The Kirby Case - Part 4
Detective Mike Brady continues to look for a serial killer21 total reviews
Comment from Sugarray77
Hi Pam... so you have added a twist with the nail salon... now where can that pesky shop be??? Great job on all points... rhyme, plot, attention to detail. I am enjoying the read.
Melissa
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Hi Pam... so you have added a twist with the nail salon... now where can that pesky shop be??? Great job on all points... rhyme, plot, attention to detail. I am enjoying the read.
Melissa
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
Comment from jmdg1954
Not every clue leads to something definitive. Detectives need to keep at it and dig, dig and dig some more.
I am really enjoying this as if it were written in prose, it could get drawn out with much detail. This is boom, boom, boom... story being told.
John
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Not every clue leads to something definitive. Detectives need to keep at it and dig, dig and dig some more.
I am really enjoying this as if it were written in prose, it could get drawn out with much detail. This is boom, boom, boom... story being told.
John
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This killer is torturing the girls too, oh my goodness this is a grim scene painted here Pam. They will have gathered much DNA and once the killer is caught they will be able to identify him at last, love Dolly x x x
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This killer is torturing the girls too, oh my goodness this is a grim scene painted here Pam. They will have gathered much DNA and once the killer is caught they will be able to identify him at last, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Dolly for this great review. But, they have gathered no DNA
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
The story is moved slightly, but there are rhyming mistakes. some of the lines sound forced when you say them out loud. The best thing anyone ever told me about poetry, was to read it out loud over and over, so we hear whether or really flows or not. Good luck with your story.
Karen
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The story is moved slightly, but there are rhyming mistakes. some of the lines sound forced when you say them out loud. The best thing anyone ever told me about poetry, was to read it out loud over and over, so we hear whether or really flows or not. Good luck with your story.
Karen
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Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
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Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Pam,
This is a great poem. I never would have thought about doing a series of poems to talk about a case. You are brilliant my friend. This is a good case. Did it happen where you live? I have never heard of it and I am a crime junkie.
Well done my friend
Cecilia
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Pam,
This is a great poem. I never would have thought about doing a series of poems to talk about a case. You are brilliant my friend. This is a good case. Did it happen where you live? I have never heard of it and I am a crime junkie.
Well done my friend
Cecilia
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Cecilia for another wonderful review
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You're welcome my sweet friend.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
This is like reading both a newspaper article telling us what the latest in the investigation is, and a crime novel.
What an interesting idea you've taken on here, Pam.
xo
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This is like reading both a newspaper article telling us what the latest in the investigation is, and a crime novel.
What an interesting idea you've taken on here, Pam.
xo
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you again Pam for a great review
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
This is so much fun to be reading your poems and learning about the case at the same time. So cool and interesting. Thanks for sharing. Stay on the case!
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This is so much fun to be reading your poems and learning about the case at the same time. So cool and interesting. Thanks for sharing. Stay on the case!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Marilyn for a great review
Comment from jake cosmos aller
another great series in your epic poem about the hunt for a serial killer. BTW the stanzas are not formatted properly. Fan Story sometimes messes up formating spaces when posting from word. to fix this go to advnce editing and click post from Word control V then check print preview sometimes it just does not take the stanza breaks. A workaround is to add a line like this --------------------------------------
after each stanza makes it easier to read and follow
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another great series in your epic poem about the hunt for a serial killer. BTW the stanzas are not formatted properly. Fan Story sometimes messes up formating spaces when posting from word. to fix this go to advnce editing and click post from Word control V then check print preview sometimes it just does not take the stanza breaks. A workaround is to add a line like this --------------------------------------
after each stanza makes it easier to read and follow
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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That is a good suggestion Jake I will take that for my next few posts
Thanks for the wonderful review
Comment from Charles D Ezell
Another good one. We are getting closer. Only a matter of time and we will nail the guy. Did I say nail? Perhaps we need looking in another small town for the saloon.
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Another good one. We are getting closer. Only a matter of time and we will nail the guy. Did I say nail? Perhaps we need looking in another small town for the saloon.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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lol. Thank you, Charles for humorous review.
Comment from bob cullen
As I previously said, clever in the extreme. an entire story in poetic form. I'd like to add some extra letters to your name. I'd make it, Pamursosmart.
This truly is brilliant, original and exceedingly skilled.
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As I previously said, clever in the extreme. an entire story in poetic form. I'd like to add some extra letters to your name. I'd make it, Pamursosmart.
This truly is brilliant, original and exceedingly skilled.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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lol Bob. I am blushing. Thank you for your thoughtful and humorous review.
