No sighs
Jisei 5-7-5-7-518 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Sorry I missed the picture. I did not know they expired. This is very well done poem. I owe you eleven more reviews. I have to hold down my muse until I can get a clean state with everyone. I am trying. Karen
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Sorry I missed the picture. I did not know they expired. This is very well done poem. I owe you eleven more reviews. I have to hold down my muse until I can get a clean state with everyone. I am trying. Karen
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
Comment from Lisasview
I really did enjoy reading this one of your and wish you the very best in the contest.
I never knew about this form until I read another poets work...
Really so interesting,
Lisa, new to this site
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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I really did enjoy reading this one of your and wish you the very best in the contest.
I never knew about this form until I read another poets work...
Really so interesting,
Lisa, new to this site
Comment Written 07-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much for the feedback.
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You are most welcome
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
When we have lived a long life we can only be grateful and know that we have a long history and celebrate each day we have left, I enjoyed your words, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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When we have lived a long life we can only be grateful and know that we have a long history and celebrate each day we have left, I enjoyed your words, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much for dropping by and giving me your comments
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is an interesting theme for a poem. Not often do people write about the end of life with such acceptance. The picture of the Ferris wheel is a neat touch to getting your point across.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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This is an interesting theme for a poem. Not often do people write about the end of life with such acceptance. The picture of the Ferris wheel is a neat touch to getting your point across.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much .The wheel is symbolic in so many ways
Comment from Faith Williams
I love the idea of leaving this earth with 'no sighs' or no regrets. It's been interesting to read the various jisei poems and what poets have used as metaphors for life and death. Your wheel is one of the more unique ones.
Thanks so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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I love the idea of leaving this earth with 'no sighs' or no regrets. It's been interesting to read the various jisei poems and what poets have used as metaphors for life and death. Your wheel is one of the more unique ones.
Thanks so much for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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Thank you .hope most of us would be able to do that.
Comment from lyenochka
Great choice of words in your jisei poem. I liked the "twilight" of life and the contentment of "no sighs" and the labor of living with the verb "trudged." Perfect reflection for our stage in life!
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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Great choice of words in your jisei poem. I liked the "twilight" of life and the contentment of "no sighs" and the labor of living with the verb "trudged." Perfect reflection for our stage in life!
Comment Written 06-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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Thank you Helen. It took some time to get the word' trudge'
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It's a great choice!
Have a great week. I'm off to bed. 💞💖
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, thank you for participating in the haiku club Jisei poem event. Great entry with a good syllable count and connection between lines. Beautiful presentation and imagery. The satori is a good twist.
Good job,
Gypsy
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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Hello, thank you for participating in the haiku club Jisei poem event. Great entry with a good syllable count and connection between lines. Beautiful presentation and imagery. The satori is a good twist.
Good job,
Gypsy
Comment Written 06-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation, Sanku.
-You wrote a good poem with a good topic.
-The opening lines establish the premise.
-A very good pivot line.
-I like the closing lines because you
create a peaceful mood and seem
satisfied with what you have done so far.
-I enjoyed your poem.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2023
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-Nice image and presentation, Sanku.
-You wrote a good poem with a good topic.
-The opening lines establish the premise.
-A very good pivot line.
-I like the closing lines because you
create a peaceful mood and seem
satisfied with what you have done so far.
-I enjoyed your poem.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much for the suggestion i have taken off 'my .Thanks for dropping by.
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You are very welcome. Good job with the change. I took the suggestion out of the review.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
I love this verse you have written about how quickly the ferris wheel of our life spins. It is indeed a ride, and in the end we can all hope for peaceful acceptance of the road we traveled. I really enjoyed the metaphor you chose to use.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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I love this verse you have written about how quickly the ferris wheel of our life spins. It is indeed a ride, and in the end we can all hope for peaceful acceptance of the road we traveled. I really enjoyed the metaphor you chose to use.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a beautiful poem, written, in a very outstanding way. I know that it was a blessing and is a blessing to the club event. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Patricia.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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This is a beautiful poem, written, in a very outstanding way. I know that it was a blessing and is a blessing to the club event. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Patricia.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much