Week Three 2023 - 2024
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5 total reviews
Comment from Julie Helms
I'm sensing a little...frustration. This poem is an excellent way to shove all those emotions into a creative outlet. And you have done a fine job with that! I particularly like the imagery of pulling the wings off the fly. (Not that I'm into that, I could just strongly feel your words there). I do not know exactly what the object of your poem is,... Oh to be a fly on the wall. ;-)
Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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I'm sensing a little...frustration. This poem is an excellent way to shove all those emotions into a creative outlet. And you have done a fine job with that! I particularly like the imagery of pulling the wings off the fly. (Not that I'm into that, I could just strongly feel your words there). I do not know exactly what the object of your poem is,... Oh to be a fly on the wall. ;-)
Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 03-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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Excellent much appreciate the read and fine examination ... keep them flying !
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I am so glad you pointed out this was satirical. I am not entirely certain what it is satirizing, but if it is rap music, then it succeeds famously. If it's a political satire, I shan't ask who it refers to. It looks like you swept this fly off its feet, anyway. Thanks for posting.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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I am so glad you pointed out this was satirical. I am not entirely certain what it is satirizing, but if it is rap music, then it succeeds famously. If it's a political satire, I shan't ask who it refers to. It looks like you swept this fly off its feet, anyway. Thanks for posting.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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It is a dedication to one of our lost poems it was left on thebrink though I know the author can do better so its not a personal or revenge attack ... enjoy !
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is excellent work. Your presentation is very good. This was so serious that it was humorous. You use expressive words and colorful imagery that will draw in readers. I enjoyed reviewing this.
Best wishes
Alex
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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This is excellent work. Your presentation is very good. This was so serious that it was humorous. You use expressive words and colorful imagery that will draw in readers. I enjoyed reviewing this.
Best wishes
Alex
Comment Written 03-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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Excellent much appreciate that you can enjoy my work !
Comment from Douglas Goff
Your strong hatred of gnats is quite apparent in this piece. If the Buddhists are right, then you may return as one and roll around in self-loathing. Good thing they are wrong.
I am really not sure ð?¤" f gnats play a very important roll in the circle of life it I'm sure frogs like to eat them. Perhaps you can find a strong ally in frogkind.
Fun piece
D
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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Your strong hatred of gnats is quite apparent in this piece. If the Buddhists are right, then you may return as one and roll around in self-loathing. Good thing they are wrong.
I am really not sure ð?¤" f gnats play a very important roll in the circle of life it I'm sure frogs like to eat them. Perhaps you can find a strong ally in frogkind.
Fun piece
D
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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I like frogs ... nobody likes gnats ... glad you could enjoy thank you !
Comment from royowen
I'm not sure who or what thisctirade is aimed at, but it must be something or someone that you don't particularly like, but I'm not sure it's a good way to start the new year, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2023
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I'm not sure who or what thisctirade is aimed at, but it must be something or someone that you don't particularly like, but I'm not sure it's a good way to start the new year, blessings Roy
Comment Written 31-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2023
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Its a Black Crow Roy its not aimed at anyone in particular its to rebuke a piece of poetry ... so be careful !
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Notes would be good.
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Try my profile page you'll find it all there ... much appreciated !