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The cry

A soldier's nightmare

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Comment from Begin Again
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Should that be bayonets or am I missing something? A quick story in 50 words but I got confused at the end. But that's easy for this old lady to do. Good luck in the contest.
Smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
    I may have messed up. I will check it out. Thanks for the help.
Comment from F. William Lester
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Nicely done. You used the fifty words well to convey a thought that anyone who's served and been in combat asks themselves at one time or another. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
    Thank you.
reply by F. William Lester on 18-Oct-2024
    You're welcome.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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This is a chilling pows reminding me of world war one when many soldiers were cannon fodder and we lost a lot of young men.

A couple of suggestions for the sake of grammar:
It was freezing cold, my hands (were) numb but my enemy (was) near.

A poignant post, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
    Thanks, Dollly.
Comment from Kahlani
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I don't know how you did it - write a short story in only fifty words. I'm attempting the one hundred word short story and find it difficult. Well done. Note: there are a couple of spelling/grammar errors.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
    Were?
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
    I found them, Thanks for your help