfect to ode-ify
Me I wrote ode to the commode...lol years ago
Well penned
God bless
Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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Yes, kiwijenny, I knew that event would be special when I dined there. My sensory perceptions heightened. I wanted to remember that memory forever. Thanks for your review.
Comment from Rubylou
This place sounds like a must visit to someone in the Hollywood area. I've never been to the west coast but it does sound like a treat.
Nice job with the spacing of eating the hot dogs and ice melting.
The author's note were helpful in giving background.
Best to you with having your poem published.
Rubylou
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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This place sounds like a must visit to someone in the Hollywood area. I've never been to the west coast but it does sound like a treat.
Nice job with the spacing of eating the hot dogs and ice melting.
The author's note were helpful in giving background.
Best to you with having your poem published.
Rubylou
Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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Thank you. Rubylou, for your kind review. This was originally a spoken word poem. I adapted the words to approximate how I pronounced them in my performance. Thus, I added pauses for each word of "one at a time" and I extended the letter "m" for "mmmelt" and diminished the fonts. Thank you for wishing me good luck for my poem's publication.