Burn It All Down
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "The Edge of Oblivion"A war of a few against a syndicate
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Comment from Rick Gardner
The path is set, what is next is waiting. Like the hidden threat in the vault. Answers will show the worst in each involved. They may see themselves and not like what they see.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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The path is set, what is next is waiting. Like the hidden threat in the vault. Answers will show the worst in each involved. They may see themselves and not like what they see.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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thank you, i am having a blast with this story
Comment from lancellot
Good build-up and nice tension, where the reader is experiencing all the newness and mystery through Alex. I'm guessing they found a room where human clones are, and Grayson is one of them.
Well done.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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Good build-up and nice tension, where the reader is experiencing all the newness and mystery through Alex. I'm guessing they found a room where human clones are, and Grayson is one of them.
Well done.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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not quite
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really enjoyed how this chapter kept me on the edge of my seat! The way you built tension with each step that Alex and Grayson took made me feel like I was right there with them. Your descriptions were fantastic and really added to the suspense. I liked how you dropped little hints about the experiments and Grayson's past - it made me want to know more. Your pacing is spot on. The ending left me curious about what comes next. Keep up the great work - I can't wait to read more from you!
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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I really enjoyed how this chapter kept me on the edge of my seat! The way you built tension with each step that Alex and Grayson took made me feel like I was right there with them. Your descriptions were fantastic and really added to the suspense. I liked how you dropped little hints about the experiments and Grayson's past - it made me want to know more. Your pacing is spot on. The ending left me curious about what comes next. Keep up the great work - I can't wait to read more from you!
Comment Written 14-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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thank you, i hope i don't let you down
