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A Cure for Cancer

Stage Four

30 total reviews 
Comment from Liz O'Neill
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A great description so the reader can really have the vicarious or visceral experience. An interesting allusion: As one of Newton's Laws increases my speed, it feels like I am in a wind tunnel." the ending is left open for the reader to decide how they want it to have ended... With a whimper or a bang.

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
    Thanks for the review, Liz. The guy is now in a better place.
reply by Liz O'Neill on 09-Jun-2024
    well written
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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This is definitely fiction and absolutely a cure for cancer. It's actually a pretty good way to go out with an incredible view and a once in a lifetime experience. Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 21-May-2022


reply by the author on 21-May-2022
    Thanks, Carol. I am rooting for a cure in the near future,
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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This is definitely fiction and absolutely a cure for cancer. It's actually a pretty good way to go out with an incredible view and a once in a lifetime experience. Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 21-May-2022


reply by the author on 21-May-2022
    Thanks, Carol. Hopefully we can find a better cure in the near future.
Comment from Bridge
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Very well written. A very interesting story. I love the ending. You have done a great job given the word count constraint. All the best to you in the contest.
With regards

 Comment Written 21-May-2022


reply by the author on 21-May-2022
    Thanks, Bridge. The ending was smashing.
Comment from amahra
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Well, that's one way of stopping cancer. This was a fun and crazy read. What's even funnier and crazier is there are people in this world that would really do that. Great contest entry.

 Comment Written 20-May-2022


reply by the author on 21-May-2022
    Thanks, amahra. No sky diving for me.
Comment from John Ciarmello
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Hahaha! I don't know why I'm laughing; the poor guy is dead. And I'm sure a bit short on brains before he jumped and after. This was a fun, refreshing read--much success with the contest, Paul.

 Comment Written 20-May-2022


reply by the author on 21-May-2022
    Thanks, John. He probably should have taken a pad and pen with him. He could have got off a short one.
Comment from Olivanne Marsh
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Wow! Shocking, but also a surprise that someone with stage four cancer would feel like going through the whole process of sky diving to die. I have questions, was he getting treatment, through treatment that didn't work, diagnosed too late for treatment, not interested in treatment? At the last minute does he do something to try to save himself? Why did he choose this way rather than just staying in bed on pain meds or getting someone to help him out, so to speak? Obviously, flash fiction too focused for all the possibilities, but title is spot on, sudden death is a cure for cancer, in a way. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 20-May-2022


reply by the author on 20-May-2022
    Thanks for the review, Olivanne. You certainly are full of questions. This gentleman had just gone through thirty-seven sessions of intense acupuncture with little success. He then self-hypnotized himself and tried to cure himself that way. He was in such a mental state after all this, he went through a dozen psycho-therapy sessions with a retired Tibetan monk. After all these failures, he got out his Ouija board which told him to fly the friendly skies.
Comment from jenintorre
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Yes this certainly is one cure for cancer Paul although I wouln't have guessed withou the title. Very thought provoking and well written. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen.

 Comment Written 20-May-2022


reply by the author on 20-May-2022
    Thanks, Jen. I would have had to find a different cure. I don't fly. How's that for inconsistency?
Comment from Dawn Munro
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Ooooooooh, your mind was in a dark place with this one, too. (I read the freezing-to-death one also.) Of course, there's nothing wrong with it... In fact, other than the non-existent punctuation for that last partial sentence (lol) it's flawless.
Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 20-May-2022


reply by the author on 20-May-2022
    Thanks, Dawn. The ending was an easy way to get the correct word count.
reply by Dawn Munro on 20-May-2022
    I get it. And it's good.
Comment from LateBloomer
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Hi Paul, you just left me a review, and I thought that I would look into your portfolio and leave a review, and I saw this flash fiction--A Cure for Cancer. I just told you how cancer stole my muse and my rhyme.

Paul, your writing had little ending hints weaved into the story, e.g.
This sky diving experience will be one in a lifetime ... and
The only equipment I have is a pair of goggles.

I was a little slow on the draw, and had to sit for a minute and figure it all out, including what does Stage 4 cancer have to do with this--Duh, I've been hit with the dumb stick.

Good descriptive writing with a clever twist and ending. The skydiver took control of his destiny. Well done. Well-chosen photo. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer

 Comment Written 19-May-2022


reply by the author on 20-May-2022
    Thanks for the review. My wife is dealing with cancer at the present time, so that was probably where this story came from. Are you now cancer free?
reply by LateBloomer on 20-May-2022
    I am cancer free now, so far. I was stage 3b. I go for new Scans next month. Keeping my fingers crossed. Thanks for asking. My prayers for your wife. LB
reply by LateBloomer on 20-May-2022
    Hi Paul, once I took my dunce cap off, I found humor in your story and I did laugh. I am now cancer free, so far. My prayers for your wife. My dad was a paratrooper in WWII. Your story made me think of him and some of the stories he told back about the soldiers getting ready for those jumps. Like it or not, ready or not, how do you go.
    LateBloomer.