Mountain Birds' Breakfast
Free verse poem about wild birds18 total reviews
Comment from bob cullen
Wonderfully written, but to me it's a sensationally written mental picture of an early morning life in the forest rather than a poem. With stunningly beautiful birds. Let me add however, the picture you've painted is truly delightful. Sorry, I'm just a failed grumpy old poet. Apologies if I've offended.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Wonderfully written, but to me it's a sensationally written mental picture of an early morning life in the forest rather than a poem. With stunningly beautiful birds. Let me add however, the picture you've painted is truly delightful. Sorry, I'm just a failed grumpy old poet. Apologies if I've offended.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your honest review. I know free verse can sound too prosy sometimes. When that happens I go back to iambic pentameter for blank verse for a while, ha ha.
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Thank you for accepting my comment so graceously.
Comment from Janet Foor
We are birdwatchers too and I enjoyed reading about all the ones that you see. We have many of the same birds that you see here in North Carolina. Bird feeders and a natural habitat lure them into our backyard.
Very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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We are birdwatchers too and I enjoyed reading about all the ones that you see. We have many of the same birds that you see here in North Carolina. Bird feeders and a natural habitat lure them into our backyard.
Very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your kind review! Maybe someday I'll see those birds in North Carolina.
Comment from Father Flaps
Wow! You live in a beautiful neck of the woods, Crystie. That's Bigfoot territory. Have you ever seen one? Pristine wilderness. Do you live in Brighton? You're so lucky to live there.
You did a good job with this free verse, targeting the various species of birds and the Utah forest.
My favorite lines,
"Black-hooded Steller's jays
perch on high pine limbs,
like indigo protectors"
and,
"Dark, alert eyes under grandfather-white brows
seem both regal and roguish."
and,
"When the jays have eaten their fill,
they fly downwind, just to explore campgrounds,
rout among refuse, hop on wood tables,
or scold campers who have slept in late."
Nicely penned!
Good Luck in the Free Verse Poetry contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Wow! You live in a beautiful neck of the woods, Crystie. That's Bigfoot territory. Have you ever seen one? Pristine wilderness. Do you live in Brighton? You're so lucky to live there.
You did a good job with this free verse, targeting the various species of birds and the Utah forest.
My favorite lines,
"Black-hooded Steller's jays
perch on high pine limbs,
like indigo protectors"
and,
"Dark, alert eyes under grandfather-white brows
seem both regal and roguish."
and,
"When the jays have eaten their fill,
they fly downwind, just to explore campgrounds,
rout among refuse, hop on wood tables,
or scold campers who have slept in late."
Nicely penned!
Good Luck in the Free Verse Poetry contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 12-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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No sign of Bigfoot here. There is a high school called Brighton about four miles to the northeast of us, and a ski lodge called Brighton up Big Cottonwood Canyon. Thanks for your detailed review.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Such awesome birds they are and love the way you have poetically distinguished them here from the others... we don't have them here, but I remember enjoying them on my travels through Colorado years ago... Wonderful offering for the contest, my lady -- thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2024
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Such awesome birds they are and love the way you have poetically distinguished them here from the others... we don't have them here, but I remember enjoying them on my travels through Colorado years ago... Wonderful offering for the contest, my lady -- thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 10-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2024
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Thank you for such a nice review.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
How lucky you are to have all those birds at your beck and call, so to speak. When I was at my old house, we had birds in my garden all the time. And squirrels too. Enjot the week. Karen
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2024
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How lucky you are to have all those birds at your beck and call, so to speak. When I was at my old house, we had birds in my garden all the time. And squirrels too. Enjot the week. Karen
Comment Written 10-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much for your personalized comments.
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:-)
Comment from Jacob1395
This was a lovely piece of imagery. I particularly loved the line "Mosquitoes move more slowly in the colder air." I could really feel how cold it was with this line and you showed this in an excellent way. A brilliant piece, I really enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2024
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This was a lovely piece of imagery. I particularly loved the line "Mosquitoes move more slowly in the colder air." I could really feel how cold it was with this line and you showed this in an excellent way. A brilliant piece, I really enjoyed it.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your generous and detailed review. I was thinking those mosquitoes would be easier for the birds to catch, too.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Crystie,
Boy, you know a lot of birds and are lucky to see so many varieties.
I assume the artwork is of the Black Hooded Steller's Jay. I like the personification and metaphor in this free verse poem
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
Have a wonderful day.
Joan
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2024
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Hi Crystie,
Boy, you know a lot of birds and are lucky to see so many varieties.
I assume the artwork is of the Black Hooded Steller's Jay. I like the personification and metaphor in this free verse poem
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
Have a wonderful day.
Joan
Comment Written 10-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your kind review.
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No problem, Crystie.
Joan
Comment from Begin Again
Besides presenting us with such a lovely picture your words painted a vivid scene of all the birds and their busy activity as they seek out their food. You have a vast knowledge of them..Awesome1
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2024
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Besides presenting us with such a lovely picture your words painted a vivid scene of all the birds and their busy activity as they seek out their food. You have a vast knowledge of them..Awesome1
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 10-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your super review.
Comment from zanya
Such a beautiful picture followed by a delightful poem about wild birds and their behaviours treating the reader to a virtual cornucopia of color and sound
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2024
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Such a beautiful picture followed by a delightful poem about wild birds and their behaviours treating the reader to a virtual cornucopia of color and sound
Comment Written 10-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your generous and descriptive review.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
What is that bird pictured herein? Fascinating. I am a little familiar with the Wasatch Range. SLC in particular. I have investments with Wasatch Premier Properties throughout the five Western states.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
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What is that bird pictured herein? Fascinating. I am a little familiar with the Wasatch Range. SLC in particular. I have investments with Wasatch Premier Properties throughout the five Western states.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
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The Steller's jay is a fun bird to watch, as the photo shows. Thank you for stopping by to read and comment.