I Have Life?
An entry for the club challenge16 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a poignant quatern poem kahpot and your refrain line works well all through. There is still life there but the memories are missing. That would be a hard situation for the loved ones. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2022
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This is a poignant quatern poem kahpot and your refrain line works well all through. There is still life there but the memories are missing. That would be a hard situation for the loved ones. Nicely done.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your very understanding comments, yes memory life is quite destressing for all around, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
This is a strong poem with beautiful writing. A great club entry. The repeat phrases work well. The descriptive words you chose created clear imagery. The artwork feels as though it's from a surrealist artist. Very effective.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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This is a strong poem with beautiful writing. A great club entry. The repeat phrases work well. The descriptive words you chose created clear imagery. The artwork feels as though it's from a surrealist artist. Very effective.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much for this very encouraging review, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Dawn Munro
This is such a poignant poem! I dearly hope it isn't biographical. While I have been blessed in that I know no one with Alzheimer's, I have had recent experience with someone who had a right occipital stroke, which left him with memory loss (among other deficits). It's a difficult thing. Thankfully, my friend has mostly recovered, although some memories are lost forever.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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This is such a poignant poem! I dearly hope it isn't biographical. While I have been blessed in that I know no one with Alzheimer's, I have had recent experience with someone who had a right occipital stroke, which left him with memory loss (among other deficits). It's a difficult thing. Thankfully, my friend has mostly recovered, although some memories are lost forever.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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Thank you so very much, no, it is about a friend who unfortunately has this disease, glad to hear your friend is recovering, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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You are most welcome!
Comment from Janetsue
You have given readers a lot to think about in this posting with rhyming couplets. These are my favorite lines:
please live your life for it is rare
your children now deserve your care
Thank you for sharing...I enjoyed seeing the artwork, too.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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You have given readers a lot to think about in this posting with rhyming couplets. These are my favorite lines:
please live your life for it is rare
your children now deserve your care
Thank you for sharing...I enjoyed seeing the artwork, too.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much, yes this one was a wonderful challenge, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from June Sargent
The plight of those suffering from Alzheimer's - and their families - is a sad one indeed. When memories fade, it's impact is devastating. We tend to hold on desperately for a tiny bit of light to shine through. But the dimness only increases.
my path now shown by dimming lights
I walk one line not left or right
I have life, less memory's seeds
while you just cry as time recedes
This is a sad and touching quatern that captures the emotions with great imagery.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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The plight of those suffering from Alzheimer's - and their families - is a sad one indeed. When memories fade, it's impact is devastating. We tend to hold on desperately for a tiny bit of light to shine through. But the dimness only increases.
my path now shown by dimming lights
I walk one line not left or right
I have life, less memory's seeds
while you just cry as time recedes
This is a sad and touching quatern that captures the emotions with great imagery.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Thank you so very much for wonderfully understanding comments and review, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with the style of quatern. Your lines read smoothly with the added bonus of great rhymes. Your well thought out words create great imagery. Your repeating line emphasizes your thoughts about life at this point in your life. Your poem is poignant, and anyone who has lost a loved one will identify.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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You did a great job with the style of quatern. Your lines read smoothly with the added bonus of great rhymes. Your well thought out words create great imagery. Your repeating line emphasizes your thoughts about life at this point in your life. Your poem is poignant, and anyone who has lost a loved one will identify.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 25-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much-and for the inspiration to write some more and to be challenged, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from patcelaw
This poem is well done in the format. It is a challenge, and you have met the challenge well and it make perfect sense to this reader. Have a nice weekend.
Patricia
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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This poem is well done in the format. It is a challenge, and you have met the challenge well and it make perfect sense to this reader. Have a nice weekend.
Patricia
Comment Written 25-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Thank you so very much, your comments are very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from damommy
I think this is a person who is aware that his memory is fading. He's telling everyone about the path he's on now, no longer interested in what's going on around him, but he still needs to be cared for. Very moving poem.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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I think this is a person who is aware that his memory is fading. He's telling everyone about the path he's on now, no longer interested in what's going on around him, but he still needs to be cared for. Very moving poem.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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Thank you for your most understanding review and comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I Have Life?
by kahpot
Great entry for the Quatern event in the Potlatch club. Good form. Interesting subject. ... Somehow life goes on, even when your heart is broken. I like the seeds metaphor. Good rhymes.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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I Have Life?
by kahpot
Great entry for the Quatern event in the Potlatch club. Good form. Interesting subject. ... Somehow life goes on, even when your heart is broken. I like the seeds metaphor. Good rhymes.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much, yes when one's mind is leaving them it seems to affect many, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is touching and offers an insider's look into the loss of memory and how it feels to slowly gently slip away from your family members. Although extremely powerful, you give life to one who is on the wrong side of the blind shield of memory loss and possibly dementia. Thank you for representing the ones who are losing it and don't have the ability to explain to their adult children that they need to care for their own children and let the poor old folks die in peace.
And you do this in a quatern which appears difficult to do, bravo, my friend!
Have a wonderful weekend!
Jesse
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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This is touching and offers an insider's look into the loss of memory and how it feels to slowly gently slip away from your family members. Although extremely powerful, you give life to one who is on the wrong side of the blind shield of memory loss and possibly dementia. Thank you for representing the ones who are losing it and don't have the ability to explain to their adult children that they need to care for their own children and let the poor old folks die in peace.
And you do this in a quatern which appears difficult to do, bravo, my friend!
Have a wonderful weekend!
Jesse
Comment Written 25-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Thank you so very much Jesse, yes for those who do have this disease and all those around them are the ones who seem to suffer the most, the quatern was a good challenge and wonderful form, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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You did very well with the quatern!
You seem to live for a challenge and I approve of your writing. Keep up the good work!
Jesse