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One must be careful when consuming sweet drinks outside. .
2 total reviews
Comment from
Pam (respa)
-Nice image for your story.
-You told a good story with
good description and dialogue.
-A good opening paragraph,
followed by her sister calling
their mom for help.
-Mom did a good job of
taking care of the situation.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2022
Thanks much for taking the time to read and provide feedback. Appreciated.
reply by Pam (respa) on 07-Apr-2022
Comment from
giraffmang
Hi there,
I liked this piece. good job on actually managing to write a story in fifty words using real, sentence. It's astounding how much that doesn't happen! lol
Best of luck to you.
GMG
Comment Written 07-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2022
Thank you, sir, for your read and feedback. Much appreciated.
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