The Gardens at Weatherbury
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Comment from F. William Lester
Very interesting. This my first time reading you book and I find the chapter very appealing and easy to read, especially for a pre-teen. I'll take a look at the other chapters. A couple of small points: "...map took own their own unique hue..." The first "own" should be "on", "...map took on their own unique hue..." Another: "...he was still stumbling quite notably..." "Notably" should be "noticeably". Thanks for sharing it. Be well
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Very interesting. This my first time reading you book and I find the chapter very appealing and easy to read, especially for a pre-teen. I'll take a look at the other chapters. A couple of small points: "...map took own their own unique hue..." The first "own" should be "on", "...map took on their own unique hue..." Another: "...he was still stumbling quite notably..." "Notably" should be "noticeably". Thanks for sharing it. Be well
Comment Written 20-Jan-2025
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Yvette,
This is a great continuation of your story. I think after reading another chapter or two I should be able to see the whole picture. Your notes help a lot.
This story is well organized and flows nicely.
Great job my friend
Cecilia
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Yvette,
This is a great continuation of your story. I think after reading another chapter or two I should be able to see the whole picture. Your notes help a lot.
This story is well organized and flows nicely.
Great job my friend
Cecilia
Comment Written 20-Jan-2025
Comment from BethShelby
Your characters are unique and interesting. I'm a bit behind due to a health setback, but I hope to get back soon to posting and reading posts. I think this sounds like a story the pre-teen readers would love.
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Your characters are unique and interesting. I'm a bit behind due to a health setback, but I hope to get back soon to posting and reading posts. I think this sounds like a story the pre-teen readers would love.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2025
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I just seeing with my imagination the beautiful picture you drew with your magical words: "There were 'water attractions' like ponds and fountains that grew up out of the page and actually 'flowed'. And the bamboo grove stood tall and swayed in some unseen breeze - okay, six inches high or so, but that's tall compared to a flat shape labeled 'Bamboo Grove' on the page! It was like a virtual reality representation of the entire Weatherbury grounds..." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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I just seeing with my imagination the beautiful picture you drew with your magical words: "There were 'water attractions' like ponds and fountains that grew up out of the page and actually 'flowed'. And the bamboo grove stood tall and swayed in some unseen breeze - okay, six inches high or so, but that's tall compared to a flat shape labeled 'Bamboo Grove' on the page! It was like a virtual reality representation of the entire Weatherbury grounds..." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2025
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
YES!!!!!!!!!!!! They are back! And what a yucky, snotty start it is too! LOL. You did not disappoint, Yvonne, I've waited so patiently for YEARS for part 12!!! How is that for loyalty? Lol. Now what was it that Nicholas spotted that had nearly all of them staring proudly at their new young Groundskeeper? Even he doesn't know. This was such a fun chapter, my friend. I'm so glad it's back! Well done. (Don't let me have to wait years for the next part!) Love and hugs, Sandra xx
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YES!!!!!!!!!!!! They are back! And what a yucky, snotty start it is too! LOL. You did not disappoint, Yvonne, I've waited so patiently for YEARS for part 12!!! How is that for loyalty? Lol. Now what was it that Nicholas spotted that had nearly all of them staring proudly at their new young Groundskeeper? Even he doesn't know. This was such a fun chapter, my friend. I'm so glad it's back! Well done. (Don't let me have to wait years for the next part!) Love and hugs, Sandra xx
Comment Written 20-Jan-2025
