The joke
fake prince7 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Haha, that'll teach the frog to think about what she is asking. I enjoyed your fun approach to the prompt, Iza. Your lines read well with good dialogue and imagery. I could see this as I read.
can"t--->can't
Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
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Haha, that'll teach the frog to think about what she is asking. I enjoyed your fun approach to the prompt, Iza. Your lines read well with good dialogue and imagery. I could see this as I read.
can"t--->can't
Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
Comment from Bill Schott
This mirror story, The Joke, is hilarious as the sarcastic mirror plays games with the social-climbing, magic-addict princess. There a couple punctuation issues, but I'll just point out the final line:
"Oops, the wrong recipe; sorry," said the Mirror laughing. "Bye."
Fun story.
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This mirror story, The Joke, is hilarious as the sarcastic mirror plays games with the social-climbing, magic-addict princess. There a couple punctuation issues, but I'll just point out the final line:
"Oops, the wrong recipe; sorry," said the Mirror laughing. "Bye."
Fun story.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
Comment from Jay Squires
This is a cute and cleverly written story that appears to be a spoof on the Prince Charming fairytale.
You have one typo, a minor one, " if you can" t find one, then make one." Use an apostrophe instead of a quote mark in "can't". Good luck with the contest.
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This is a cute and cleverly written story that appears to be a spoof on the Prince Charming fairytale.
You have one typo, a minor one, " if you can" t find one, then make one." Use an apostrophe instead of a quote mark in "can't". Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2021
Comment from T B Botts
This was well written. I see that you have a great sense of imagination. I really enjoyed the dialogue. I loved the picture as well. It was perfect for this story. Good luck in the contest.
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This was well written. I see that you have a great sense of imagination. I really enjoyed the dialogue. I loved the picture as well. It was perfect for this story. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2021
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I really enjoy this story. It is fun to go through the story... This can be a story for children although I am a senior and I still enjoy it...
Maybe someday with the development of IT, there may be available a mirror that can show people's princes.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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I really enjoy this story. It is fun to go through the story... This can be a story for children although I am a senior and I still enjoy it...
Maybe someday with the development of IT, there may be available a mirror that can show people's princes.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for your wonderful comment:)
Comment from writer723
I enjoyed your cute and humorous tale of the princess seeking a prince. The mirror was pretty funny. I especially liked the ending where the hideous creature rises up and the mirror apologizes for using the wrong spell. LOL! You did a great job!
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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I enjoyed your cute and humorous tale of the princess seeking a prince. The mirror was pretty funny. I especially liked the ending where the hideous creature rises up and the mirror apologizes for using the wrong spell. LOL! You did a great job!
Comment Written 10-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for your wonderful comment:)
Comment from Susan Newell
This is a humorous little story that just needs a little touch-up here and there. The wrong recipe part is really funny.
if you can find one, make one ==> can't
Shouldn't she say, "Be my prince," rather than "Prince?"
creature raised ==> arose
Last line: you need ending quotation mark after sorry, and beginning quotation mark before Bye.
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This is a humorous little story that just needs a little touch-up here and there. The wrong recipe part is really funny.
if you can find one, make one ==> can't
Shouldn't she say, "Be my prince," rather than "Prince?"
creature raised ==> arose
Last line: you need ending quotation mark after sorry, and beginning quotation mark before Bye.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2021