A Bad Day to Buy Groceries
Her ex found her4 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a really well written 75-word Flash you have penned for the contest. This is a six star write in my eyes. You used very good descriptive words. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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This is a really well written 75-word Flash you have penned for the contest. This is a six star write in my eyes. You used very good descriptive words. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Thank you SO MUCH for the beautiful stars. I really appreciate it and I'm glad you liked the story.
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Monica,
This is a great commentary about the sign of our times.
You tell this deftly, in 75 words, building up to the tragic end.
I hope you do well in the contest.
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Monica,
This is a great commentary about the sign of our times.
You tell this deftly, in 75 words, building up to the tragic end.
I hope you do well in the contest.
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much!!!
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
The flash entry effectively conveys tension and urgency in just 75 words, capturing a dramatic and intense moment. The scene is vivid, and the progression from recognition to the final impact is clear. For slight improvement, consider adding a touch more detail or emotion to deepen the impact, while maintaining the concise format. Overall, it's a gripping portrayal of a critical situation, but a bit more nuance could enhance the reader's connection to the momen
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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The flash entry effectively conveys tension and urgency in just 75 words, capturing a dramatic and intense moment. The scene is vivid, and the progression from recognition to the final impact is clear. For slight improvement, consider adding a touch more detail or emotion to deepen the impact, while maintaining the concise format. Overall, it's a gripping portrayal of a critical situation, but a bit more nuance could enhance the reader's connection to the momen
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Thank you very much for the suggestions. I will look into that as soon as I can. I am moving my 90 year old mother, so not much time for me - lol.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh dear, this ex had murderous intentions and this poor girl failed to dodge the bullet here. Although this is light heatedly presented, this sadly does happen to some poor souls, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Oh dear, this ex had murderous intentions and this poor girl failed to dodge the bullet here. Although this is light heatedly presented, this sadly does happen to some poor souls, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Yes, it is terrible that this is a norm in our society now. More and more violence is happening where I live, because although we are technically a small town (you can get completely across town in any direction in ten minutes), the powers that be are insisting upon making us a big city. They continue to bring in more and more people, and we are on top of each other. Naturally, this promotes anger, which leads to violence.
