Spirited Justice
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Spirited Justice Chap 9"Mystery, crime and ghostly high jinks
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Comment from karenina
You are a master at transitioning from one scene/ set of characters to another within the same chapter. This makes it much easier to follow and enjoy.
I can't like Johan. My spidey-sense tells me he's up to no good even though he's doting on Hilda. We'll see what comes of that!
As for Angelo and Naomi... Hmmm. I've thought Angelo was not the bad guy he seemed ... but can this be truly attraction with Naomi or a means to an end?
I'm moving to the next chapter while I have time!
Karenina
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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You are a master at transitioning from one scene/ set of characters to another within the same chapter. This makes it much easier to follow and enjoy.
I can't like Johan. My spidey-sense tells me he's up to no good even though he's doting on Hilda. We'll see what comes of that!
As for Angelo and Naomi... Hmmm. I've thought Angelo was not the bad guy he seemed ... but can this be truly attraction with Naomi or a means to an end?
I'm moving to the next chapter while I have time!
Karenina
Comment Written 31-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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I'm not giving away any trade secrets... Just finished Chapter 19...and a short... but I'll wait to post tomorrow, I guess. I'm thrilled to see you back on the site. Made by day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Esther Brown
Loving the story...I found a tiny fix. By accident, you slipped and called Johan John. Copied here: John gestured for them to sit. I will keep reading until my lazy hubby wakes up...Es
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Loving the story...I found a tiny fix. By accident, you slipped and called Johan John. Copied here: John gestured for them to sit. I will keep reading until my lazy hubby wakes up...Es
Comment Written 30-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Nice catch! Thank you my friend. I appreciate all the help I can get. thank you for enjoying the story. It's been another fun write, especially using characters I am already familiar with.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ulla
Hi Carol, I have fallen so behind with your story but I'm trying to catch up. Hilda is falling for the oldest trick in the world. I just hope Eleanor will come to her rescue and in time. Hugs, Ulla xxx
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Hi Carol, I have fallen so behind with your story but I'm trying to catch up. Hilda is falling for the oldest trick in the world. I just hope Eleanor will come to her rescue and in time. Hugs, Ulla xxx
Comment Written 19-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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You weren't that far behind...I just posted Chap 11 and you were cught up until then. I appreciate any time you can read and enjoy.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
It seems Hilda only thinks she as been rescued. Johan is only pretending to be taking care of her. I'm sorry I so far behind in reading I almost missed this one.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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It seems Hilda only thinks she as been rescued. Johan is only pretending to be taking care of her. I'm sorry I so far behind in reading I almost missed this one.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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You are all caught up, Beth! I might get a chapter written today but too many things have been keeping m away from writing. Thanks for stopping by as usual. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from BOO ghost
BOO is back! Review Wonderland Day! Character list much appreciated. I glance at the character list when I get lost. Guess that the diversion plan worked. Is Carlos a drug and sex trafficking like in a cartel? I read that Hilda is a red head. Contestants are being kidnapped and sold on the Black Market?
Looks like a romance is blossoming. "My apartment is only a few blocks from here. There's enough stuff there to make us a decent breakfast." Yep. I knew it. He's cunning, taking advantage of a situation. Story well done! See ya next episode.
BOO!
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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BOO is back! Review Wonderland Day! Character list much appreciated. I glance at the character list when I get lost. Guess that the diversion plan worked. Is Carlos a drug and sex trafficking like in a cartel? I read that Hilda is a red head. Contestants are being kidnapped and sold on the Black Market?
Looks like a romance is blossoming. "My apartment is only a few blocks from here. There's enough stuff there to make us a decent breakfast." Yep. I knew it. He's cunning, taking advantage of a situation. Story well done! See ya next episode.
BOO!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Well, how lovely to see my favorite ghost! (Next to Eleanor, of course). Actually Carlos was truly into his life as a rancher and enjoying his Villa, but his son wasn't satisfied with a peaceful life. Now Carlos finds himself cleaning up after his son time and time again and it has changed him.
