Burn It All Down
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Comment from Iza Deleanu
I love this passage as i t leaves room for supposition and anticipation ""Finished!" Grayson shouted with urgency, seizing Alex's arm and pulling him backward. The explosion occurred instantaneously: the charge detonated with a thunderous roar, causing the tunnel to collapse in a billowing cloud of fire and debris. The creatures screamed as they were engulfed by the blast; their contorted forms disappearing in the tumult. It was chaotic, this moment marked a turning point in their escape." I can see this scene in a movie:)
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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I love this passage as i t leaves room for supposition and anticipation ""Finished!" Grayson shouted with urgency, seizing Alex's arm and pulling him backward. The explosion occurred instantaneously: the charge detonated with a thunderous roar, causing the tunnel to collapse in a billowing cloud of fire and debris. The creatures screamed as they were engulfed by the blast; their contorted forms disappearing in the tumult. It was chaotic, this moment marked a turning point in their escape." I can see this scene in a movie:)
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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thank you so much, i love spinning my little webs, i think i my have been a spider in an other life, lol
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your story is such an adrenaline rush! I loved how you created such a intense atmosphere. I could practically hear the blaring alarms and feel the heat from the self destructing facility. Alex's moments of hesitation
was perfect. The action sequences were incredible, especially when Alex faced the creatures head-on. I could feel the tension climbing with each moment. The ending left me on edge and wondering what comes next - it's so exciting!
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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Your story is such an adrenaline rush! I loved how you created such a intense atmosphere. I could practically hear the blaring alarms and feel the heat from the self destructing facility. Alex's moments of hesitation
was perfect. The action sequences were incredible, especially when Alex faced the creatures head-on. I could feel the tension climbing with each moment. The ending left me on edge and wondering what comes next - it's so exciting!
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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thank you so much, i love spinning my little webs, i think i my have been a spider in an other life, lol
Comment from Tim Margetts
Well, its not often that two consecutive read next posts are the same author, Marilyn, and such totally different posts.
You have a great way of capturing action and combat and bringing it to life. Well done.
I would offer one bit of advice, your subheadings, Make them Bold and maybe one step larger so they don't get lost in the text.
Tim x
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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Well, its not often that two consecutive read next posts are the same author, Marilyn, and such totally different posts.
You have a great way of capturing action and combat and bringing it to life. Well done.
I would offer one bit of advice, your subheadings, Make them Bold and maybe one step larger so they don't get lost in the text.
Tim x
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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yes, you are definitely right
