Homecoming
Free Verse: When Silence Says Everything36 total reviews
Comment from Curt Mongold
I really like the style this is written in. The word usage and symmetry is complimented by the meaning captured throughout this fine work. It brings the message home on many levels.
A fine job.
Sincerely,
Curt
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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I really like the style this is written in. The word usage and symmetry is complimented by the meaning captured throughout this fine work. It brings the message home on many levels.
A fine job.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Hey Curt! So pleased you stopped by and enjoyed your visit!!!! diane
Comment from giftid3
Thank you for sharing your thoughts, view and concept with the rest of us.
You have expressed well the anticipation felt as one prepares for their homecoming. The joys of expectation are overwhelmed by the knowledge that the one who left has now grown in ways far greater than expected and apprehension flits in as a benchmark to remain calm and silent in order to maintain the decorum of one who has finally reached the pinnacle of their life and success. Memories come in and people and places seen long ago refresh the soul showing that it is indeed a wonderful homecoming. (My view anyway)
Thanks for the journey your words created and many blessings to you
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Thank you for sharing your thoughts, view and concept with the rest of us.
You have expressed well the anticipation felt as one prepares for their homecoming. The joys of expectation are overwhelmed by the knowledge that the one who left has now grown in ways far greater than expected and apprehension flits in as a benchmark to remain calm and silent in order to maintain the decorum of one who has finally reached the pinnacle of their life and success. Memories come in and people and places seen long ago refresh the soul showing that it is indeed a wonderful homecoming. (My view anyway)
Thanks for the journey your words created and many blessings to you
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Hello! So pleased you stopped by. Thank you for your perceptive review. Much appreciated! diane
Comment from utopian_dream_x
Wow. That was beautiful to read =)
While reading through the first verse, the imagery you used made me feel very relaxed. Overall, a stunning piece of writing that makes me think about change.
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Wow. That was beautiful to read =)
While reading through the first verse, the imagery you used made me feel very relaxed. Overall, a stunning piece of writing that makes me think about change.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
Comment from Josipher32
I love your little trademark scribbles--
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You do that sign in a lot of your poems. Heehee
Anyway, this was a very well presented piece.
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I love your little trademark scribbles--
<<<~~~>>>
You do that sign in a lot of your poems. Heehee
Anyway, this was a very well presented piece.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
Comment from Janelle
Really, really liked this one too Mrs K. I like how it is set out and the pictures made with your words, with he accompanying art work just adding that extra to support them. I read this as a woman expecting to meet with someone who'd had a major affect on her, and 'tho there was some trepidation, was feeling excited at seeing them again and nervous about their reaction. All to no avail as there was none! I really felt for her. I like all of the verses but especially;
jubilant gathering of
so many yesterdays
holds only mild trepidation
for this traveler
should her past
announce his presence
disturbing hard-won confidence
I like your style of poetry as I find it easy to read and the message is quite clear with a lovely lilting quality. Well done, regards, Jan
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Really, really liked this one too Mrs K. I like how it is set out and the pictures made with your words, with he accompanying art work just adding that extra to support them. I read this as a woman expecting to meet with someone who'd had a major affect on her, and 'tho there was some trepidation, was feeling excited at seeing them again and nervous about their reaction. All to no avail as there was none! I really felt for her. I like all of the verses but especially;
jubilant gathering of
so many yesterdays
holds only mild trepidation
for this traveler
should her past
announce his presence
disturbing hard-won confidence
I like your style of poetry as I find it easy to read and the message is quite clear with a lovely lilting quality. Well done, regards, Jan
Comment Written 17-Nov-2008
Comment from starman
The tranquil balm of the picture is reflected in your poem. How often we do need such places to rest and find our balance again.
Very good
;)s
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The tranquil balm of the picture is reflected in your poem. How often we do need such places to rest and find our balance again.
Very good
;)s
Comment Written 17-Nov-2008
Comment from Joan E.
Your three uses of recognition and the progression tells it all: "echoes of recognition"--"no recognition"-- "beyond recognition." Well done.
I also enjoyed phrases like: rutted path; shadow dance; should her past announce his presence; quirky grins.
Thanks for sharing these very personal feelings.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2008
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Your three uses of recognition and the progression tells it all: "echoes of recognition"--"no recognition"-- "beyond recognition." Well done.
I also enjoyed phrases like: rutted path; shadow dance; should her past announce his presence; quirky grins.
Thanks for sharing these very personal feelings.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2008
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Hello! You are the only reviewer to mention the progression of which I wrote! Thank you! Am pleased you enjoyed...diane
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Thanks for the feedback--it's like having a conversation with the artist. Neat.
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Thanks for the feedback--it's like having a conversation with the artist. Neat.
Comment from mtngalofnc
Hi Diane,
Sounds as though she has managed to start a new life and has found the resting point for her troubled soul. This is a very well written free verse which makes me feel as if I were right there enjoying nature with her. Interesting, and the art is perfect. Thank you for sharing and God bless and best wishes!
mtngalofnc
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2008
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Hi Diane,
Sounds as though she has managed to start a new life and has found the resting point for her troubled soul. This is a very well written free verse which makes me feel as if I were right there enjoying nature with her. Interesting, and the art is perfect. Thank you for sharing and God bless and best wishes!
mtngalofnc
Comment Written 17-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2008
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Hello! So pleased you stopped by and enjoyed my offering! diane
Comment from Dave M
Diane,
I haven't looked at your posts for a while, but your banner certificate caught my eye.
I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. It is free verse as it should be, short lines that stand out separately without any trace of breaking in the middle or running into one another.
It sounds like the woman is getting over a disastrous romance, and I can't tell if there is another gathering at the lake or if it is all in her memories. No need to explain, some things in poems should be left to the reader.
Dave M
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Diane,
I haven't looked at your posts for a while, but your banner certificate caught my eye.
I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. It is free verse as it should be, short lines that stand out separately without any trace of breaking in the middle or running into one another.
It sounds like the woman is getting over a disastrous romance, and I can't tell if there is another gathering at the lake or if it is all in her memories. No need to explain, some things in poems should be left to the reader.
Dave M
Comment Written 16-Nov-2008
Comment from sara-beth
This has a lovely flow when reading, and your imagery of the whole scene is very vivid and clear. It's a beautiful piece, really, nothing else to say.
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This has a lovely flow when reading, and your imagery of the whole scene is very vivid and clear. It's a beautiful piece, really, nothing else to say.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2008