I'm Not Me
ADULT Erotic Writing Contest27 total reviews
Comment from Lakeshia Richardson
I thought your story was magnificent. It was well written and it read beautifully. I have not read any other entries, but you deserve to win. Good Luck!!!
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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I thought your story was magnificent. It was well written and it read beautifully. I have not read any other entries, but you deserve to win. Good Luck!!!
Comment Written 31-May-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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I'm honored, thank you so much for your kind words and encouragement!
Xo
Jess
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You are more than welcome. Keep writing great stories my friend because you are good at it.
Comment from Nicole Schmidt
This is great overall. It grabs your attention and holds it from start to finish. This is a good writing and I wish you luck in your work going forward.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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This is great overall. It grabs your attention and holds it from start to finish. This is a good writing and I wish you luck in your work going forward.
Comment Written 30-May-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much, Nicole!
Comment from Gunner Lil
Excellent. The writer use all the best tools to achieve the six- star rating. This reader is not going to point them out because you know what they are.
Love the twist at the end.
Thank you for sharing and good luck.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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Excellent. The writer use all the best tools to achieve the six- star rating. This reader is not going to point them out because you know what they are.
Love the twist at the end.
Thank you for sharing and good luck.
Comment Written 29-May-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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I am truly honored! Thank you so much.
Xo
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Jessica. I did not understand why the poem was titled It's not me. Was it because this was a one night fling initiated by her?
Maybe it was a dream or fantasy. Could.be either
I like your story. I'm not sure you need a warning on it. It is erotic, but not that sexual.
Looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that.
Echoing stilettos are a nice touch
Great job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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Hi, Jessica. I did not understand why the poem was titled It's not me. Was it because this was a one night fling initiated by her?
Maybe it was a dream or fantasy. Could.be either
I like your story. I'm not sure you need a warning on it. It is erotic, but not that sexual.
Looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that.
Echoing stilettos are a nice touch
Great job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 28-May-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much! The title is meant to hint at the "role play" between the two, who are actually a married couple. Thanks so much for reading! :)
Xo
Jess
Comment from lancellot
Well, I think you have a winner here. This is just the sort of erotic story that the members of FanStory and the Secret voters like. You touched lightly on the sex aspect, and kept it at least rated R. Also, you made the couple married. Now that sealed it for you. Light on the graphics and without sin. Winner!
reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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Well, I think you have a winner here. This is just the sort of erotic story that the members of FanStory and the Secret voters like. You touched lightly on the sex aspect, and kept it at least rated R. Also, you made the couple married. Now that sealed it for you. Light on the graphics and without sin. Winner!
Comment Written 24-May-2024
reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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Thank you! I think? lol
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a raw piece of writing that entices the reader to enjoy adult sexual games and what is more it has a twist in the tail worthy of an excellent flash fiction. All I could find to criticise was over detailing in parts that distracted from the steamier atmosphere you were hoping to create, and describing the lipstick as complementing the hair colour. That seems unlikely. kay
His eyes watch intensely > intently
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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This is a raw piece of writing that entices the reader to enjoy adult sexual games and what is more it has a twist in the tail worthy of an excellent flash fiction. All I could find to criticise was over detailing in parts that distracted from the steamier atmosphere you were hoping to create, and describing the lipstick as complementing the hair colour. That seems unlikely. kay
His eyes watch intensely > intently
Comment Written 22-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Thanks very much, Karen!
Comment from nomi338
Awesomely perfect. The story holds together very well from beginning to the very end. The action was very erotic, very believable. I actually felt my senses being stirred by the great descriptions. The end was very satisfying, as I did not like the thought of the hero cheating on his wife.
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Awesomely perfect. The story holds together very well from beginning to the very end. The action was very erotic, very believable. I actually felt my senses being stirred by the great descriptions. The end was very satisfying, as I did not like the thought of the hero cheating on his wife.
Comment Written 21-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Thank you so much, Nomi! I'm thrilled you enjoyed it!
:)
Xo
Jess
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My enjoyment was very real and visceral.
Comment from evilynne
That is marvelously well written, although I suspected early on that she was his wife. It intriguing and just steamy enough to hold the reader's interest. Evi
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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That is marvelously well written, although I suspected early on that she was his wife. It intriguing and just steamy enough to hold the reader's interest. Evi
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Evi, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! Thank you so much for your kind words and awesome review.
Xo
Jess
Comment from Rachelle Allen
You told us right up front: Tonight I'm not me...and yet did I pay attention properly? I did not! So you got me but good (oh, hmmm; maybe those aren't words I should be using when reviewing erotic...)
You did an outstanding job with this, you vixen. It's always you quiet, unassuming ones who can write erotica with panache and aplomb! This one has Winner's Circle written ALLLLLLL over it!
Good luck!
xoxo
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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You told us right up front: Tonight I'm not me...and yet did I pay attention properly? I did not! So you got me but good (oh, hmmm; maybe those aren't words I should be using when reviewing erotic...)
You did an outstanding job with this, you vixen. It's always you quiet, unassuming ones who can write erotica with panache and aplomb! This one has Winner's Circle written ALLLLLLL over it!
Good luck!
xoxo
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Well, you just made my morning!! Thank you so much for your wonderful words! Xoxo
Jess
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My complete and total pleasure!! xo
Comment from phill doran
Hello Jessica,
This is very good; erotic without being overly graphic, descriptive without the need to be coarse. It is a clever story, and an elegant piece of writing.
The ending of a piece is often referred to as the 'dismount' - and my first instinct was to say that this ends with a great dismount, but given the context, I will avoid this and simply compliment you on the ending.
I see it is a contest entry - in fairness, you should win it at a canter...
Good, neat writing, with great use of pace and narrative. Not a wasted word.
I wish you well with your continued writing.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Hello Jessica,
This is very good; erotic without being overly graphic, descriptive without the need to be coarse. It is a clever story, and an elegant piece of writing.
The ending of a piece is often referred to as the 'dismount' - and my first instinct was to say that this ends with a great dismount, but given the context, I will avoid this and simply compliment you on the ending.
I see it is a contest entry - in fairness, you should win it at a canter...
Good, neat writing, with great use of pace and narrative. Not a wasted word.
I wish you well with your continued writing.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 19-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Phill, this comment made my day!!! Thank you so much!!
Xoxo
Jess