Johan is a bad guy and Hilda is in trouble whether she knows it or not.
Thank you as always, my friend.
Smiles, Carol
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Reading, reviewing more stuff! Catch you next episode.
Comment from LJbutterfly
A lot took place in this chapter, as does all of your chapters. Hilda seems so vulnerable and naive, but your descriptions of her and Johan are so realistic, believable, and understandable. Johan is one of the bad guys, but how bad we don't yet know. Hilda's medical research has something to do with all of the confusion. We don't know what she knows. She may not know what treasure of evidence she has. There is so much to be unraveled.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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A lot took place in this chapter, as does all of your chapters. Hilda seems so vulnerable and naive, but your descriptions of her and Johan are so realistic, believable, and understandable. Johan is one of the bad guys, but how bad we don't yet know. Hilda's medical research has something to do with all of the confusion. We don't know what she knows. She may not know what treasure of evidence she has. There is so much to be unraveled.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Yes, Hilda focused on research and bettering society and now is easily swayed by the charm of Johan. Johan believes he can get what he wants by sweeping her off her feet. Hope help comes to the rescue soon!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Well, I think Naomi is safe from Angelo, he's in love with her, and I can't see him harming her. But now Carlos is on the phone!
It's Hilda who needs the protection, what is Johan up to? Eleanor needs to get there fast. There is so much going on in this chapter, a bit like detective films. It's life, more than one character doing their thing, good or bad. Now I have to wait for the answers this chapter has thrown up. Lol. Loving this, my friend. Now back to my editing. xxxx Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Well, I think Naomi is safe from Angelo, he's in love with her, and I can't see him harming her. But now Carlos is on the phone!
It's Hilda who needs the protection, what is Johan up to? Eleanor needs to get there fast. There is so much going on in this chapter, a bit like detective films. It's life, more than one character doing their thing, good or bad. Now I have to wait for the answers this chapter has thrown up. Lol. Loving this, my friend. Now back to my editing. xxxx Sandra xxx
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Hope all is going well for you with the editing. It's not easy to tear apart something you put your heart and sole into when writing. Hope you aren't making too many changes.
Angelo will do his best with Naomi, but I'm worried about Johan. He looks like a clean cut guy from the University, but I doubt that's who he really is. And Hilda is so vulnerable.
Thanks for reading and enjoying another chapter. I appreciate YOU, your time and your support. Happy editing!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
I'm trying to figure out if Johan is bad or good and what his intentions are now, towards Hilda. The situation is becoming increasingly complex. Hope I can keep up. But I am enjoying it this far. Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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I'm trying to figure out if Johan is bad or good and what his intentions are now, towards Hilda. The situation is becoming increasingly complex. Hope I can keep up. But I am enjoying it this far. Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Exactly who Johan is will be clear very soon. I'll try not to make it too confusing.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
There seems to be more than a few plans being carried out by people. I'm so glad you have a list of characters. Johan seems to have fallen in love with Naomi who has been forced to help dispose of the body of someone Jose killed.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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There seems to be more than a few plans being carried out by people. I'm so glad you have a list of characters. Johan seems to have fallen in love with Naomi who has been forced to help dispose of the body of someone Jose killed.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Johan has been sent to trick Hilda because someone wants her research papers. Naomi and Arthur Bennett (deceased) helped Jose dispose of a body. But never fear, Eleanor will figure it out!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
It's Naomi has two men who are attracted Angelo and Donateli, and she's caught I'm a moment in time with Angelo, I don't think she's in danger of harm from him anymore, but a tender as only you can describe Carol, well dine, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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It's Naomi has two men who are attracted Angelo and Donateli, and she's caught I'm a moment in time with Angelo, I don't think she's in danger of harm from him anymore, but a tender as only you can describe Carol, well dine, blessings Roy
Comment Written 14-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Thanks so much, Roy. Angelo has his rough side which lately has gotten him in a situation he hadn't intended to be with Carlos and Jose. NOw if he walks away, he leaves Naomi at risk.
Smiles, Carol
