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The World Laughs With You

5-7-5 Political contest entry

7 total reviews 
Comment from Julie Helms
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Great 575. You get my vote. It's the anti-cackle vote.
I've been wondering for months why the dems didn't put forward a viable choice that would unite and invigorate their voters. The base is fairly demoralized right now. I probably don't agree with a single dem policy, but I know there have got to be some dems out there who honorably stand by their beliefs and aren't corrupt and/or stupid...but maybe not?
An interesting year this has been...
Julie

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
    Thank you for the fantastic review and support, Julie. Yeah, good luck with that. I don't think anyone running for any office that stand by their beliefs and aren't corrupt. That's the sad state our government is in. Yes, I can't believe she is what the dems are going to go with. I thought Joe was bad but Harris? Yikes. I really appreciate the stars and stop in, Julie. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.

    =]

    Ron
Comment from Neonewman
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Lol, so did I. You have my vote on this fun little prompt. Best of luck in the votes. This has been a crazy year so far and I am expected quite the show towards the end.
God bless,
Steve

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
    Thank you for the great review, Steve.Yes it has been crazy so far with everything going down in flames. Lol. I can't wait to see the craziness to come. Fingers crossed our nation doesn't fade into a memory in the next four years. I appreciate the stars and support, friend. Have yourself a great night.

    Ron
Comment from tempeste
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She knew Biden was not fit for office but she said nothing for months.

Biden assigned Harris to keep your southern border strong instead she allowed 10 million illegals to enter thanks to George Soros' open border ( open society) policy crap.

This giant influx has weighed:
on housing ,
the health and school system,
Employment etc.

It has bought chaos ,crime and degrade to cities.

I watched a few videos of her yesterday .. she laughs a lot and repeats a half a dozen phrases that are supposed to be deep.

I don't think she will be the Democratic nominee

I'm betting on Michelle Obama.

Being Black and a woman should not be enough to get her elected . I would demand results.

In 4 years she has only screwed up the country.

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
    That is for sure. I was thinking they'd either do Michelle or they'd bring back that monster Hillary. Fingers crossed they don't bring in either so Trump can win by a landslide. Lol. Unless the ballots are of course again stuffed.

    Thank you for the great review and stop in, Tempeste

    =]

    Ron
Comment from AP Apgar
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What an excellent contest entry and picture supporting- Your poem has a good syllable count and flow - an outlook shared by those who love this country- a last resort for useful idiots- well done-
Good Luck - Alan


 Comment Written 24-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
    Thank you for the great review, Alan. I appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes. Have yourself a great upcoming weekend, friend.

    Ron
Comment from Sally Law
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Me too, in an unbelievable sort of dry heave from my innermost being. My goodness, she had one job to do and that was to secure the southern border. Was she there fifteen minutes? Does she give a rip about America? No, she doesn't. I cringe at the thought of her as president.

I'm a Libertarian and usually vote Republican because I am prolife and for a limited government as stated in the Constitution. The Dems are all about abortion, AND TO FULL TERM! What next, abortion justified in the crib? I sincerely wonder under these Dems and their leaders. No thanks!

Thanks for the bold stand, DS, and my very best in the upcoming vote.
Sal :))

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
    Thank you so much for the fantastic review, Sally. Yes, we are in serious trouble if she takes the win. I don't even think there will be an America after 4 years if the dems take over again. That's how fast we're falling down the drain and giving all our money away. Let alone, like you said, killing babies simply for birth control. That's flat out BS. Good thing they didn't get Trump. I dearly appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes, Sally. I'm glad you liked this little piece. Have yourself a great upcoming weekend.

    =]

    Ron
Comment from patcelaw
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I hope we will all be laughing after she gets defeated. Our country is in need of having somebody who knows something about business and does not sleep around to get to where they are. Patricia.

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
    That's for sure. Thank you for the great review, Patricia. We're doomed if they again steal the election and win. I was really just goofing around with this even though I'm sure many folks saw this just as I did. Have yourself a great night and thank you again.

    =]

    Ron
reply by patcelaw on 23-Jul-2024
    Make sure that we vote.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
    There's no doubt about that.
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
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Your poem conveys a strong reaction with humor and a clear perspective on the political scene. The brevity of the 5-7-5 format suits the punchy tone well. However, consider refining the imagery to enhance the impact:

Suggestions:

1. Expand the Imagery: Instead of focusing solely on the reaction, you could include a brief, vivid image that contrasts the candidates or the situation to enrich the poem's context.
2. Adjust the Tone: Depending on your intent, you might want to soften the humor slightly to ensure it resonates well with a broader audience or maintains a certain tone.

Revised Example:

When Harris was picked,
I chuckled loud at the surprise
Trump's jaw must have dropped.
Just a thought. Then you have a set up to wear people can take it both ways. :)

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
    Thank you for the fantastic review, Patty. I'm pretty sure the intent I was implying was taken as so. Lol. I'm not here to please the masses. Anything on here against Joe is considered blasphemy, so I'm not hoping for favor. Just figured I'd say my piece in a little 5-7-5 and let them take it as is. I really appreciate the stars and suggestions. Have yourself a great night.

    =]

    Ron