Burn It All Down
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "The Final Shadow"A war of a few against a syndicate
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Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really enjoyed the tension you built into your story! The way you describe the environment really pulls me in. I felt like I was right there with Alex and Grayson. The little details you included like the sound of branches snapping made the scene feel real. It's intense and I loved every moment of it! Keep going, this is fantastic!
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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I really enjoyed the tension you built into your story! The way you describe the environment really pulls me in. I felt like I was right there with Alex and Grayson. The little details you included like the sound of branches snapping made the scene feel real. It's intense and I loved every moment of it! Keep going, this is fantastic!
Comment Written 18-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2025
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another one is up
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I like the cadence of your sentences that with each beat are building the momentum;"Every step was a gamble: every slip, a potential death sentence. They continued onward, driven by a sense of urgency, although the conditions were treacherous. This path, fraught with danger, demanded utmost caution because one misstep could prove fatal." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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I like the cadence of your sentences that with each beat are building the momentum;"Every step was a gamble: every slip, a potential death sentence. They continued onward, driven by a sense of urgency, although the conditions were treacherous. This path, fraught with danger, demanded utmost caution because one misstep could prove fatal." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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thank you, I just seem to have that in the back of my head as i'm building but I never noticed it until you said something, funny
