Red Skeletons
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Rewarded"Haunting Poetry for the Darkness in us all
6 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness, this sounds like revenge and our anger can sometimes explode into a fiery tornado when someone has done us wrong, a poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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Oh my goodness, this sounds like revenge and our anger can sometimes explode into a fiery tornado when someone has done us wrong, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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Thank you
Comment from L. Kalere
It's too bad you didn't enter the entire piece in another contest because it's excellent. It also gives more meaning of the the last stanza (which also would qualify as a Halloween/horror poem). Overall, skillfully, thoughtfully done. Best of luck in the contest.
Linda
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2023
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It's too bad you didn't enter the entire piece in another contest because it's excellent. It also gives more meaning of the the last stanza (which also would qualify as a Halloween/horror poem). Overall, skillfully, thoughtfully done. Best of luck in the contest.
Linda
Comment Written 05-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2023
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It did turn out to be a bit more creepy than I thought and I hope I write one as good for the Halloween contest. Thank you so much.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A bit of revenge here! You've risen like a phoenix and are out to avenge the culprit for your suffering. Powerful imagery in this thought-provoking verse. Just a suggestion - since this stanza is now to stand on its own, I thought it might be more effective in your notes just very briefly to give a little background info rather than display the rest of the poem. You could then post the whole poem on another occasion, say. Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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A bit of revenge here! You've risen like a phoenix and are out to avenge the culprit for your suffering. Powerful imagery in this thought-provoking verse. Just a suggestion - since this stanza is now to stand on its own, I thought it might be more effective in your notes just very briefly to give a little background info rather than display the rest of the poem. You could then post the whole poem on another occasion, say. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 04-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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I will think about that thank you.
Comment from Paul Manton
Thank you for the full poem, Mia , because it gives us a much bigger context - and removes the 'Hallowe'en' component from line four.
Deeply felt rejection feels like the end of the world - or even entry into hell at its most strongly expressed. This at the end of a history of trying and failing to make the relationship work, until we have reached the 'burnt out embers' (Eliot) and nothing warm remains.
My uncertainty is the last line - 'I will come for you' - as an avenging angel? as one who will never give up? sounds like it's too late for that.
Paul
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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Thank you for the full poem, Mia , because it gives us a much bigger context - and removes the 'Hallowe'en' component from line four.
Deeply felt rejection feels like the end of the world - or even entry into hell at its most strongly expressed. This at the end of a history of trying and failing to make the relationship work, until we have reached the 'burnt out embers' (Eliot) and nothing warm remains.
My uncertainty is the last line - 'I will come for you' - as an avenging angel? as one who will never give up? sounds like it's too late for that.
Paul
Comment Written 04-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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Thank you for your great review.
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Welcome, Mia.
Best wishes, Paul
Comment from JSD
As one would expect from Ms Twysted, this is dark and painful in its theme and contents. And reading the whole piece makes it all the more so. An excellent piece; good luck with it.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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As one would expect from Ms Twysted, this is dark and painful in its theme and contents. And reading the whole piece makes it all the more so. An excellent piece; good luck with it.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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Thank you
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Oopsie, this is quite scary please don't come for me;) thank you for sharing this delightful poem and good luck with your writings and the contest.:)
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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Oopsie, this is quite scary please don't come for me;) thank you for sharing this delightful poem and good luck with your writings and the contest.:)
Comment Written 03-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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Thank you