zen love poem
zen of love3 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Jake,
thank you for participating in the club. I like your zen haiku, it's very romantic. good presentation and imagery. good syllable count and connection between lines. well done.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023
Hello, Jake,
thank you for participating in the club. I like your zen haiku, it's very romantic. good presentation and imagery. good syllable count and connection between lines. well done.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023
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Thanks as always
Comment from jacquelyn popp
Great poem. Great description with the first line. I could feel the calming morning. I liked the last line also, love comes to me. I haven't read much of the zen haiku, however yours was a charming and enjoyable read. The artwork that you used went just perfect with your poem. Good choice for your artwork. The flow of your words, you did a great job with the presentation, and to create the feeling of the calming moring. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
Great poem. Great description with the first line. I could feel the calming morning. I liked the last line also, love comes to me. I haven't read much of the zen haiku, however yours was a charming and enjoyable read. The artwork that you used went just perfect with your poem. Good choice for your artwork. The flow of your words, you did a great job with the presentation, and to create the feeling of the calming moring. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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thanks glad you appreciate it
Comment from Jay Mo
This is a good, simple, haiku... but it leaves me wanting so much more! I understand that is probably the point. However, have you considered a series of haiku poems that can be read independently, but together tell a story?
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
This is a good, simple, haiku... but it leaves me wanting so much more! I understand that is probably the point. However, have you considered a series of haiku poems that can be read independently, but together tell a story?
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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yeah I should do that some day