Maskless @ Sun. Morn. Masquerade
A Contest Entry13 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a really great story you have penned for this writing prompt. I am thankful we go to a church where we do not wear the mask. We trust in the One that can help us. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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This is a really great story you have penned for this writing prompt. I am thankful we go to a church where we do not wear the mask. We trust in the One that can help us. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 10-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your kind words. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment on the story especially when it's not on the review page anymore. That was sweet of you to do.
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, this is very interesting. Though there is some repetition, it is not an issue as you expand on certain points. The mask here can be anything the majority of society simply goes along with, and people mostly fall in line. Yes, there are a few brave souls.
Good entry.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Hmm, this is very interesting. Though there is some repetition, it is not an issue as you expand on certain points. The mask here can be anything the majority of society simply goes along with, and people mostly fall in line. Yes, there are a few brave souls.
Good entry.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
A clear explanation or story about why the person wears masks to a party; they like to disguise their characteristics. Masks keep the person from smiling, pretending to feel something they are not~
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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A clear explanation or story about why the person wears masks to a party; they like to disguise their characteristics. Masks keep the person from smiling, pretending to feel something they are not~
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Comment from lyenochka
Societal games whether in church or other settings are hard to deal with. It's good that the narrator is sincere and honest to herself/himself and would rather be with people who are the same - not wearing superficial and disingenuous masks. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Societal games whether in church or other settings are hard to deal with. It's good that the narrator is sincere and honest to herself/himself and would rather be with people who are the same - not wearing superficial and disingenuous masks. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Comment from Wendy G
A well-written social commentary, focusing on acceptance, inclusion and exclusion, and personal freedom of choice. Sending you best wishes in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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A well-written social commentary, focusing on acceptance, inclusion and exclusion, and personal freedom of choice. Sending you best wishes in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Comment from Bill Schott
This story comes from a character who truly believes he or she is the one and only person who knows anything. I see and talk to souls like this all the time. Their hurt, developed over years of unfulfillable expectations from others, has given them the mask of the lone intellectual, cursed to never find his or her equal.
This person, in reality, will find all that is sought by visiting a church other than on Sunday, when programs have been studied and scheduled for the assembly who have found God in their friends' lives. Pushing one's personal agenda into this situation will typically be tolerated but likely unappreciated.
This character needs to stop looking for fault and start looking for grace.
Whew! That was intense. Your story was provocative.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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This story comes from a character who truly believes he or she is the one and only person who knows anything. I see and talk to souls like this all the time. Their hurt, developed over years of unfulfillable expectations from others, has given them the mask of the lone intellectual, cursed to never find his or her equal.
This person, in reality, will find all that is sought by visiting a church other than on Sunday, when programs have been studied and scheduled for the assembly who have found God in their friends' lives. Pushing one's personal agenda into this situation will typically be tolerated but likely unappreciated.
This character needs to stop looking for fault and start looking for grace.
Whew! That was intense. Your story was provocative.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Comment from Tom Horonzy
I don't know where you were going but you went over and over again and again. Still, God gave us agency to do what we please. Doesn't make it right. Doesn't make it wrong. I understand for a mask wasn't in my plan tho' I consent.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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I don't know where you were going but you went over and over again and again. Still, God gave us agency to do what we please. Doesn't make it right. Doesn't make it wrong. I understand for a mask wasn't in my plan tho' I consent.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Comment from Olivanne Marsh
You certainly make a point here, and it's well made despite being a bit didactic. The writing is clear and to the point, images are well made. To me, however, this lacks the makings of a story. It certainly has a point, more like an essay, but no clear beginning, middle and end. A strong narrative voice, but no characterization and no plot. I expected a story, so I was a bit disappointed in that regard, but the writing is good and clear, the thinking shows, the point taken. You make a strong statement, which is what I think you set out to do. But, I also hope that somehow at least some of the bitterness and sorrowful disgust with human kind I sense here is fiction. The world's beauty and the goodness of it's people are not all hidden, I hope the narrator finds what is sought.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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You certainly make a point here, and it's well made despite being a bit didactic. The writing is clear and to the point, images are well made. To me, however, this lacks the makings of a story. It certainly has a point, more like an essay, but no clear beginning, middle and end. A strong narrative voice, but no characterization and no plot. I expected a story, so I was a bit disappointed in that regard, but the writing is good and clear, the thinking shows, the point taken. You make a strong statement, which is what I think you set out to do. But, I also hope that somehow at least some of the bitterness and sorrowful disgust with human kind I sense here is fiction. The world's beauty and the goodness of it's people are not all hidden, I hope the narrator finds what is sought.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Author,
Wow. Love, love the metaphor here. It would be so easy to assume this is about COVID and physical, literal masks. But nooo... You leave this open to interpretation nicely. The fact the you place this in a religious environment is even more brilliant - that special place where it's okay to be less than perfect - because the whole world is made up of sinners striving to get things 'right'-er. Yeah. Yuck!
You did really well and said so much. Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Dear Mystery Author,
Wow. Love, love the metaphor here. It would be so easy to assume this is about COVID and physical, literal masks. But nooo... You leave this open to interpretation nicely. The fact the you place this in a religious environment is even more brilliant - that special place where it's okay to be less than perfect - because the whole world is made up of sinners striving to get things 'right'-er. Yeah. Yuck!
You did really well and said so much. Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much for the exceptional rating! I appreciate your kind words and for taking the time to read and comment.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Very good story. I think that it is solid for the competition. I expect many will go for the easy out on Covid. This beauty of this story is that it left much a mystery, yet made it's point. Well done writer.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Very good story. I think that it is solid for the competition. I expect many will go for the easy out on Covid. This beauty of this story is that it left much a mystery, yet made it's point. Well done writer.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Thanks for your feedback. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.