Singapore Nights
Karaoke Never Stops14 total reviews
Comment from Nicole Schmidt
This is very vivid and entertaining to read. I felt like i was there watching it all unfold! I like Aunty Janes character! Well done! I like how the story flows beginning to end.
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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This is very vivid and entertaining to read. I felt like i was there watching it all unfold! I like Aunty Janes character! Well done! I like how the story flows beginning to end.
Comment Written 23-May-2024
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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Thank you, Nicole. Happy you enjoyed it.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
A very good tale, my friend. You've brought us a little culture to learn about, and an adventure to tantalize the imagination. Based on real experience, this tale was mesmerizing.
Best of luck in the contest,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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A very good tale, my friend. You've brought us a little culture to learn about, and an adventure to tantalize the imagination. Based on real experience, this tale was mesmerizing.
Best of luck in the contest,
Rhonda
Comment Written 23-May-2024
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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Thank you dearly, Rhonda.
Comment from Julie Helms
I'm not sure what this style is called, but you give such a strong sense of the ambience of the place. The reader is right there in the crowded bar, the music, the fight that seems just as much a part of the atmosphere, the characters. This story is skillfully woven around the song. It's less story and more experience.
Nicely done!
Julie
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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I'm not sure what this style is called, but you give such a strong sense of the ambience of the place. The reader is right there in the crowded bar, the music, the fight that seems just as much a part of the atmosphere, the characters. This story is skillfully woven around the song. It's less story and more experience.
Nicely done!
Julie
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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Thank you kindly, Julie. Feeling super flattered seeing you referring to this as an experience.
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Ha! I wondered who wrote this. I don't recognize your style yet, but this isn't the first time I've been drawn to something you wrote. You had my vote. This was really original in the way it was crafted and the the way it felt!
Comment from Cristine22
I LOVE the ending! It's leaving me asking questions and wanting more. I really appreciate the cultural references and how you've set the stage for the story. I did have to read the paragraph about Raj and Priya a couple of times before I understood what was happening, so that could perhaps use some clarifying. But otherwise, excellent job!!!!
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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I LOVE the ending! It's leaving me asking questions and wanting more. I really appreciate the cultural references and how you've set the stage for the story. I did have to read the paragraph about Raj and Priya a couple of times before I understood what was happening, so that could perhaps use some clarifying. But otherwise, excellent job!!!!
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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Thank you Cristine! Note taken!
Comment from jenintorre
I really enjoyed reading this very fast paced story. It was so atmospheric that I felt I could have been there. A great entry for the flash fiction competition.
Good luck and best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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I really enjoyed reading this very fast paced story. It was so atmospheric that I felt I could have been there. A great entry for the flash fiction competition.
Good luck and best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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Thank you kindly, Jen!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is very realistic sounding very chaotic but very realistic: "The one that had to be in the middle of everything. Mediating, pleading, asking, arbitrating, refereeing. People fighting over who's next to sing. Glasses flying above my head. Someone setting the window curtains on fire." the ending seems to be finding some kind of resolve. This is excellent.
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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This is very realistic sounding very chaotic but very realistic: "The one that had to be in the middle of everything. Mediating, pleading, asking, arbitrating, refereeing. People fighting over who's next to sing. Glasses flying above my head. Someone setting the window curtains on fire." the ending seems to be finding some kind of resolve. This is excellent.
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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Thank you very much, Liz.
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You are very welcome
Comment from juliaSjames
This is an accomplished write. Conveys the confusion and drunken antics of a night out in Singapore. Perhaps a tad too elliptical since the reader has only a few hints about the narrator in the story itself. I was happy to glean more from your author notes but that doesn't really count.
It would be different if this was an extract from a longer story or novel
Best of luck in the contest.
Blessings, Julia
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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This is an accomplished write. Conveys the confusion and drunken antics of a night out in Singapore. Perhaps a tad too elliptical since the reader has only a few hints about the narrator in the story itself. I was happy to glean more from your author notes but that doesn't really count.
It would be different if this was an extract from a longer story or novel
Best of luck in the contest.
Blessings, Julia
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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Thanks for reading, Julia.
Comment from royowen
I can remember going to these places in my youth, the problem was always someone wanted to remove ones head from ones shoulders, so I learnt to not say anything, then I stopped going he he, great writing blessings Roy
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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I can remember going to these places in my youth, the problem was always someone wanted to remove ones head from ones shoulders, so I learnt to not say anything, then I stopped going he he, great writing blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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Thank you, Roy. Sending my best.
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My pleasure
Comment from LJbutterfly
I most enjoyed your detailed descriptions which allowed me to easily envision the bar, stage and podium, as well as the excited crowd. I appreciated experiencing, through reading, a different setting. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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I most enjoyed your detailed descriptions which allowed me to easily envision the bar, stage and podium, as well as the excited crowd. I appreciated experiencing, through reading, a different setting. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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Thank you dearly, LJ. Always glad to see you reviews.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, there was a time I might have considered those fun times, and I'm betting you did too. LOL. But these days it seems more like mass confusion and aggravation. Good writing. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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Well, there was a time I might have considered those fun times, and I'm betting you did too. LOL. But these days it seems more like mass confusion and aggravation. Good writing. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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Thanks, Ric!