Where the Sun Falls
A free verse33 total reviews
Comment from Colorado Owl
This is beautiful! Your words are carefully, perfectly chosen. One of the reasons I like this so much is because I now feel compelled to write about a very similar experience. (I've always felt it strange that we put a warning on descriptions of love, but there's apparently no need to warn of violence and pain.) Thank you!
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This is beautiful! Your words are carefully, perfectly chosen. One of the reasons I like this so much is because I now feel compelled to write about a very similar experience. (I've always felt it strange that we put a warning on descriptions of love, but there's apparently no need to warn of violence and pain.) Thank you!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
Comment from RodG
Your poem graphically describes what it is/was like to spend that last Summer night with someone you fell for, but had to say goodbye to. I really like the imagery of how you spent that last night in each other's arms. Rod
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Your poem graphically describes what it is/was like to spend that last Summer night with someone you fell for, but had to say goodbye to. I really like the imagery of how you spent that last night in each other's arms. Rod
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
Comment from Amelie Johns
I really enjoyed reading your free verse poem about love. It flows so well and I love the metaphors. You have defined love beautifully. Wishing you the best of luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Amelie
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I really enjoyed reading your free verse poem about love. It flows so well and I love the metaphors. You have defined love beautifully. Wishing you the best of luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Amelie
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
Comment from Dawn Munro
"But I turn my back
on the horizon's view;
to watch
the summer sunset
in his eyes."
When we're in love, the eyes say it all, don't they? Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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"But I turn my back
on the horizon's view;
to watch
the summer sunset
in his eyes."
When we're in love, the eyes say it all, don't they? Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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So very true, Dawn!
Xoxo
Comment from godlucifer
perfect love,a perfect gem. you gather this love to be a gem of its kind. the romance gather here is well respected. your poem was a true write. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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perfect love,a perfect gem. you gather this love to be a gem of its kind. the romance gather here is well respected. your poem was a true write. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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thank you so much!
Comment from estory
You are getting very consistent in these top notch free verse pieces. I liked the wave like rhythm of the language, the soft tone to the voice, and the colorful images were terrific. One line really stood out and I have to say it seems like one of the strongest lines I have read. "We sink like stones and secrets into the sand." That's what poetry is all about, capturing a sense of the experience of life transcendent. A moment when these images of a beach symbolize our inability to completely share one another, to hold onto the moment, or stay focused. This is the kind of line that Yeats was such a master at. So you are in great company. estory
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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You are getting very consistent in these top notch free verse pieces. I liked the wave like rhythm of the language, the soft tone to the voice, and the colorful images were terrific. One line really stood out and I have to say it seems like one of the strongest lines I have read. "We sink like stones and secrets into the sand." That's what poetry is all about, capturing a sense of the experience of life transcendent. A moment when these images of a beach symbolize our inability to completely share one another, to hold onto the moment, or stay focused. This is the kind of line that Yeats was such a master at. So you are in great company. estory
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Once again, you've made my day! Thank you so much, estory. I am truly honored! Xo
Comment from nomi338
Romantic bliss exposed in love's sweet kiss. If told a thousand times, it will never seem old or worn. This is the magic of true love. You did a masterful job of expressing this magical expression of sweet love and its endearing passion as the moon supplants the sun in the evening sky. Bravo!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Romantic bliss exposed in love's sweet kiss. If told a thousand times, it will never seem old or worn. This is the magic of true love. You did a masterful job of expressing this magical expression of sweet love and its endearing passion as the moon supplants the sun in the evening sky. Bravo!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much, Nomi! That means a lot.
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My pleasure.
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
Wow! What a beautiful poem. You have so many well chosen words for lyrical descriptions. My favorite line was: To dangle where the moon and love both loom. Well done!
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Wow! What a beautiful poem. You have so many well chosen words for lyrical descriptions. My favorite line was: To dangle where the moon and love both loom. Well done!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Verna, thank you so much for your wonderful and encouraging review! Xo
Comment from Janet Foor
Where the Sun Falls is a lovely free verse, Jessica. I loved the artwork you chose as well. The poem is romantic and sensual and leaves the reader with a sigh.
Excellent imagery and alliteration throughout.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Where the Sun Falls is a lovely free verse, Jessica. I loved the artwork you chose as well. The poem is romantic and sensual and leaves the reader with a sigh.
Excellent imagery and alliteration throughout.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Janet, I appreciate that so much!
Thank you!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
This is a beautiful poem, full of metaphors so strong and well-crafted that I also felt the narrator to be like a fish on the line, fighting the ending. Very cool effect, and PERFECT picture to go in tandem with your well-chosen words. Xo
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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This is a beautiful poem, full of metaphors so strong and well-crafted that I also felt the narrator to be like a fish on the line, fighting the ending. Very cool effect, and PERFECT picture to go in tandem with your well-chosen words. Xo
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Thank you, beautiful! I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
Xoxo
